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Comment from Brocha1
This is a really excellent poem. The rhythm is really excellent and the format of the echo sonnet brings great beauty to the poem
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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This is a really excellent poem. The rhythm is really excellent and the format of the echo sonnet brings great beauty to the poem
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much Brocha.
Comment from Apryle Willis
Music makes all aspects of life more beautiful. To watch as people inadvertently move to its beat without realizing its even moving them. This is very lovely. Apryle
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Music makes all aspects of life more beautiful. To watch as people inadvertently move to its beat without realizing its even moving them. This is very lovely. Apryle
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Apryle. I love how you spell your name. Very lyrical and light.
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Thank you. Its not the true given name but I changed it along the way. it felt more like me. :)
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Very creative and shows an artistic bent. I see you new to the site, so - Welcome!
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Thank you very much. Im finding that this place is love at first sight for me. Im feeling right at home.
Comment from lexairu
Hi Tom, this is one of my favourite sonnets you've written. The poem itself sounds like music with the rhymes and repeats. The format also matches the title. To me it's simply outstanding.
Cheers
Lexi
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Hi Tom, this is one of my favourite sonnets you've written. The poem itself sounds like music with the rhymes and repeats. The format also matches the title. To me it's simply outstanding.
Cheers
Lexi
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Oh, thank you so much Lexi, for those wonderful stars. I do like this one a lot too!
Comment from Ekim777
Your handling of the iambic pentameter makes one wonder what instrument you play. The sonnet is probably the most stringent and demanding of verse forms and you handle it with aplomb. Why not divide it into three quatrains and a final couplet? Music is probably the language of the soul but to my ears, the repetition blunts the effect. Forgive me, I have just completed sonnet; a submission for a contest. You may go to town on it. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Your handling of the iambic pentameter makes one wonder what instrument you play. The sonnet is probably the most stringent and demanding of verse forms and you handle it with aplomb. Why not divide it into three quatrains and a final couplet? Music is probably the language of the soul but to my ears, the repetition blunts the effect. Forgive me, I have just completed sonnet; a submission for a contest. You may go to town on it. -Ekim777
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you Ekim777. I appreciate your fabulous feedback and those high ranked stars. I had thought about breaking it like you suggest. The creator of the style recommends otherwise,
Comment from emjaihammond
Music is and has been such a vital and important part of life. I simply cannot imagine life without it. It is as if God implanted it in our souls. I enjoyed this very much.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Music is and has been such a vital and important part of life. I simply cannot imagine life without it. It is as if God implanted it in our souls. I enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
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Thank you emjaihammond. I agree that God did do that.
Comment from Selina Stambi
melodies that sooth the savage beast,
Or keep the couples dancing at the feast. ... know exactly the kind of melodies you mean ... :)
soft symphonic soundbites ... nice!
I do like this format. The repetition is very effective ... quite "Frenchified" (French Fried??) indeed ... ooh la la, m'sieu!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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melodies that sooth the savage beast,
Or keep the couples dancing at the feast. ... know exactly the kind of melodies you mean ... :)
soft symphonic soundbites ... nice!
I do like this format. The repetition is very effective ... quite "Frenchified" (French Fried??) indeed ... ooh la la, m'sieu!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thank you, Sonali. Merci beaucoup.
Comment from ravenblack
Music is all around us, a language all its own that- believe it or not- is very closely related to mathematics. Music plays the same role in my life- just skip the calculus ( flunked it twice).
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Music is all around us, a language all its own that- believe it or not- is very closely related to mathematics. Music plays the same role in my life- just skip the calculus ( flunked it twice).
Comment Written 05-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2013
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Thanks Ravenblack k. Stick to music. ;-/
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Treischel,
This is the first time I have read an echo sonnet and you have done a stellar job with this one. The rules sound complicated but you made it look easy...I know it's not. Your rhyme is musical and your iambic pentameter is spot on. Your word choices are vivid and the theme is wonderful. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Hi Treischel,
This is the first time I have read an echo sonnet and you have done a stellar job with this one. The rules sound complicated but you made it look easy...I know it's not. Your rhyme is musical and your iambic pentameter is spot on. Your word choices are vivid and the theme is wonderful. Well done, chey
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you Chey. Such a wonderful review.
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This poetry has a melodic cadence and the flow is smooth.
I like the way that the words are arranged on the page.
The attached illustration is the perfect accent to
enhance the message. Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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This poetry has a melodic cadence and the flow is smooth.
I like the way that the words are arranged on the page.
The attached illustration is the perfect accent to
enhance the message. Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much Black_Oxygen. I appreciate the comments.
Comment from 9999pool
'Were would we be without music? ' -> 'Where'
Where would we be without music? Definitely in a very quiet place without the sounds of music to let us know that celebration and jubilation is happening. Since the existence of sound, man had play all sorts of instruments to make melodies and music out of it. The Philippines Trash Orchestra uses only all trash materials as musical instruments to play their musical pieces (refer to Hawaiian Mermaid).
Great echo and well expressed.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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'Were would we be without music? ' -> 'Where'
Where would we be without music? Definitely in a very quiet place without the sounds of music to let us know that celebration and jubilation is happening. Since the existence of sound, man had play all sorts of instruments to make melodies and music out of it. The Philippines Trash Orchestra uses only all trash materials as musical instruments to play their musical pieces (refer to Hawaiian Mermaid).
Great echo and well expressed.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks Ritchie. I read Ginger's piece, It was amazing.
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Yes, Tom. Her videos accompanying all her writes are great and i had great fun watching them. When she talked about politicians and the Inland Revenue, it is something else as well.
Smiles, Ritchie. :))
