Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "A Race to the Finish"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from Ulla
Hahahah, another fine chapter, Beth. I know how careless we were when young, but I'm not so sure I could have lived with a broken window for that long. I loved the story about the christmas tree. Just one minor thing: it make no sense = it made no sense. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Hahahah, another fine chapter, Beth. I know how careless we were when young, but I'm not so sure I could have lived with a broken window for that long. I loved the story about the christmas tree. Just one minor thing: it make no sense = it made no sense. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you Ulla I"m so glad you still enjoying these stories.
Beth
Comment from Judy Lawless
I have no idea how you did all of that, Beth! My brain would be frozen from trying to study for all those different courses. I applaud you. I laughed about you trying to chase down the car. I had a similar experience just a couple of weeks ago on a city street! Jim dropped me off at a restaurant where I was meeting some friends. Before I remembered I needed my mask out of the car, he was gone! I started to run. Fortunately, he was the third car from the next corner and stopped at a red light when I caught up to him!
This is very well written and fun to read, Beth.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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I have no idea how you did all of that, Beth! My brain would be frozen from trying to study for all those different courses. I applaud you. I laughed about you trying to chase down the car. I had a similar experience just a couple of weeks ago on a city street! Jim dropped me off at a restaurant where I was meeting some friends. Before I remembered I needed my mask out of the car, he was gone! I started to run. Fortunately, he was the third car from the next corner and stopped at a red light when I caught up to him!
This is very well written and fun to read, Beth.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the review, Judy. I glad you were able to catch the car you were chasing. My knees won't allow me to chase cars anymore. Thankful I learned to drive and I don't need to very often.
Beth
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That was the first time in a long time I've run that hard! I almost gave up. I'm sure the other drivers were getting a laugh. I just walked up to his stopped car, opened the door, grabbed my mask from inside the door and walked away. ha ha
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a fun chapter. I can't believe our husband's friends were so mean to you. I guess they were young. You have had a long marriage so your husband was a nice man.
Have you published this as a book?
I like the cute pictures you use.
Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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This is a fun chapter. I can't believe our husband's friends were so mean to you. I guess they were young. You have had a long marriage so your husband was a nice man.
Have you published this as a book?
I like the cute pictures you use.
Well done.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2021
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Thank you Lisa, No I've had a couple of short stories published but I'm published this as book. I hope to at some point.
Beth
Comment from joelh605
Christmas day we drove the sixty miles to our parents homes
needs an apostrophe, parents' [[ plural parents, plural possessive parents' ]]
LOL you tell a jolly story, Beth - enjoyed this one so much I ignored the typo; full marks!
-Joel
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Christmas day we drove the sixty miles to our parents homes
needs an apostrophe, parents' [[ plural parents, plural possessive parents' ]]
LOL you tell a jolly story, Beth - enjoyed this one so much I ignored the typo; full marks!
-Joel
Comment Written 08-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2013
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Joel, I so glad you liked this one. I apprecaite the five star rating. I've fixed the apostrophe.
Beth
Comment from AlvinTEthington
What a touching story! You describe the franticness of early adulthood and the last of college. (I met my lover when I was 20 and we were together for 20 years.) By the way, technically, you can leave the Christmas tree up until Candlemas (Feb. 2.) The story flows very smoothly and you kept my interest throughout. You also created a great deal of sympathy for the main character. I could definitely empathize with your trials and tribulations.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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What a touching story! You describe the franticness of early adulthood and the last of college. (I met my lover when I was 20 and we were together for 20 years.) By the way, technically, you can leave the Christmas tree up until Candlemas (Feb. 2.) The story flows very smoothly and you kept my interest throughout. You also created a great deal of sympathy for the main character. I could definitely empathize with your trials and tribulations.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thanks again Alvin. I'm really happy you found this worthy of the six star rating. I'm so glad you can relate to this story. I'm sorry your relationship ended after twenty years but still that isn't a bad record. I hope you are in a happy relationship now.
Beth
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I am single, but my ex and I (he remarried) get along very well. Thanks for caring.
Comment from Samuel Dickens
Oh, those early days of learning to live in this world as so-called "adults"! You didn't do so badly, compared to some. (namely me)
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Oh, those early days of learning to live in this world as so-called "adults"! You didn't do so badly, compared to some. (namely me)
Comment Written 01-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2013
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Thank you Samuel. No, it really wasn't so bad most of the time. I'm just touching on things that we smile about now that we've matured a bit. I know many people had it a lot worse.
Beth
Comment from barleygirl
Nice story about a stretch in the life of a college student. The first anecdote, about chasing cars, seemed to be going in a different direction. Seemed you were going to focus in more specifically what hubby thought about this kidding. The end of the anecdote seemed a little "blah" after the build-up. Also, the writing could be improved by showing some things by using dialogue. For example, SHOW us how happy you were when your hubby came home with a tree, after all. Just some suggestions, but even without any changes, your writing is clear & concise, & your story is strong & easy to follow.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Nice story about a stretch in the life of a college student. The first anecdote, about chasing cars, seemed to be going in a different direction. Seemed you were going to focus in more specifically what hubby thought about this kidding. The end of the anecdote seemed a little "blah" after the build-up. Also, the writing could be improved by showing some things by using dialogue. For example, SHOW us how happy you were when your hubby came home with a tree, after all. Just some suggestions, but even without any changes, your writing is clear & concise, & your story is strong & easy to follow.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review, the comments and suggestions. If this was a regular story, I would have put in a lot of dialogue. It is an ongoing piece with many chapters and it is too late to make this one vastly different from the rest. I did change the opening paragraph to try to put in something of a hook as someone suggested. I guess that put too much buildup on the parking lot incident. I hadn't planned on giving it more emphisis that other events.
Beth
Comment from H Darwin Reeves
Good job. All who have experienced the early marriage "learning curve" can certainly identify with this piece. We may not have the exact same experiences but we have all experienced these to some degree. I especially liked the parking lot scene. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Good job. All who have experienced the early marriage "learning curve" can certainly identify with this piece. We may not have the exact same experiences but we have all experienced these to some degree. I especially liked the parking lot scene. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting on this . I'm sure these events are unique to me. Thanks for telling me what you liked best.
Beth
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Some of your panic episodes and over=extensions of duites have a near parallel with mine. I've tended to have too much going at the same time, though I've escaped your extreme academic load.
You're so straight forward, Beth, in sharing your emotions and reactions to frustrations.
It's real candor to tell about your teddy bear.
I'm thrilled you made the college work.
Don
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Some of your panic episodes and over=extensions of duites have a near parallel with mine. I've tended to have too much going at the same time, though I've escaped your extreme academic load.
You're so straight forward, Beth, in sharing your emotions and reactions to frustrations.
It's real candor to tell about your teddy bear.
I'm thrilled you made the college work.
Don
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Don. I really appreciate your review and comments. I had had one year of college before I got married. Afterward, I wanted to complete the four year degree for a BA in two years instead of three. It meant taking a lot of course each semester and going to school two summers. I did it with fairly decent grades.
Beth
Comment from balloonmom
I laughed the whole way through this because I could relate way too much! I could have written a similar piece with just slightly different details. :-) This was wonderfully written...easy to read, with a nice flow. Thank you for sharing and starting my day out chuckling.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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I laughed the whole way through this because I could relate way too much! I could have written a similar piece with just slightly different details. :-) This was wonderfully written...easy to read, with a nice flow. Thank you for sharing and starting my day out chuckling.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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I'm glad you enjoyed the humor in this. I'm sure those days aren't so unique. Many people say they can remember times much like these. Thank for reading and for the stars.
Beth
