Faith
Acrostic11 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
a solid acrostic for Faith
good alliteration in depths of despair
solid rhyming
good consonance of T sounds
A beautiful expression of faith and an appreciation of how faith takes us through our darkest trials
effective storm imagery
Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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a solid acrostic for Faith
good alliteration in depths of despair
solid rhyming
good consonance of T sounds
A beautiful expression of faith and an appreciation of how faith takes us through our darkest trials
effective storm imagery
Brooke
Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
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Thank you ,Brooke .
Comment from Katzintx
You brought the sense with you words of a moment in faith, the traditional acrostic pattern embraced with rhythm. In my opinion The flow broke at the last two lines, it may be that it is when you shifted from direct end ryhme to family ryhme I felt a disconnect. Good job.
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You brought the sense with you words of a moment in faith, the traditional acrostic pattern embraced with rhythm. In my opinion The flow broke at the last two lines, it may be that it is when you shifted from direct end ryhme to family ryhme I felt a disconnect. Good job.
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Comment Written 10-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much for reviewing my work .i am afraid i am not good at technicalities of the poem writing .i just write what comes to my mind .may i ask what is family rhyme?
In â??family rhyme," rhyming is based on phonetic similarities.
despair / ensnare direct rhyme
boat /afloat direct rhyme
boat/float..close. Share vowel sound with a different consonant at end, Encyclopedia of Poetry and
Poetics.section on consonant
groupings can give you more detail if your interested.
Your poem is beautiful and amazing. you are gifted in that it just comes to mind.i look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the faith that helps us through the storms. good luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the faith that helps us through the storms. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very muckh
Comment from june prescott
Very nicely done. A very descriptive view of faith you described in this acrostic. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Very nicely done. A very descriptive view of faith you described in this acrostic. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much
Comment from kiwigirl2821
I love the thoughts in your acrostic but I will point out just in case it matters to the voting power, An acrostic has to have the same TITLE as the acrostic to be a true one. In your case the title would be FAITH. The "What Keeps Me Afloat" would be the subject of the poem or in author's notes. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
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I love the thoughts in your acrostic but I will point out just in case it matters to the voting power, An acrostic has to have the same TITLE as the acrostic to be a true one. In your case the title would be FAITH. The "What Keeps Me Afloat" would be the subject of the poem or in author's notes. Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much for reviewing and for pointing out the mistake .i did make my correction ,but not before the voting started.i look after my aged mother so my time i get is limited .I should have realised that ,silly me .
Comment from ennahanid
Your art choice and color choice really pull the reader in to want to read you - this is a grand entry for the contest and I wish you luck - Dinah
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Your art choice and color choice really pull the reader in to want to read you - this is a grand entry for the contest and I wish you luck - Dinah
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much
Comment from Econ Teacher
Faith is having belief in what you can't see in both the good times and in the bad times. That is the strength of this poem. The faith is still there during the storms and rocky times and the author manages to still stay afloat thanks to their faith.
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Faith is having belief in what you can't see in both the good times and in the bad times. That is the strength of this poem. The faith is still there during the storms and rocky times and the author manages to still stay afloat thanks to their faith.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much
Comment from elchupakabra
I like this, it's simple and open to interpretation, really expresses that lonely feeling of seeking hope and faith and finding something to hold on to. I also quite like your illustration. Good luck in the contest!
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I like this, it's simple and open to interpretation, really expresses that lonely feeling of seeking hope and faith and finding something to hold on to. I also quite like your illustration. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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thank you very much
Comment from SteveY
Nice job in creating this little poem. Well written, and carried a positive message of togetherness. Short, sweet, and to the point.
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Nice job in creating this little poem. Well written, and carried a positive message of togetherness. Short, sweet, and to the point.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much
Comment from Supe
I do like MoonWillows are work. Nicely chosen for this acrostic poem. You described Faith nicely, flowing from start to finish. I hope you do well in the contest. The colors you chose are very effective.
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I do like MoonWillows are work. Nicely chosen for this acrostic poem. You described Faith nicely, flowing from start to finish. I hope you do well in the contest. The colors you chose are very effective.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
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Thank you very much.