And then there's Grace
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "He Will"A collection of Spirtual poems
18 total reviews
Comment from Jonez08
Wow, stunning. A beautiful flowing poem of our faithful and loving creator. Only in Him will we find everlasting peace and joy. Each of your verses creates hope and peace and the final verse reminds us of our final home and its great reward. The words are as ancient as time, but as refreshing as the morning dew. Thanks for sharing the blessing
Cassandra
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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Wow, stunning. A beautiful flowing poem of our faithful and loving creator. Only in Him will we find everlasting peace and joy. Each of your verses creates hope and peace and the final verse reminds us of our final home and its great reward. The words are as ancient as time, but as refreshing as the morning dew. Thanks for sharing the blessing
Cassandra
Comment Written 25-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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Cassandra, what a beautiful review you have written, I thank you so much. Carolyn
Comment from sholessjo
Carolyn: You are an outstanding writer. Ate you going to publish a book? I see you are religious. I too have a deep faith in God.
Norm
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Carolyn: You are an outstanding writer. Ate you going to publish a book? I see you are religious. I too have a deep faith in God.
Norm
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thank you Norm for your fine observations and wonderful comments. Yes faith in God is the all important thing and the obedience it brings. I appreciate your abundant rating as well. Carolyn
Comment from Curly Girly
These are wonderful and encouraging words. I like this:
He'll soothe away thy bitterness
When overwhelmed and feeling small
Lift up thine heart and on Him call
and:
A crown of life, thou wilt receive
Because, thy soul, dared to believe
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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These are wonderful and encouraging words. I like this:
He'll soothe away thy bitterness
When overwhelmed and feeling small
Lift up thine heart and on Him call
and:
A crown of life, thou wilt receive
Because, thy soul, dared to believe
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thanks, I appreciate your review, Nicole, and I am glad you enjoyed it. Carolyn
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Carolyn - this is a beautiful work that holds so many wonderful lines. Great rhythm and rhyme throughout. I liked the spiritual wisdom it just felt so refreshing to me and I needed it. Rough couple of days and this warmed me so much.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Hi Carolyn - this is a beautiful work that holds so many wonderful lines. Great rhythm and rhyme throughout. I liked the spiritual wisdom it just felt so refreshing to me and I needed it. Rough couple of days and this warmed me so much.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful comments and I am so glad the poem helped you. I am so sorry you have not been doing well, I am praying for you everyday. I have a list, and you are on it! My love, Carolyn
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Just a rough couple of days - tomorrow is a new day:)
xxx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend so m meaningful and full of feeling it reads so well with good rhyming well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend so m meaningful and full of feeling it reads so well with good rhyming well done regards Jill
Comment Written 23-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2013
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Jill, thank you for reading and for your wonderful rating. I appreciate you very much. Carolyn
Comment from Sagnik Das
Ah ! Magnificent, as ever, noblest friend ... With each of your illustrious works, you manage to overwhelm me anew ! You, as I've always fervently stated, do indubitably possess the promise of being a wonderful poet. Spiritual, yet so Romantic, with a tremendous ardor for perfectionism, your words tend to flow effortlessly, in an even sequence of rhythmic beauty - & are always very spontaneous in expression - never forced ( an attribute which overwhelms me all the more ....)
And, likewise is the case with this genial quatrain here as well - brilliantly rhymed & perfectly executed ..... With such gracious dignity in terms of cadence and metrical sequence, as I've seldom chanced beholding here at FS hitherto .... Words can never be enough, I conjecture, to fathom the ingenious depth of such a stupendous creativity. It is magnificently-splendid, in every possible way !
Graced by Metaphysical touches of devout Idealism, the very first stanza, in itself proves apt enough to hold sway, even over a carefree reader, manifesting thereby, its charming appeal ubiquitously all through :
" Oh heartsick souls in need of rest
Arise, and see, that thou art blessed
Lean for succor on His breast
He'll soothe away thy bitterness ..... "
The majestic lines possess in them, a tremendous zeal of faith & power. In fiery words of fervent eloquence, they emphasize vividly, on the ephemeral values of wholehearted devotion, simple belief & absolute purity - eternal truths, which man often spurns at will, & chooses to go astray. Nay, exuberant materialism induces him so .....
Characterized by a grand treatment of style & theme, such as what one tends to find in the early Pre-Raphaelite hymns of the Post-Romantic literary era , the poem indubitably stands out all by itself & is , in my opinion, just unparalleled, in every considerable aspect - whether be it from the perspective of a flawless rhyme scheme, or a discerning metrical sequence ; or even the three mellow alliterations you improvised brilliantly in the opening lines of the third stanza - it is purely, in every case, a reader's delight ....
And it is by sheer dint of its aforesaid blend of technical & sentimental attributes, that I can easily apprehend this supreme work to leave its paramount impression upon the minds of all its complacent readers & admirers alike ..... , securing thereby for your affable self, the hallowed prize of priceless fame & renown ! Hence Good luck, my honorable friend - & keep composing such stunning masterpieces .
Know for sure, that you fare a definite "six" with this one.
