Rabbit
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Going Home"A Boy's Story of the rural South
46 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I caught this on the fly, not having read previous chapters and yet, almost from the first sentence, you captivated me and held me close to the memories the regrets and the loss of that single summer, when dad packs up his little boy and drives away.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I caught this on the fly, not having read previous chapters and yet, almost from the first sentence, you captivated me and held me close to the memories the regrets and the loss of that single summer, when dad packs up his little boy and drives away.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and the wonderful compliment of the six. I hope you can circle back around. Bill
Comment from Selina Stambi
If this is the final chapter, I'm feeling quite sorry - I loved this read about an innocent, long, lazy summer that was so full of childlike wonder and action.
This has been such a great read, bh - thank you!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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If this is the final chapter, I'm feeling quite sorry - I loved this read about an innocent, long, lazy summer that was so full of childlike wonder and action.
This has been such a great read, bh - thank you!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and your kind comments. I've outlined two more chapters, but actually leaning toward one more. Regards, Bill
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
THE STORY IS WELL WRITTEN AND HAS LOADS OF imargy. the theme and the storyline are excellent and I see no reason to suggest change. Mary
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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THE STORY IS WELL WRITTEN AND HAS LOADS OF imargy. the theme and the storyline are excellent and I see no reason to suggest change. Mary
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Mary - what a kind review! Have you read any of the other chapters? I know it's hard to circle back. Regards, Bill
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
I love the inter-generational friendship between Rabbit and Virge. It is something that young people nowadays don't often get involved in.
You bring the whole episode to life - I was almost joining in that game of checkers.
A very enjoyable read, as usual.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I love the inter-generational friendship between Rabbit and Virge. It is something that young people nowadays don't often get involved in.
You bring the whole episode to life - I was almost joining in that game of checkers.
A very enjoyable read, as usual.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hi Juliette - what a compliment! If through my words, you can see and feel, then I feel good. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I donīt know why Charlie has to make fun of you :), but I have to thanks him, if it helped for this fun, fresh and nicely done writing.
I just love it!
:))
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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I donīt know why Charlie has to make fun of you :), but I have to thanks him, if it helped for this fun, fresh and nicely done writing.
I just love it!
:))
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for reading and the compliment of the six. Charlie and I exchange 'barbs' all the time. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from JM daSilva
This story kind of takes me back to a moment in my childhood where I spent some time with my uncle in the country. I met an old man just like this one. Nice writing .
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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This story kind of takes me back to a moment in my childhood where I spent some time with my uncle in the country. I met an old man just like this one. Nice writing .
Comment Written 08-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much JM - I saw your notes on PM and very much appreciate them. For you take the time to help other writers improve is admirable! Warm regards, Bill
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Great pleasure.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Liked this: His eyes were scrunched up more than usual. It looked like his wrinkles had wrinkles.
Lovely lines here:...he tricked me a bit and grabbing my hand, pulled me into a hug. I hugged him back. He's an old man and don't get too many hugs. :)
Excellent!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Liked this: His eyes were scrunched up more than usual. It looked like his wrinkles had wrinkles.
Lovely lines here:...he tricked me a bit and grabbing my hand, pulled me into a hug. I hugged him back. He's an old man and don't get too many hugs. :)
Excellent!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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HI RB - I'm sending a smile and virtual hug back your way. Bill :)
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Thanks for the virtual hug :)
Cheers,
Raz
Comment from Patriciacanaries
These stories are so delightful, at least the couple I have just read. Maybe there is more serious stuff in the others and I hope I get the chance to read them. They appealed to me, because as well as being entertaining and compulsive reading, there were so many little lessons dotted along the way. The goodness of the grandparents, the nature lessons, the encouragement to learn from Virgil and the affection between him and Rabbit were just a few things I picked up on. Looking forward to the next read.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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These stories are so delightful, at least the couple I have just read. Maybe there is more serious stuff in the others and I hope I get the chance to read them. They appealed to me, because as well as being entertaining and compulsive reading, there were so many little lessons dotted along the way. The goodness of the grandparents, the nature lessons, the encouragement to learn from Virgil and the affection between him and Rabbit were just a few things I picked up on. Looking forward to the next read.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Pat - we get so few sixes that I'm always honored to get one. I hope that you do get a chance to revisit some of the earlier posts. Warm regards, Bill
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Bill,
The story of Rabbit's summer with his grandparents and ole Virge has been a real pleasure to read. I have enjoyed every chapter and found it to be a bit nostalgic in a few places. Having been raised on a rocky farm in Tennessee, I can relate to many of the experiences he encountered. I did have the opportunity to see both sides of life. When things would get bad on the farm, Dad would move us to the city for a short spell until he could make enough money to take us back to the farm. I enjoyed the read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Bill,
The story of Rabbit's summer with his grandparents and ole Virge has been a real pleasure to read. I have enjoyed every chapter and found it to be a bit nostalgic in a few places. Having been raised on a rocky farm in Tennessee, I can relate to many of the experiences he encountered. I did have the opportunity to see both sides of life. When things would get bad on the farm, Dad would move us to the city for a short spell until he could make enough money to take us back to the farm. I enjoyed the read.
Curtis
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hi Curtis - thank you so much for your kind and generous review. I can sense a bit of the country boy in your posts which I enjoy. Bill
Comment from Writingfundimension
Bill, what a delightful chapter. I loved every word of this chapter. You convey so much depth and beauty in your story of the love between Virgil and Rabbit. There were no spaggies that I could see, and I wouldn't even suggest any change in the narrative. Great job!
Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Bill, what a delightful chapter. I loved every word of this chapter. You convey so much depth and beauty in your story of the love between Virgil and Rabbit. There were no spaggies that I could see, and I wouldn't even suggest any change in the narrative. Great job!
Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you Beve - like everyone on this site, I love postive feedback. When it comes from a writer that I admire, it is always special! Bill
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You're very welcome, Bill. :0)
