Comment from zeldasmith

Excellent

As funny as it is, I do confess, it's not likely you'd die on the spot. You'd be a bloody mess. Oh, and I forgot, if you destructed in any other form
The angel of death, your life would mourn. So wake up funny guy from your sleep and in your heart His love to keep. Very good indeed the words you've writ, I'll say a little prayer and then I'll spit!!! LOL couldn't think of a word that rhymed with writ.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013

You are funny. How many kids do you have?

reply by zeldasmith on 04-Jul-2013

Oh God, too many...four living and a husband! One in heaven..Rosemarie....lost her via a miscarriage...4th trimester the day my mother died....she in one hospital, I in another losing our little girl. My youngest Holly, is 28 and expecting her 3rd little bundle; she works from home taking dictation from an online company. Her boys are 9 and 4. Oldest has a form of autism. But smart as a whip. Shes been married for five years this august. Ill be married 42 years in august...holy cow! Her husband Frank, is a deli clerk in a food market and fixes cars on the side, my oldest, Sheri, is 41, divoreced twice and lives home. she lost three babies and with my mom all in heaven...1 boy, 1 girl and we don't know the sex of the other one, lost when she was stationed in Germany before she went to war....spent 2 years in IRAQ as a weapons specialist..now she works in accounts receivable and payable for some warehouse company and also is a QuarterMaster for the VFW...Veterans of Foreigh Wars.....oldest boy is 40 ...he was in the army reserves years ago and just missed going over seas during dessert storm....he has an almost 13 year old daughter in a womans body...ugh!...and two step sons....one with Aspergers syndrome ..17 and the other one almost 21. His name is ERIK and is handy with his hands..does just about anything he gets his hands on...but by profession he's a millrite, and carpenter and also does foam insulation. My youngest boy is JOE...he's 37 has six children with his wife Ruthie of 7 years..her three, his one, and their 2 ..he was a truck driver but due to his on going physical limitations he's been barred from driving the rigs and still waiting on his disability to come through..he has Familiar Spastic Paraplegia...and then my husband Zeke aka Dennis ...hes married to me Kathy...aka Zelda...nee Smith....married name Ezekiel..works for a church publication in advertising. The pay's not much but the benefits are out of this world!!!!! I worked for the church too for 19+ years as a parish secretary and pastoral musician until Rheumotoid Arthritis got the best of me. I was an organist...professionally..meaning I got paid a wage...for 34 years before retiring the keys. Trouble reading the music and can't sit too long on the bench..Anyhoo, I have 14 grandies and 1 on the way.
I'm way past my bedtime. Good night!!!!!!!

Comment from hellspook

Excellent

Suicide isn't a "funny" topic and the way you handled it was comparable to the choice of it. I have never posted such a bad review, and never will again but your poem deserves an honorable mention.

Still, I wanted to give you two star but for the fact that you did provoked me, you deserve better than close to nothing.

On a friendly note,
"An overdose fits the bills
I'll just take ten thousand pills " is my favorite death.

But don't do it again, or use better adjectives.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013

It was no fun going through the attempt. Finding humor in a distatesful subject takes courage. You should give me 6 stars for even showing it in public.

Norm

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

Ouch... One of your kids??LOL No suicide would not be the way to go. Great write. Great rhythm and rhyme. And a good smooth read. Well done...

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013

Thanks for the review. Depression is not a pleasant thing to deal with.