Who knows what goes on in there.
Domestic abuse, a dreadful situation13 total reviews
Comment from Kiki12
Wow, what an emotive story in a poem, and sadly, very identifiable to many.
Walls are the witness
of eyes dripping pain--> this alone deserves a six, I'm sorry I have none left.
I think what makes this so powerful is the truth hidden behind the lies, the reality behind closed doors, a different reality than what the rest of the world sees. You did a tremendous job expressing the pain and self-doubt of her own worth.
xx
Kiki
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Wow, what an emotive story in a poem, and sadly, very identifiable to many.
Walls are the witness
of eyes dripping pain--> this alone deserves a six, I'm sorry I have none left.
I think what makes this so powerful is the truth hidden behind the lies, the reality behind closed doors, a different reality than what the rest of the world sees. You did a tremendous job expressing the pain and self-doubt of her own worth.
xx
Kiki
Comment Written 23-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2013
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Thanks Kiki for the glowing review with a virtual six, I am glad you saw the whole meaning of the words in the poem, Mary
Comment from gramalot8
It is so true that we don't know what goes on behind closed doors. Too many women have suffered from the hands of these "pillar of the community" type of guys. Great messae, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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It is so true that we don't know what goes on behind closed doors. Too many women have suffered from the hands of these "pillar of the community" type of guys. Great messae, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great comments and the generous stars.
Comment from adewpearl
violence and pain is all she knows - are all
good use of occasional rhyme including the strong closing line
good alliteration in walls are the witness
a thought-provoking look at what it is like to be a victim of abuse when the abuser has successfully presented himself to the world as a pillar of society
Brooke
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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violence and pain is all she knows - are all
good use of occasional rhyme including the strong closing line
good alliteration in walls are the witness
a thought-provoking look at what it is like to be a victim of abuse when the abuser has successfully presented himself to the world as a pillar of society
Brooke
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review, I appreciate it .
Comment from Quillian
A poem of pain and debasement. You were able to bring the sickening feeling of hearing from a victim of torture. A hard thing to read.
"were' should be where in 'violence and pain is all she knows.'
Good luck with the contest.....
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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A poem of pain and debasement. You were able to bring the sickening feeling of hearing from a victim of torture. A hard thing to read.
"were' should be where in 'violence and pain is all she knows.'
Good luck with the contest.....
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the generous rating of the poem, and I want to thank you also for observing the wrong spelling which I have rectified,
Comment from jb wade
I like the truth you have portrayed with your words. It's hard to imagine still that we do not realy know our family, friends or neighbors. I know we need to reach out and help if anyway possible when brought to our attention. The last stanza is a norm, huh? Such a powerful line 'walls are the witness of eyes dripping pain'. What a painful truth. Thanks for a good read. Keep up the good work. I like your color choices. Makes it easy to read instead of skip over.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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I like the truth you have portrayed with your words. It's hard to imagine still that we do not realy know our family, friends or neighbors. I know we need to reach out and help if anyway possible when brought to our attention. The last stanza is a norm, huh? Such a powerful line 'walls are the witness of eyes dripping pain'. What a painful truth. Thanks for a good read. Keep up the good work. I like your color choices. Makes it easy to read instead of skip over.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much for the detailed review I do appreciate it, it is a dreadful situation for many victims.
Comment from bard owl
Often, it seems, what you see isn't what you get. It is amazing how demonic humans can hide their vicious nature from the general public. This is a very sad contest entry that describes what life can be for a soul terrorized by another. Excellent contest entry.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Often, it seems, what you see isn't what you get. It is amazing how demonic humans can hide their vicious nature from the general public. This is a very sad contest entry that describes what life can be for a soul terrorized by another. Excellent contest entry.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thanks for your review and yes hiding their true identity is second nature to these cowardly beasts. Thanks also for the generous rating.
Comment from Satine Dreaming
Thank you for sharing this glimpse into the terrifying existence of too many women to comprehend! Your words drew me in and strung me along to reveal the painful truth. You have managed to set the scene and say so much with just a few words. Would love to read more of your work!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you for sharing this glimpse into the terrifying existence of too many women to comprehend! Your words drew me in and strung me along to reveal the painful truth. You have managed to set the scene and say so much with just a few words. Would love to read more of your work!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for the glowing review,I really appreciate it.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Poet, this poem and picture very well describes household violence. What a shame that this can happen between two persons that in the beginning love each other enough to be together or even married... Bravo.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Hi, Poet, this poem and picture very well describes household violence. What a shame that this can happen between two persons that in the beginning love each other enough to be together or even married... Bravo.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the great review, I appreciate it.
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Thank you for the great review, I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
There are too many of those doors, hiding brutality. And you are right, the face that is on display to others, is one of a gentleman. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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There are too many of those doors, hiding brutality. And you are right, the face that is on display to others, is one of a gentleman. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thanks Sandra you got right to the point of the poem. I appreciate it.
Comment from Carrie Carson
Oh, this is achingly sad. From all stations they roam. It's good for me to remember all that I have to grateful for.
Don't know enough about free verse to be able to offer constructive criticism.
It's appalling...but a lot of things are when men are charge, I must say. I don't think of myself as Woman's Libber, just observant. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Oh, this is achingly sad. From all stations they roam. It's good for me to remember all that I have to grateful for.
Don't know enough about free verse to be able to offer constructive criticism.
It's appalling...but a lot of things are when men are charge, I must say. I don't think of myself as Woman's Libber, just observant. :) Carrie
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the generous rating and your comments, I appreciate it.