Comment from
DanielEkine
this is not a general poetry, but a remarkable humor poetry. I like it and you did a good job I must say.it is more like a story. nice work but definitely needs some arrangement.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
Hi: Do you have any suggestions?
Norm
reply by DanielEkine on 24-Jul-2013
yes a little more arrangement so the other readers would perceive your work as a serious writer. it goes a long way.
Comment from
SteveY
A nice story written in kind of some sort of poetic format but I have to disagree with the notion that there's no such thing as serenity. Absolutely there is.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
Steve: How did you achieve serenity?
Norm
Comment from
GaryCecil
I had fun with this work and enjoyed it. I think you are onto something here.
Take a snooze
Cause when you wake up
The sun'll be shining through
Remember
Temporary insanity
Temporary serenity
Great ^^^
Comment Written 24-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2013
Gary: I am glad you thought the writing fun. I was a bit worrried as I have two more of the same to post.
Norm