Wallflower
A poem using the emotion anxiety27 total reviews
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
A perfect example of anxiety in action and a very good write. Congratulations on your contest win. I enjoyed reading your winning entry. Bob
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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A perfect example of anxiety in action and a very good write. Congratulations on your contest win. I enjoyed reading your winning entry. Bob
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thanks Bob.
Comment from lakeport
Congradulation on your contest win. That's a Beautiful expressed story poem.I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Congradulation on your contest win. That's a Beautiful expressed story poem.I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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your welcome,Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from Pullmanspb
"Afraid someone might ask me to dance." Lovely line and, in a sense, the other side of the coin of having to ask someone to dance (at least in that era). Wonder how many readers will have no idea what the reference to a 45 is?
You captured the awkwardness and anxiety very, very solidly; if you weren't an anxious person back then, you could fool me.
Steven
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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"Afraid someone might ask me to dance." Lovely line and, in a sense, the other side of the coin of having to ask someone to dance (at least in that era). Wonder how many readers will have no idea what the reference to a 45 is?
You captured the awkwardness and anxiety very, very solidly; if you weren't an anxious person back then, you could fool me.
Steven
Comment Written 02-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2013
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Thanks again!
Comment from kiwijenny
Oh I know how you felt. ....I love this poem because we can identify...
This awkwardness I would break by doing something mortifying ...
Then laughter and profuse blushing would ensue...
I loved this poem .
God bless
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Oh I know how you felt. ....I love this poem because we can identify...
This awkwardness I would break by doing something mortifying ...
Then laughter and profuse blushing would ensue...
I loved this poem .
God bless
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your comments. :)
Comment from Gungalo
Afraid someone might ask me to dance,
afraid someone won't.
All the while feeling awkward, peculiar,
uncomfortable in this pretense
of having a good time.
This is really good Betty and explains why so many girls are standing over there.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Afraid someone might ask me to dance,
afraid someone won't.
All the while feeling awkward, peculiar,
uncomfortable in this pretense
of having a good time.
This is really good Betty and explains why so many girls are standing over there.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013
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Thanks!
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Comment from words
You captured the feelings of being an award teen perfectly.
Love your ending:
Afraid someone might ask me to dance,
afraid someone won't.
All the while feeling awkward, peculiar,
uncomfortable in this pretense
of having a good time.
I do remember those times vividly.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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You captured the feelings of being an award teen perfectly.
Love your ending:
Afraid someone might ask me to dance,
afraid someone won't.
All the while feeling awkward, peculiar,
uncomfortable in this pretense
of having a good time.
I do remember those times vividly.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments.
Comment from Rondeno
This is good. You really capture the agony and the ecstasy of being young and uncertain of your role. Nice details, good feel. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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This is good. You really capture the agony and the ecstasy of being young and uncertain of your role. Nice details, good feel. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Thank you very much for your comments.
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
The lights dim.
You've Lost That Loving Feeling
slow dances off the forty-five.
This is a wonderful way to set mood.
All the while feeling awkward, peculiar,
uncomfortable in this pretense
of having a good time.
You really have described the typical teen dance scenario. Congrats on your win!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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The lights dim.
You've Lost That Loving Feeling
slow dances off the forty-five.
This is a wonderful way to set mood.
All the while feeling awkward, peculiar,
uncomfortable in this pretense
of having a good time.
You really have described the typical teen dance scenario. Congrats on your win!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Thank you Mark, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from The Death
This is a wonderful.no doubt why it is the contest winner.
It conveys the feeling of anxiety very well.
The background you have used as a theme is just amazing.an excellent work.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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This is a wonderful.no doubt why it is the contest winner.
It conveys the feeling of anxiety very well.
The background you have used as a theme is just amazing.an excellent work.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Thank you Anupam, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from humpwhistle
Yeah, Betty, I remember those awkward moments. All
the anticipation of attending, followed by that dreadful realization you were now committed to being there.
But unless I'm wrong, the popular girls were nervous, too.
Nice job, and congrats on the win.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Yeah, Betty, I remember those awkward moments. All
the anticipation of attending, followed by that dreadful realization you were now committed to being there.
But unless I'm wrong, the popular girls were nervous, too.
Nice job, and congrats on the win.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2013
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Not in my high school because all the popular girls had steady boyfriends and were in clicks. Thank you for your comments. :)
