Fate
Brats and bullies do change in time.52 total reviews
Comment from tbacha58
A very strong verse, nice picture, and growing up, I think one can change and adapt to change when ready to fight any battle that occurs in our daily lives. Sometimes it is difficult. Terry
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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A very strong verse, nice picture, and growing up, I think one can change and adapt to change when ready to fight any battle that occurs in our daily lives. Sometimes it is difficult. Terry
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2013
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Thanks Terry for the wonderful review and the 5 stars, God bless.
Comment from Janelle
cleverly drafted poem in perfect alignment with the rules of the comp. The picture gives the impression of a war time scenario, which it could be, but I think the poem covers bullies and young boys growing up and out of their pack like behaviour into better men. I think this poem is a strong contender in the comp and I wish you well. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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cleverly drafted poem in perfect alignment with the rules of the comp. The picture gives the impression of a war time scenario, which it could be, but I think the poem covers bullies and young boys growing up and out of their pack like behaviour into better men. I think this poem is a strong contender in the comp and I wish you well. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thanks Janelle for the very warm review, I am humbled, God bless.
Comment from GracieAnn
This Nonet Poem Contest writing prompt entry contains powerful imagery in the lines "where brats and bullies shed their skin tamed by age, matured with grace". Interesting play on the words "shed their skin" as a snake or in death. The tally are notches in the belt of war, sadly. Interesting write. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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This Nonet Poem Contest writing prompt entry contains powerful imagery in the lines "where brats and bullies shed their skin tamed by age, matured with grace". Interesting play on the words "shed their skin" as a snake or in death. The tally are notches in the belt of war, sadly. Interesting write. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 09-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2013
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Thanks GracieAnn for your warm compliment, considering the poem an interesting write. God bless.
Comment from Adri7enne
Good one. The syllable count reduces by one each line, but the over all effect is lovely. I like the message. Even bullies have to grow up - some of them better than others. There's no doubt fate evens the scores. Well done, and good luck in the contest, nassus.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Good one. The syllable count reduces by one each line, but the over all effect is lovely. I like the message. Even bullies have to grow up - some of them better than others. There's no doubt fate evens the scores. Well done, and good luck in the contest, nassus.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks Adri7enne, for this inspiring review and the 5 stars too, God bless.
Comment from Darkhorse555
From the pictured photograph traveled many paths shedding their skin the grace they find in gods true hands you penned a lovely piece
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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From the pictured photograph traveled many paths shedding their skin the grace they find in gods true hands you penned a lovely piece
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks Darkhorse555, for this warm review, thanks too for the 5 stars. God bless.
Comment from Chikara
At first I was under impression this is a war story because of the picture but after reading it I am no so sure. I'm still thinking it's the perspective of a soldier.
Anyway, review.
'where brats and bullies shed their skin' is telling of wartime, where facades are shed by blood and death.
What follows is crisp and smooth, leaving me (almost) certain of the subject material.
The blood red tone sets your mood well and your flow is perfectly executed.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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At first I was under impression this is a war story because of the picture but after reading it I am no so sure. I'm still thinking it's the perspective of a soldier.
Anyway, review.
'where brats and bullies shed their skin' is telling of wartime, where facades are shed by blood and death.
What follows is crisp and smooth, leaving me (almost) certain of the subject material.
The blood red tone sets your mood well and your flow is perfectly executed.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks knihTtsuJ for this intelligent review, thanks for the 5 stars too, God bless.
Comment from dmt1967
It is good when bullies grow up and change I have known bullies to stay the same as well a adult bully is a lot worse than a child bully at times I think good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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It is good when bullies grow up and change I have known bullies to stay the same as well a adult bully is a lot worse than a child bully at times I think good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks dmt1967 for reading the poem and the 5 stars. Thanks a lot, God bless.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Friend,
It's a nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Nonet' depicting fate as its theme in simple wording with smooth flow and nice imagery. If you don't mind, please count the syllables particularly in the 1st line.
Nice attempt! Good Luck!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Hello Friend,
It's a nice piece of poetry in the form of 'Nonet' depicting fate as its theme in simple wording with smooth flow and nice imagery. If you don't mind, please count the syllables particularly in the 1st line.
Nice attempt! Good Luck!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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I counted it my friend, it is nine syllables for the first line, thanks a lot, God bless.
Comment from J R Muller
Terrific work mystery writer, A well painted scape in such few words and an apt picture to fit the bill. best of luck for the competition!
Great job
regards
Jeremy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Terrific work mystery writer, A well painted scape in such few words and an apt picture to fit the bill. best of luck for the competition!
Great job
regards
Jeremy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks Jeremy for the inspiring review, God bless.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Too true. Positive change is always possible and even more likely in the light of God's love.
Destiny of all, good or bad, is surely in God's hands.
Written, formatted and suited to a nonet.
A great subject choice and picture.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Too true. Positive change is always possible and even more likely in the light of God's love.
Destiny of all, good or bad, is surely in God's hands.
Written, formatted and suited to a nonet.
A great subject choice and picture.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Thanks seken58, I always appreciate your positive review, God bless.