Comment from zeldasmith

Excellent

A picture and colored background would enhance this poem. But otherwise a nicely written well-formed poem. The imagery is good too and easily read poem. Good job poet.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

One day I might use pictures but I am writing for myself. I do not promote any works. I am not that good of a poet.

Norm

reply by zeldasmith on 01-Jul-2013

You can use the arts from fanstory. just click on it and brouse until you find the pic you want and back ground color. the instructions are easy. AND DON'T SAY YOU'RE NOT A GOOD POET OR I'M GOING TO HIT YOU OVER THE HEAD WITH A BOOK. Well, I would if I could. Have a fun filled day. Its rain, rain rain here in South Jersey. But it's better than the fires out west. So sad.

reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Be nice I am older than you!

reply by zeldasmith on 02-Jul-2013

Don't believe it.

Comment from webfoot

Excellent

this is so visual as well as poetic. I can see the old man rising and smiling

it's an uplifting viewpoint of one's final days

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013

Thanks for the review. I just wrote the poem

Comment from Garry Souders

Exceptional

I could be that old man, thanks for writing something that rings so true in my heart. I offer no recommendations as none are needed, be proud that you made an old man happy and his heart a little lighter.

 Comment Written 30-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013

Garry: Thanks for the wonderful review. I just wrote the poem yesterday and you are the first to see it.

Norm