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Thoughts Make A Billionaire?

Really? A Non-Fiction in 222 words.

92 total reviews 
Comment from Kidlike101
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I found the main message in this piece interesting however it was scattered all over the place.

This one has potential but requires some refinement dear author.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from writerwish
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This is so different from what I usually read on here. The unpredictability of our lives.. you nailed that thought. I like what you said about change being permanent.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from God's Writer
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What a great short story. As usual a grand treat from your pen. I look forward to reading everything you write. It is a real treat for me.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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Your words ring true in places..
nothing is what we expect, so
the best thing is to expect
nothing, and whatever comes
is a bonus.

I enjoyed reading this, but there are punctuation issues
to look at.

make mistake(s)

Margaret

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from Spiritual Echo
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Writer, I am responding to your sudden passion to display your words on some media message board and some part of me admires your conviction. You seem quite willing to empty your bank account in order to be heard. But, is anyone listening? Are they simply collecting the points you so frivolously spray over the site or are they actually reading your words?

I suspect you don't care. You have latched unto God and presented yourself as some holy missionary with innate judgement, but based on a very poor standard of literary interpretation and a flawed perspective.

If you choose God as a topic and elect to be his champion in this mortal world, at the very least, He is deserving of more intellectual thought and a determination by his child to offer up some level of deep determination, if nothing else to present his presence in your life with some honesty.

I think you should work a little harder if you really believe anything you are posting.

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 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from Dean Kuch
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Question = Q
Answer = A; Dean K
Alcreator Litt Dear = Al


Q-Are you thinking or dreaming, my dear, by God speaking I read your face, you are expecting everything to happen as you think, I know, many of us do the same.... -AL

A-Well, to tell you the truth Al, I have been doing a little thinking, and a LOT of dreaming lately. But I certainly don't expect things to turn out just as I envision them to. I have no problems letting God do all of my speaking for me, if He so chooses to. Gets me off the hook. Besides, have you ever tried to win an argument with The All-Mighty? It's not happenin', my friend!.. -Dean K.


Q-Do you,by the by, speak out the truth, dear? I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts, we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable, I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future, only we may think, still we make mistake, just we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future.... -Al

A- Ya' know Al, funny you should bring up that whole 'foreseeing the future' thingy. I once had a medium tell me that I was going to die in a terrible car accident, in Florida, at age 56. I am 53 years old now, and unless I get a HUMONGOUS book deal that I have to go to the Sunshine state to sign, I don't expect I'll be spending any time there any day soon. That should alter the course of fate, if she's right...right?.... -Dean K.

Q-Do you think that you will marry that very fair village girl; her family, your family, the villagers and others will support you happily and you will get the pawn of cash, gold jewellery, motor bike, a fertiliser shop on your wedding day, you will settle at in-laws' and your parent-in-law will gift their movable and immovable property to their only daughter who will transfer the same property in your favour and you'll be a billionaire?.....-Al

A-No, no 'village girls' for me, Al, my current wife wouldn't approve. Why, do you know any? Sorry, I digress. Anywho, she never came from a village, as far as I know. Well, I guess technically, Winchester is considered a village, not a town or a city. So yeah, I guess I did marry a village girl after all. But her family had very little cash when we got hitched, and no gold jewelry or motor bikes. No fertilizer shops were seen either, but they did have a 4x4 wheeler, and an extremely nasty septic tank problem that smelled like...well, you get the drift.....Dean K.

Q-But, will everything happen as you think, dear? I know nothing happens as we think, wish or expect; we never take cognizance of the environment, time, people, peoples' thoughts, systems, society, laws, customs, conventions, and above all God, often many of us forget our limited ability, power or deservedness and that change is permanent..... Al

A-Yeah, you're sure right about that! NOTHING ever happens as I picture it happening. Although, there was this one night, after my senior prom that...Well, we won't go there. But, it rarely happens the way I envision it to. You gotta' take your environment into account, absolutely. And, I believe we've covered the God thing in an earlier question. He's always right, no matter what......... -Dean Kuch

6 out of 6 'KUCH' stars
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 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from PrincessinPurple
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This is an interesting view. I have read this I am not sure what to really think of this. Not to sure if I agree with this or not.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from NicciFaye
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I found this with bits and pieces of truth scattered throughout this small write. Those who try to attempt to be this billionare, whatever case, money will have people do strange things.

This with your writing it is hard to read at times, but what I like about you is that you don't give up....even with your limited education.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from hargunanand
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Interesting easy say of becoming a billionaire, I like the flow of word in the story, spontaneous. Great work enjoyed the read.excellent.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013

Comment from Curly Girly
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Considering your limited English ability, you have managed to express this well enough for me to understand. What you say is perfectly true. We do not know the future and often what we think will happen does not happen. But we still try to plan things...
Ultimately, we must learn to live as peacefully as possible with the way things work out.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2013