The Night
This poem describes the mysterious beauty and magical music of the night.139 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
This is beautiful..................
When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky...beautiful imagery
Night sings lullaby..........comforting imagery
God bless
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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This is beautiful..................
When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky...beautiful imagery
Night sings lullaby..........comforting imagery
God bless
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for this great review.Much appreciate it.
Comment from lorijean
Nature gives us such to see and eventually write about, every day and night is different and you have done a great job here.....
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Nature gives us such to see and eventually write about, every day and night is different and you have done a great job here.....
Comment Written 16-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review..I appreciate it.
Comment from patsolstad
This is beautiful! And unique--'senile moon' 'melting'--words I've never heard to describe the moon. My only suggestion would be to consider replacing 'goes on' to 'begins.' But it is fine just as it is, of course! EXCELLENT.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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This is beautiful! And unique--'senile moon' 'melting'--words I've never heard to describe the moon. My only suggestion would be to consider replacing 'goes on' to 'begins.' But it is fine just as it is, of course! EXCELLENT.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for this great review.I appreciate.And thank you so much for the suggestion.It is really nice.
Comment from Jade Lawson
When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby... wow, this is a brief and good poem, so introspective and beautiful word choice, the picture also enhances its beauty and meaning conveyed. According to the contest, you also did good and follow the rules, good syllable count. GOOD LUCK.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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When the senile moon
Goes on melting in the sky
Night sings lullaby... wow, this is a brief and good poem, so introspective and beautiful word choice, the picture also enhances its beauty and meaning conveyed. According to the contest, you also did good and follow the rules, good syllable count. GOOD LUCK.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thanks a lot for this beautiful review.I appreciate it.
Comment from Zue65
Love the picture of the melting moon against a black backdrop, it amplified your message in this 5-7-5 poem, I enjoyed the metaphor senile for the receding moon, or a personification of the moon, and the night singing the lullaby. Nice.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Love the picture of the melting moon against a black backdrop, it amplified your message in this 5-7-5 poem, I enjoyed the metaphor senile for the receding moon, or a personification of the moon, and the night singing the lullaby. Nice.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much for the great review.
Comment from angelface2
Hmmm.. I never thought of the moon as senile. I can imagine a nights lullaby. Nice 5-7-5, with a good rhyming of sky/lullaby. thanks for sharing. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Hmmm.. I never thought of the moon as senile. I can imagine a nights lullaby. Nice 5-7-5, with a good rhyming of sky/lullaby. thanks for sharing. Miss Sally
Comment Written 15-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review.
Comment from 9999pool
In the magical night as we look at the night skies and dream, we wondered where the moon will be going to after it melts away in the skies.
It is time to say goodnight as the moon sings its final lullaby to welcome the dawn to break soon.
We just wished that the beautiful night of romance and brightness will shine in our hearts forever. Many writers painted the dark night as eerie and full of evil but this poem choose to serenades the lunar moon and that's when the love lunatics come out to dream of romance and the past glorious happy days of night. Smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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In the magical night as we look at the night skies and dream, we wondered where the moon will be going to after it melts away in the skies.
It is time to say goodnight as the moon sings its final lullaby to welcome the dawn to break soon.
We just wished that the beautiful night of romance and brightness will shine in our hearts forever. Many writers painted the dark night as eerie and full of evil but this poem choose to serenades the lunar moon and that's when the love lunatics come out to dream of romance and the past glorious happy days of night. Smiles.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for appreciating my poem.And thanks for this great review.Its pleasing.
Comment from ann marie mazz
this is lovely
the format and presentation are perfect
you have a wonderful theme
you grace us with a wonderful scene and time
well done in all areas
thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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this is lovely
the format and presentation are perfect
you have a wonderful theme
you grace us with a wonderful scene and time
well done in all areas
thank you for sharing
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thak you so much for appreciating my work and for this great review.
Comment from Survivor48
this is a great nature poem with a powerful methaphor. saying the "melting in the shy" was a work of art. "night sings" is also a good methaphor. great job.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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this is a great nature poem with a powerful methaphor. saying the "melting in the shy" was a work of art. "night sings" is also a good methaphor. great job.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much that you have appreciated my work.
Comment from Ridley Williams
A beautiful picture that decorates you piece.
But the thought of a senile moon is interesting.
It's seen everything for millions of years and yet
age has caught up it seems. Nicely done, Ridley
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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A beautiful picture that decorates you piece.
But the thought of a senile moon is interesting.
It's seen everything for millions of years and yet
age has caught up it seems. Nicely done, Ridley
Comment Written 13-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for your great review.
