Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

fueled by faith and oil ... fabulous - never a truer word spoken!

An astute comment in the concluding couplet.

Not a Shakespearean sonnet as the hexameter will testify... :)

Spags:

whose God (not who's)

Holy Land (two words)
blood-soaked (need a hyphen)

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013

Thanks Sonali. I fixed them.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Good picture to complement this poem. I think you can write anything. Like even iambic hexameter. I've never seen that done before. And yes there are still battle lines between Muslims and Christians.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013

Thank you Ine. I appreciate the complement.

reply by robina1978 on 03-Jul-2013

most welcome, Ine

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This one stirred my soul. The imagery of the knights and men at war was excellent. There is blood and pain and suffering and men going to war to prove that God is on their side so is wrong and stupid but it still stirs the blood. Guess I am just a romantic.
Preston

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thanks Preston. I stirs me too.

Comment from NicciFaye

Exceptional

You inspire me to try a sonnet...the read of it is so theatrical...I felt as if drums where playing in the background as I read this...but my imagination is big..lol..this is worthy of a six and a excellent write.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thank you Nicci. You make me feel proud.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

History isn't so hard to write, but getting creative with it can be difficult. You did a nice sonnet paying tribute to the past. If only the history pf bad things did not repeat. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thank yor sunnilicious. For those very cool red, white, and blue stars.

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Very poignant message carried well in sonnet form. History should be a teacher, a lesson learned that we should not repeat. We sure failed this lesson. When two sides claim that God is on their side, when the dust settles, does God then flip a coin? Wish all sides would just realize that war is the true enemy.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thank you lack. A true profound truth.

Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart

Excellent

I can't review on the sonnet angle due to the fact I'm not a poet and wouldn't have a clue but I do know the poem shares a sad truth and is well stated. Good job. God loves you and I do too.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013

Thank you Evelyn,