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Comment from Joan E.
My, you are prolific these days. I enjoyed your less usual rhyme scheme in these quatrains. I liked your alliteration of "s's" in the first stanza (I think the "s" got lost on "churns".) Thank you for sharing your declaration of faith. -Joan
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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My, you are prolific these days. I enjoyed your less usual rhyme scheme in these quatrains. I liked your alliteration of "s's" in the first stanza (I think the "s" got lost on "churns".) Thank you for sharing your declaration of faith. -Joan
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you Joan, I like that and made the change.
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Thanks for your gracious response. Happy weekend- Joan
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with strong rhyme and rhythm. It follows an excellent rhyme scheme fairly consistently. It has good figurative language. I enjoyed this one.
Preston
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent poem with strong rhyme and rhythm. It follows an excellent rhyme scheme fairly consistently. It has good figurative language. I enjoyed this one.
Preston
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thanks Preston.
Comment from sunnilicious
So you ate McNuggets too... I like the Buffalo Sauce.
Anyways, this poem came out better than I thought. Enjoyable spiritual read. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice artwork. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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So you ate McNuggets too... I like the Buffalo Sauce.
Anyways, this poem came out better than I thought. Enjoyable spiritual read. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhymes. Nice artwork. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you sunnilicious. Surprised you, huh. That title set other expectations?
Comment from Sararb
A very good poem about resisting temptations, that all of us face at one time or another, unfortunately we all aren't strong enough to resist them. This poem illustrates that faith was the protection here. Great job! Sararb :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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A very good poem about resisting temptations, that all of us face at one time or another, unfortunately we all aren't strong enough to resist them. This poem illustrates that faith was the protection here. Great job! Sararb :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you Sara. Yup, we are only human.
Comment from MissMerri
Your points are excellent and splendidly articulated. The poem flows in an easy sequence and comes to a satisfying conclusion. It is easy to follow the progression of thought and I enjoyed this reading experience very much. I saw no changes that needed to be made. It is just right in presentation and content. Lovely.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Your points are excellent and splendidly articulated. The poem flows in an easy sequence and comes to a satisfying conclusion. It is easy to follow the progression of thought and I enjoyed this reading experience very much. I saw no changes that needed to be made. It is just right in presentation and content. Lovely.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you MissMeeri for you concise review.
Comment from Starlit Ink
With faith we can overcome temptations, although there are many. It is a constant struggle, since we humans are weak, and the piper is at every turn, with another temptation. I like how your poem honestly states that you are weak without your Savior. Very nice.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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With faith we can overcome temptations, although there are many. It is a constant struggle, since we humans are weak, and the piper is at every turn, with another temptation. I like how your poem honestly states that you are weak without your Savior. Very nice.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2013
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Thank you Star Ink. So true.
