A Collection of Dennis Clough's Wit
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Cold Case Murder in Story Land"Great stuff!
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Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
so lets skip the formalities." (let's)
snow white." (capitalize)
No one had asked him anything for obvious reasons but my boy Pete worked his plan and came up with the man who had seen everything.(comma after reasons and comma after plan)
a most enjoyable story with great humor. Thanks for sharing this~Debbie
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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so lets skip the formalities." (let's)
snow white." (capitalize)
No one had asked him anything for obvious reasons but my boy Pete worked his plan and came up with the man who had seen everything.(comma after reasons and comma after plan)
a most enjoyable story with great humor. Thanks for sharing this~Debbie
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thanks Debbie. I appreciate your taking time to read and comment and especially that you liked it. However "snow white" is used as a pun and not as a proper noun so no caps.. Thx, Dennis
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Very well done, I am so glad to finally find out who pushed Humpty off that wall. I never in a million years suspected the big bad wolf!. This was really fun. rox
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Very well done, I am so glad to finally find out who pushed Humpty off that wall. I never in a million years suspected the big bad wolf!. This was really fun. rox
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thanks Rox! Appreciated, Dennis
Comment from cinderbella
This is really funny and entertaining, as well as one of the most creative pieces of work I have read in a while. It held my attention from beginning to end, and I want more. :)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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This is really funny and entertaining, as well as one of the most creative pieces of work I have read in a while. It held my attention from beginning to end, and I want more. :)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Send me $39.95 and I will send you more! :) Thanks for your kind words...did you used to live here in Story Land? Cinderbella sounds very familiar somehow ... LOL, Dennis
Comment from visionary1234
Denniz this is pure delight! Wow, you've really tightened up your writing style! GREAT writing of dialogue, no junky, superfluous tags ... tongue firmly in cheek the whole way through. I'm IMPRESSED! (And, as you know, that's hard to do).
Some minor stuff:
I like to let 'um('em) know whose(who's) in charge right from the get-go (the 'um or 'em is short for 'them' of course, so is usually written as 'em)
I'm a big fan of the old Jack Webb series, Dragnet("Dragnet" or put it in italics)
"Go get 'um ('em) Tiger
Big smiles to you - this reminds me of a TV program I started to watch last night, which had a similar fun premise - ie. mixing fairytales with a real-life story - I think it was called "Once Upon a Time" (very original! :)))
hugs to you hunny!
Sharyn
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Denniz this is pure delight! Wow, you've really tightened up your writing style! GREAT writing of dialogue, no junky, superfluous tags ... tongue firmly in cheek the whole way through. I'm IMPRESSED! (And, as you know, that's hard to do).
Some minor stuff:
I like to let 'um('em) know whose(who's) in charge right from the get-go (the 'um or 'em is short for 'them' of course, so is usually written as 'em)
I'm a big fan of the old Jack Webb series, Dragnet("Dragnet" or put it in italics)
"Go get 'um ('em) Tiger
Big smiles to you - this reminds me of a TV program I started to watch last night, which had a similar fun premise - ie. mixing fairytales with a real-life story - I think it was called "Once Upon a Time" (very original! :)))
hugs to you hunny!
Sharyn
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you. I live to impress you, as you know. An accolade from you is the equivalent of an Oscar in my little world. I stand in awe of your talent. Feeling the hugs,Dennis
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Don't let it go to your head now, ok?
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It went right to my heart...sigh
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It went right to my heart...sigh
Comment from Zue65
Yay, superbly creative and funny. Pete on tset for some silly case,a joke that back-fired for Pete took the case seriously and solved the mystery of humpty-dumpty with silly witnesses, the popular fairy tale characters. Hilarious I should say, god bless.
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Yay, superbly creative and funny. Pete on tset for some silly case,a joke that back-fired for Pete took the case seriously and solved the mystery of humpty-dumpty with silly witnesses, the popular fairy tale characters. Hilarious I should say, god bless.
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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And God bless you, my friend. So glad you like it. Dennis
Comment from EmmaJoAnderson
Bravo! This is awesome! The whole idea is terrific, and you made it sound believable even tho they were working with fairy tale and nursery rhyme characters. Decidedly worth a six!
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Bravo! This is awesome! The whole idea is terrific, and you made it sound believable even tho they were working with fairy tale and nursery rhyme characters. Decidedly worth a six!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Why thank you! Much appreciated, to say the least. Dennis
