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Comment from cinderbella
Beautiful photography, and I loved the compound sonnet, the rhythm and the rhyme pattern are very catchy, I want to hear them sung :) Beautifully written
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Beautiful photography, and I loved the compound sonnet, the rhythm and the rhyme pattern are very catchy, I want to hear them sung :) Beautifully written
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much cinder Ella.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
What a marvelous feat to accomplish-A compound sonnet.
Well compiled and written and flows perfectly throughout in iambic pentameter.
I really enjoyed the style and rhythm of the poem and I appreciate the sheer cleverness of writing in iambic pentameter and rhyming for 28 lines.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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What a marvelous feat to accomplish-A compound sonnet.
Well compiled and written and flows perfectly throughout in iambic pentameter.
I really enjoyed the style and rhythm of the poem and I appreciate the sheer cleverness of writing in iambic pentameter and rhyming for 28 lines.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much for your appreciation of the task. I am pleased that you liked it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Haven't got a 6 left, Treischel, this poem in lovely. Yes, we need the sun and moon, they shape our everyday lives with their push and pull. So subtly done, we don't notice how much we depend on these amazing cosmos to give us and our planet, life. Excellent writing, and a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Haven't got a 6 left, Treischel, this poem in lovely. Yes, we need the sun and moon, they shape our everyday lives with their push and pull. So subtly done, we don't notice how much we depend on these amazing cosmos to give us and our planet, life. Excellent writing, and a pleasure to read. xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sandra, glad to enjoyed the theme.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent double sonnet written with good iambic pentameter and good rhyme in the form's required rhyme scheme. I enjoyed this one.
Preston
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent double sonnet written with good iambic pentameter and good rhyme in the form's required rhyme scheme. I enjoyed this one.
Preston
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from 9999pool
A great compound sonnet to serenade the day and night in the celestial forces that rule.
The day and night can be pleasant as the rhythm of life unfolded and unfurled.
In any good or bad day, the moon and the sun will bring meaning to our daily lives if we care to look for it somewhere in the undisclosed world we dwell.
Great write and well penned.
cheerio, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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A great compound sonnet to serenade the day and night in the celestial forces that rule.
The day and night can be pleasant as the rhythm of life unfolded and unfurled.
In any good or bad day, the moon and the sun will bring meaning to our daily lives if we care to look for it somewhere in the undisclosed world we dwell.
Great write and well penned.
cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you Ritchie, I believe you understood it perfectly.
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Welcome Tom.
Cheerio, have a great day, smiles, Ritchie.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Treischel,
Dang, I wish I had a six for this amazing poem. I have never heard of a compound sonnet but you have done a stellar job with this one. Your iambic pentameter is spot on, the rhyming perfect, each line has been carefully composed and I love the theme. Well done, ****** chey
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Hi Treischel,
Dang, I wish I had a six for this amazing poem. I have never heard of a compound sonnet but you have done a stellar job with this one. Your iambic pentameter is spot on, the rhyming perfect, each line has been carefully composed and I love the theme. Well done, ****** chey
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you Chey. Just knowing you high opinion is good for me.
Comment from robina1978
Nice photo by you that complements your poems so well. This compound Sonnet seems to be even more difficult than the English one. The best is written in the ending quatrains.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Nice photo by you that complements your poems so well. This compound Sonnet seems to be even more difficult than the English one. The best is written in the ending quatrains.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you Ine. They do add depth.
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welcome, Ine
Comment from Jackarrie
A beautiful poem observing the world around us. Particularly the Sun moon and the planets. There is nothing more spiritual in my opinion observing the night sky and the Sunrise, and Sunsets. Your poem is very well rhymed, I never heard of a compound sonnet, I did not see it in poetry dances. so I am learning. I congratulate you your photograph, easy known you like your photography.
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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A beautiful poem observing the world around us. Particularly the Sun moon and the planets. There is nothing more spiritual in my opinion observing the night sky and the Sunrise, and Sunsets. Your poem is very well rhymed, I never heard of a compound sonnet, I did not see it in poetry dances. so I am learning. I congratulate you your photograph, easy known you like your photography.
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you Mary, I hadn't heard of one either until I reviewed one from Gungalo.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I completely enjoyed this one. As I read the poem and got into the form, I actually thought of Gungalo. She is an amazing poet and uses so many different forms in her writes. I was not at all surprised that the inspiration came from her. Tom, you did an outstanding job. It was an easy read to follow and comprehend, children at play, projects getting done, night or day , hours passing without delay. :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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I completely enjoyed this one. As I read the poem and got into the form, I actually thought of Gungalo. She is an amazing poet and uses so many different forms in her writes. I was not at all surprised that the inspiration came from her. Tom, you did an outstanding job. It was an easy read to follow and comprehend, children at play, projects getting done, night or day , hours passing without delay. :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you Carolyn. Yes, she is amazing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful compound sonnet about the sounds of the night. it should be rhythms instead of rhythm's
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful compound sonnet about the sounds of the night. it should be rhythms instead of rhythm's
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you sweetwoodjax. Yes, I'll fix that.
