I Don't Know Why
A Non-Fiction in about 800 words.Why it happens.............88 total reviews
Comment from Ira White
Well, you're on the wrong site to have all that happen! Seriously, I found a couple of little problems with your prose.
"Every end-evening I think I shall stay and live in my friends and enjoy living with them across the globe for months."
How do you live in your friends?
"Quite often I think I shall never take personal loans, keep good relation with everyone known to me across the globe."
In this case, the word "relation" should be plural.
"Why always something else happens to me?
Needs the word "does" inserted between why and always.
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Well, you're on the wrong site to have all that happen! Seriously, I found a couple of little problems with your prose.
"Every end-evening I think I shall stay and live in my friends and enjoy living with them across the globe for months."
How do you live in your friends?
"Quite often I think I shall never take personal loans, keep good relation with everyone known to me across the globe."
In this case, the word "relation" should be plural.
"Why always something else happens to me?
Needs the word "does" inserted between why and always.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Al,
This is a creative write and one I enjoyed reading from the very first line. I think we all have lofty ambitions but sadly we don't get to do them all. The time goes so fast that I can't believe it when it's time to go to bed. I really like this innovative write. Well done, chey
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Hi Al,
This is a creative write and one I enjoyed reading from the very first line. I think we all have lofty ambitions but sadly we don't get to do them all. The time goes so fast that I can't believe it when it's time to go to bed. I really like this innovative write. Well done, chey
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
I wish to get the best or most out of living. I know I live once. In life there are no retakes. Still.....
We're all just passing time until death. Doesn't matter what you do to distract yourself. So keep reviewing my friend.
Every Sunday I think I shall be a world record performer in my chosen fields or proficiency, the topmost litterateur. Almost every Saturday I think I shall get most reviews with most 6-star rated comments and the most All Time Best Certificates.
Atleast you have your goals. Empty and meaningless as they may be.
Often I wish I should have proficiency in 30 foreign languages, get my works published in 100 languages, get awards on my books.
Very few writers get any recognition for their work let alone paid. Take what you can get.
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I wish to get the best or most out of living. I know I live once. In life there are no retakes. Still.....
We're all just passing time until death. Doesn't matter what you do to distract yourself. So keep reviewing my friend.
Every Sunday I think I shall be a world record performer in my chosen fields or proficiency, the topmost litterateur. Almost every Saturday I think I shall get most reviews with most 6-star rated comments and the most All Time Best Certificates.
Atleast you have your goals. Empty and meaningless as they may be.
Often I wish I should have proficiency in 30 foreign languages, get my works published in 100 languages, get awards on my books.
Very few writers get any recognition for their work let alone paid. Take what you can get.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from DanielEkine
very calculative too. not every author has that quality. nice touch. my best part.
"Every evening I think I shall own 10 laptops, desktops and tablets, 10 mobile phones, 3 luxury cars, 1 cab, 1 auto-rickshaw, 2 racing bikes, 5 racing bi-cycles, 5 printers, 1 stationery shop, 1 paper house, 1 newspaper house, 1 television channel, 1 publication house, 1 printing house, 10 bank accounts, 2 personal index numbers, 5 Green cards, 2 International passports and 1 private helicopter. "
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very calculative too. not every author has that quality. nice touch. my best part.
"Every evening I think I shall own 10 laptops, desktops and tablets, 10 mobile phones, 3 luxury cars, 1 cab, 1 auto-rickshaw, 2 racing bikes, 5 racing bi-cycles, 5 printers, 1 stationery shop, 1 paper house, 1 newspaper house, 1 television channel, 1 publication house, 1 printing house, 10 bank accounts, 2 personal index numbers, 5 Green cards, 2 International passports and 1 private helicopter. "
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Pal
I really relate to this, for so many of these things are how I think as well. I suppose I shouldn't despair of my inability to get any of them done, since perhaps everyone feels the same way? Good piece, thanks for sharing.
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Hey there Pal
I really relate to this, for so many of these things are how I think as well. I suppose I shouldn't despair of my inability to get any of them done, since perhaps everyone feels the same way? Good piece, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from Carolyn 12
LOL. This was a fun read if I had a 6 star it would be yours. I enjoyed all the what ifs and expectations and how they do not come true-yet maybe one day.
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LOL. This was a fun read if I had a 6 star it would be yours. I enjoyed all the what ifs and expectations and how they do not come true-yet maybe one day.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
You have clearly put much time and effort into thinking all of this through! Some of your grammar is not accurate, though, and this takes away from what could otherwise be a very interesting piece. I was waiting for a climax at the end that never really eventuated, though I thought your line of thought was going to be fairly predictable. A good punch at the end would have been a better way to finish off.
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You have clearly put much time and effort into thinking all of this through! Some of your grammar is not accurate, though, and this takes away from what could otherwise be a very interesting piece. I was waiting for a climax at the end that never really eventuated, though I thought your line of thought was going to be fairly predictable. A good punch at the end would have been a better way to finish off.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2013
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles to you Alcreator Litt Dear
Here is what I have to say I know I dream of all the impossible things I wanted to do what I final did was--
Take up one idea. Make that one idea in my life - think of it, dream of it, live on that idea. Let my brain, muscles, nerves, every part of my body and soul, be full of that idea, and just leave every other idea alone.
Gert
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Smiles to you Alcreator Litt Dear
Here is what I have to say I know I dream of all the impossible things I wanted to do what I final did was--
Take up one idea. Make that one idea in my life - think of it, dream of it, live on that idea. Let my brain, muscles, nerves, every part of my body and soul, be full of that idea, and just leave every other idea alone.
Gert
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013
Comment from emjaihammond
I see we are all the same, aren't we? I too have a list of things I'd love to do, a bucket list we call them anymore. And like you it seems something or someone always gets in the way. Still, I hope. This was quite a list. I wonder my friend, of all the things you dream of doing if you picked just one what would it be? I don't know if I could answer, but I wonder, is it even on this list? You have given me a lot to think about on this one, and I think to review my list would be a good start. Thanks.
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I see we are all the same, aren't we? I too have a list of things I'd love to do, a bucket list we call them anymore. And like you it seems something or someone always gets in the way. Still, I hope. This was quite a list. I wonder my friend, of all the things you dream of doing if you picked just one what would it be? I don't know if I could answer, but I wonder, is it even on this list? You have given me a lot to think about on this one, and I think to review my list would be a good start. Thanks.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013
Comment from dmt1967
I think writing fiction is not for you my friend you write thinking pieces this is your style don't see out because some people on here don't like what you write thank you for sharing
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I think writing fiction is not for you my friend you write thinking pieces this is your style don't see out because some people on here don't like what you write thank you for sharing
Comment Written 26-Jul-2013