Thoughts Make A Billionaire?
Really? A Non-Fiction in 222 words.92 total reviews
Comment from Sueellen11
Great write my friend,, yes there is a lot o be said about the old days dowry,, wow, thought many would think a fertilising shop/plant,,, a bit of a crappy gift,,, but there is big money in fertiliser,,,, yes big thoughts make billionaires,,, blessings, sueellen
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Great write my friend,, yes there is a lot o be said about the old days dowry,, wow, thought many would think a fertilising shop/plant,,, a bit of a crappy gift,,, but there is big money in fertiliser,,,, yes big thoughts make billionaires,,, blessings, sueellen
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
Comment from teafor2
Alcreator Litt Dear--An intriguing prose-like structure,
reading like a soliloquy. Yes, truth/reality is often
stranger than fiction: I was once in a country where
waving with the let hand is an insult...now imagine being
left-handed in that environment! Excellent render of the
true meaning of cultural differences. :) teafor2
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Alcreator Litt Dear--An intriguing prose-like structure,
reading like a soliloquy. Yes, truth/reality is often
stranger than fiction: I was once in a country where
waving with the let hand is an insult...now imagine being
left-handed in that environment! Excellent render of the
true meaning of cultural differences. :) teafor2
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
Comment from mary_chiwhi_kim
Some fine ideas feature here which I'm having difficulty absorbing because of the last of context (needed in a short piece at the very start) and the run-on sentences prevailing throughout the work. Paragraph 3 at least becomes concrete in terms of establishing some kind of place in time and space but again the run-on sentences and the collapse of time (the village girl wife who the you hasn't married has passed on her property (i.e., passed away already) to the you husband) undercut clarity. I realize this piece has been highly rated but wish to give honest feedback--enabling growth--to further enhance your writing.
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Some fine ideas feature here which I'm having difficulty absorbing because of the last of context (needed in a short piece at the very start) and the run-on sentences prevailing throughout the work. Paragraph 3 at least becomes concrete in terms of establishing some kind of place in time and space but again the run-on sentences and the collapse of time (the village girl wife who the you hasn't married has passed on her property (i.e., passed away already) to the you husband) undercut clarity. I realize this piece has been highly rated but wish to give honest feedback--enabling growth--to further enhance your writing.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2013
Comment from lakeport
Thoughts make a billionaire, indeed if they are creative thoughts. I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport....
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Thoughts make a billionaire, indeed if they are creative thoughts. I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Lakeport....
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this is well written I think what you are trying to say is that we all have different expectations in life well done on this write regards Jill
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Hello my friend this is well written I think what you are trying to say is that we all have different expectations in life well done on this write regards Jill
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
Comment from Janilou
I understand you are trying to make a point. I'm just not for certain what it is.
This has some spag that needs to be cleared up. For example:
By the by, speak out the truth, dear. I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts. We know the future is invisible, unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable. I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future. only we may think, still we make mistake, just we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future....
This sentence begins with a run-on. Suggestion:
By the by, speak out the truth, dear; I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts, we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable, I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future. Only we may think, still we make mistake(s), just (as) we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future....
I'm sorry. This just isn't making a lot of sense to me.
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I understand you are trying to make a point. I'm just not for certain what it is.
This has some spag that needs to be cleared up. For example:
By the by, speak out the truth, dear. I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts. We know the future is invisible, unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable. I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future. only we may think, still we make mistake, just we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future....
This sentence begins with a run-on. Suggestion:
By the by, speak out the truth, dear; I think of your state of mind and the volume of your thoughts, we know the future is invisible-unforeseeable, indefinite and inevitably changeable, I mean, we cannot predict or forecast the future. Only we may think, still we make mistake(s), just (as) we calculate, we love to believe in our own mathematics, while we can't see the future....
I'm sorry. This just isn't making a lot of sense to me.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
Comment from Ben Colder
I read this and wonder the motivation behind the scene. Your bio claims a self admission of being a fool. The Holy scriptures refer to you as being a person who says there is no God. Surly you have over spoken.
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I read this and wonder the motivation behind the scene. Your bio claims a self admission of being a fool. The Holy scriptures refer to you as being a person who says there is no God. Surly you have over spoken.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Thoughts Make A Billionaire?' is an extremely well-written and intriguing story. This talented writer has with craft and skill, told it as it is. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard.
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'Thoughts Make A Billionaire?' is an extremely well-written and intriguing story. This talented writer has with craft and skill, told it as it is. It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this standard.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2013
Comment from sujo1964
An interesting excerpt on life's expectations and how they may be different than what God sees for us. It was a little confusing at time, a little rambling in places, but an interesting concept.
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An interesting excerpt on life's expectations and how they may be different than what God sees for us. It was a little confusing at time, a little rambling in places, but an interesting concept.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013
Comment from Gungalo
Well it got me to thinking and I think change is permanent. After all this time, only now we are thinking of this? Wonder how the other half lives?
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Well it got me to thinking and I think change is permanent. After all this time, only now we are thinking of this? Wonder how the other half lives?
Comment Written 02-Aug-2013