Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Great pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 form
the moon as senile, that is an intriguing thought I've never considered before - I like poems that make me ponder
nice alliterative pairing of moon and melting
good rhyme of sky/lullaby
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for appreciating my work.I am glad that you like it.

Comment from GaryCecil

Excellent

The poem reminds me of whats creeping around at night when the moon shuts out its light for the night. I think this actually has stunning word choices that create fun and creep imagery.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for this great review.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

"Ahhhhhh, listen to the children of the night. What beautiful music they make..."

~Dracula

I love the darkness and concealment of the night. Even when the moon is at it's fullest, the elongated shadows are darker, more...inviting.
You have captured the spirit of a moonlit night beautifully in this 5-7-5. The picture and presentation was very alluring and embraces the pulchritude of the darker half of our day wonderfully...

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for this great review.

Comment from Starlit Ink

Excellent

This poem has a serene feel to it. It reminds one of that calm feeling when the hustle of the day is over, and all is well. I like your thought of the moon melting in the sky. Night is a lullaby in itself. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for this great review...

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi firdousy,
Your work has spot on syllables. I am a lover of night myself:) Nicely done.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen

"When the senile moon 5
Goes on melting in the sky 7
Night sings lullaby. 5

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013

Hi Moureen.
Thank you so much for reading and appreating my poem. Thanks once again.

Comment from Apryle Willis

Excellent

Very good job on this. I love the picture you added into the entry. It really helped bring the whole story and work to life. Great job! Apryle

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013

Thank you so much.

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

This is so eloquent and beautifully written. I have a particular love for the black skies of night and the beauty that displays itself so openly. Well done. xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for such an encourraging comment.

Comment from The Death

Good

This poem is really nice.
It is a good example of 6.7.6 poem and thus not fits the contest criteria.
Make changes to adjust to the format.good luck

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013

Thanks for your comment.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

in the picture setting half mast draped in her dark attire as she sings in her lights beauty caressed in your lullaby the sky the limit

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 Comment Written 09-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013

Thanks a lot for your comment.