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Comment from Darkhorse555
like spidered webs in a darkened sky falling in its dark attire in the celebration of rockets lighting up a beautiful piece
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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like spidered webs in a darkened sky falling in its dark attire in the celebration of rockets lighting up a beautiful piece
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2013
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Thank you Darkhorse.
Comment from Spitfire
How empowering to create a new form. And you picked a perfect subject with the onamotapoeic device: ka boom.
pyrotechnic elation--great phrase. Great photograph too.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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How empowering to create a new form. And you picked a perfect subject with the onamotapoeic device: ka boom.
pyrotechnic elation--great phrase. Great photograph too.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you Spitfire, I like to be an onamota Poet. Yahoo! Blam! Kapow!
Comment from Selina Stambi
How on earth, dear sir, do you manage to use Kaboom! Kaboom! and still create a piece that resonates with the grandeur of a psalm? :)
So beautifully done. Love this form.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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How on earth, dear sir, do you manage to use Kaboom! Kaboom! and still create a piece that resonates with the grandeur of a psalm? :)
So beautifully done. Love this form.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you Sonali. Several poets have since tried one. Think of the first two words and off you go!
Comment from dmt1967
This is a great theme to write a poem about not the greatest day for us brits but then we should have given the land back when asked so we deserve it lol thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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This is a great theme to write a poem about not the greatest day for us brits but then we should have given the land back when asked so we deserve it lol thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thanks dmt. All water under the bridge now.
Comment from kiwijenny
This has a great rhythm and way to go inventing your own poetic scheme.
Fanstory is amazing......so is your photo... A purple pantomime of light.
This reading made me want to cheer. Yay
God bless
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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This has a great rhythm and way to go inventing your own poetic scheme.
Fanstory is amazing......so is your photo... A purple pantomime of light.
This reading made me want to cheer. Yay
God bless
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much kiwi. Such an exuberant review!
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your new form and have taken the liberty of copying this post so that I might try it when time permits. I enjoyed your sharing your striking photograph as well (don't count on my doing that!). Your rhymes and use of onomatopoeia are quite effective. Cheers and happy holiday Sunday- Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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I admired your new form and have taken the liberty of copying this post so that I might try it when time permits. I enjoyed your sharing your striking photograph as well (don't count on my doing that!). Your rhymes and use of onomatopoeia are quite effective. Cheers and happy holiday Sunday- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you Joan. Yes, by all means. I'd be honored if you give it a try.
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I appreciate your encouragement. Hugs- Joan
Comment from gazzagodbod
not sure im sposed to love this being british being ousted on the 4th july lol but what the heck i do love it well done my friend gazza
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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not sure im sposed to love this being british being ousted on the 4th july lol but what the heck i do love it well done my friend gazza
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you gazzagodbod, Water under the bridge. WWI and WWII settled all that. We're buddies now! :-)
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to true my friend and it all turned out for the best
Comment from Gungalo
How wonderful that the neighborhood put on their own show. It's something to be a part of. Your Exhortation write is also wonderful.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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How wonderful that the neighborhood put on their own show. It's something to be a part of. Your Exhortation write is also wonderful.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you Gungalo. It was fun.
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Oh yeah.
Comment from 9999pool
" where the capital letters are repeated lines." - are there repeated lines which I am not seeing.
Great new format 12 line Exhortation. I might just try it out for good measure. The exhortation idea seems novel and great.
Such a great celebration and everyone is pitting in with their own fireworks show of kaboom! kaboom! Let's rejoice!!
Excellent write and captured the mood with exhortation defining the thrill of it all!!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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" where the capital letters are repeated lines." - are there repeated lines which I am not seeing.
Great new format 12 line Exhortation. I might just try it out for good measure. The exhortation idea seems novel and great.
Such a great celebration and everyone is pitting in with their own fireworks show of kaboom! kaboom! Let's rejoice!!
Excellent write and captured the mood with exhortation defining the thrill of it all!!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks Ritchie, line 1 and 12 are the repeated lines (the exhortation).
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Oic. Thanks Tom. Just want to be sure before i write the 12 lines Exhortation. Going to be fun too, I am sure, smiles.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from jaydub99
I really liked the cadence and movement of this. You definitely created an excited and celebratory tone and your words are perfectly positioned. I like that you were careful on the delivery of this type of piece. You clearly are passionate about your writing and what you give to the readers. Nice job.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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I really liked the cadence and movement of this. You definitely created an excited and celebratory tone and your words are perfectly positioned. I like that you were careful on the delivery of this type of piece. You clearly are passionate about your writing and what you give to the readers. Nice job.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much jay dub. Your comments are greatly appreciated.
