The Power of One
Where does true power come from27 total reviews
Comment from EMB
The beginning of this reminded me of Icarus and my own musing of escape. The bully part of the story was not what I expected, and it was told with mastery.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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The beginning of this reminded me of Icarus and my own musing of escape. The bully part of the story was not what I expected, and it was told with mastery.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2013
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Thank you that means a lot coming from you.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Interesting. I was wondering where the story was going from the begining. We need more like him in every school to take on the bullies. LOL Nice he fell in love and now he won't be so alone, well done Nancy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Interesting. I was wondering where the story was going from the begining. We need more like him in every school to take on the bullies. LOL Nice he fell in love and now he won't be so alone, well done Nancy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from barleygirl
This is an unusual story with a cryptic message and even tho I don't think I totally "got it" . . . still I recognize the great writing & the tight construction of this piece. I love the several places where the kid goes off on thoughts which are quite brilliant & observant. I'm not sure what this guy's supernatural powers are . . .
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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This is an unusual story with a cryptic message and even tho I don't think I totally "got it" . . . still I recognize the great writing & the tight construction of this piece. I love the several places where the kid goes off on thoughts which are quite brilliant & observant. I'm not sure what this guy's supernatural powers are . . .
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you. To be honest, I don't know what all of them are as I write his second story. I just realized I don't know his name. :)
Comment from Matoshka
I enjoyed this from beginning to end. The flow was so smooth and you created a solid visual. I am glad you weren't like them and in true life, this is a solid message people should heed. Many blessings and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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I enjoyed this from beginning to end. The flow was so smooth and you created a solid visual. I am glad you weren't like them and in true life, this is a solid message people should heed. Many blessings and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you
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You are so welcome. I enjoyed it. Blessings
Comment from lakeport
the power of one, indeed there are very mysterious things going on, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport....
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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the power of one, indeed there are very mysterious things going on, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport....
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you
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your welcome.lakeport.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
MEANING UNCLEAR:
"They had no hope of rising, so tried to lower everyone else."
Supernatural aside, as to the piece the stream of consciousness propels the story. In that sense a story board of cartoon characters, each in a celluloid Disney cell flick across the screen going faster and faster until they seem to be in full flight. As to Li Ming, I'm not sure of her connection to the speaker but then again is it really important? A good read.
Regards:
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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MEANING UNCLEAR:
"They had no hope of rising, so tried to lower everyone else."
Supernatural aside, as to the piece the stream of consciousness propels the story. In that sense a story board of cartoon characters, each in a celluloid Disney cell flick across the screen going faster and faster until they seem to be in full flight. As to Li Ming, I'm not sure of her connection to the speaker but then again is it really important? A good read.
Regards:
Comment Written 17-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you. The meaning of that line is that sometimes those who do not want or hope to better themselves take pleasure and purpose from trying to bring down those around them. If you can not go faster then make everyone else go slower.
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Dear L: Nice to hear from you again. I agree with your premise, "If you can not go faster then make everyone else go slower." As to your moniker lancellot, you might be interested in a medieval ballad I wrote called,'Coeurinere'.
Thanks: Steve C
Comment from Gungalo
Boy for a flash fiction this one really had me going. It's an awesome write and I'd like to read more. If you get around to it that is.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Boy for a flash fiction this one really had me going. It's an awesome write and I'd like to read more. If you get around to it that is.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much. I have been mulling that over.
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Well ....
Comment from Spitfire
Ooh, the bullies messed with the wrong quy. Excellent writing that keeps the suspense and mystery going.
I hated fighting normal people. It's always like walking on egg shells. -- this are the best lines IMO, but the entire story is a gem. I do wish I had a sixer to give you. But I can vote for you!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Ooh, the bullies messed with the wrong quy. Excellent writing that keeps the suspense and mystery going.
I hated fighting normal people. It's always like walking on egg shells. -- this are the best lines IMO, but the entire story is a gem. I do wish I had a sixer to give you. But I can vote for you!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2013
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Thank you. The contest is over, but I appreciate the thought.
Comment from BunnyS
Nice story. It's always awesome when the good guy wins the girl... and the battle. I hate bullies and love it when they get theirs. The story is interesting, creative and very clever. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Nice story. It's always awesome when the good guy wins the girl... and the battle. I hate bullies and love it when they get theirs. The story is interesting, creative and very clever. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you
Comment from w.j.debi
Creative world you have invented. Interesting first line to capture the reader's attention. Good dialog and interesting narrative. Nice ending. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Creative world you have invented. Interesting first line to capture the reader's attention. Good dialog and interesting narrative. Nice ending. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2013
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Thank you