:)
P.S. - And, by the way, please be precise in punctuating your works more carefully, which you herein duly missed . :)
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Ah ! Magnificent, as ever, noblest friend ... With each of your illustrious works, you manage to overwhelm me anew ! You, as I've always fervently stated, do indubitably possess the promise of being a wonderful poet. Spiritual, yet so Romantic, with a tremendous ardor for perfectionism, your words tend to flow effortlessly, in an even sequence of rhythmic beauty - & are always very spontaneous in expression - never forced ( an attribute which overwhelms me all the more ....)
And, likewise is the case with this genial quatrain here as well - brilliantly rhymed & perfectly executed ..... With such gracious dignity in terms of cadence and metrical sequence, as I've seldom chanced beholding here at FS hitherto .... Words can never be enough, I conjecture, to fathom the ingenious depth of such a stupendous creativity. It is magnificently-splendid, in every possible way !
Graced by Metaphysical touches of devout Idealism, the very first stanza, in itself proves apt enough to hold sway, even over a carefree reader, manifesting thereby, its charming appeal ubiquitously all through :
" Oh heartsick souls in need of rest
Arise, and see, that thou art blessed
Lean for succor on His breast
He'll soothe away thy bitterness ..... "
The majestic lines possess in them, a tremendous zeal of faith & power. In fiery words of fervent eloquence, they emphasize vividly, on the ephemeral values of wholehearted devotion, simple belief & absolute purity - eternal truths, which man often spurns at will, & chooses to go astray. Nay, exuberant materialism induces him so .....
Characterized by a grand treatment of style & theme, such as what one tends to find in the early Pre-Raphaelite hymns of the Post-Romantic literary era , the poem indubitably stands out all by itself & is , in my opinion, just unparalleled, in every considerable aspect - whether be it from the perspective of a flawless rhyme scheme, or a discerning metrical sequence ; or even the three mellow alliterations you improvised brilliantly in the opening lines of the third stanza - it is purely, in every case, a reader's delight ....
And it is by sheer dint of its aforesaid blend of technical & sentimental attributes, that I can easily apprehend this supreme work to leave its paramount impression upon the minds of all its complacent readers & admirers alike ..... , securing thereby for your affable self, the hallowed prize of priceless fame & renown ! Hence Good luck, my honorable friend - & keep composing such stunning masterpieces .
Know for sure, that you fare a definite "six" with this one.
:)
P.S. - And, by the way, please be precise in punctuating your works more carefully, which you herein duly missed . :)
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Thank you once again my dear friend, for taking the time out of your most busy schedule,to read and report on the poem I have posted. As usual you have done a great honor to me, in that you compare each and every facet of the writing so carefully. If I have erred in a punctuation of the product, please point it out specifically, so that I may correct it. You will not offend me by doing so. I appreciate you, :-) Carolyn
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Carolyn, beloved friend,
I know that well. For, a Lady of your grace, bequeathed with such an unbound heart of gold, can never be made offended ever, in any way , come what there may ....
:)
Let me hence vouchsafe my unworthy opinion as regards the punctuation, herein :
Oh heartsick souls in need of rest
Arise, and see, that thou art blessed ;
Lean for succor on His breast ,
He'll soothe away thy bitterness.
Call out to Him on bended knee ,
As He implores thine heart to see -
His life He gave, obediently ;
Thy dearest friend He wants to be .
Dwell here below and free from fear ,
If thou wilt always keep Him near ;
In His calm, he'll bring thee cheer -
Hold Him close, there's none so dear .
When overwhelmed and feeling small ,
Lift up thine heart and on Him call ;
Live faithfully ; heed not to fall ,
His love, through grace, will reach us all .
At journey's end when thou must leave
For mansions fair, thine to achieve ,
A crown of life, thou wilt receive -
Because, thy soul, dared to believe .
I would sincerely anticipate, my friend, that this be of some modest worth at least, as might deserve your kindest perusal and consideration.
Please do let me know, I humbly beseech .....
:)
Pliable as ever in wholehearted respect,
your friend,
Sagnik.
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Thank you so much, I printed the page and will review all, and correct as needed. You are my hero, Carolyn
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Ah, Madam ! - you here make me blush in bashful erubescence - with all these redundant bouts of admiration, wherewith you bestow my unworthy self . I never deserve any of it.
For it is the stupendous ingenuity of your own extraordinary work, which truly induces me to impart what I presently did. Hence, the entire appraisal, goes to you, on the contrary, you see - not to me, by any means.
That I could procure for you some happiness therewith, is all I consider to be my foremost privilege. For, in the happiness of my honorable friends, thrives my own happiness in reality - nothing else.
Therefore, thank me not beloved Carolyn, I beg - as I'm rather the one who ought to be indebted.
:)
Comment from amarherig14
Beautiful faith poem with a good message within. Yes,dare to believe in Him and a whole new life will replace the old life.He loved you so much that He gave His live to set us free.When our burdens are to heavy ,He will carry them for us.When our journey is over He will have a place prepared for us.All this for following Him!! I liked the monorhyme used in this write.The wording , imagery and picture are are perfect.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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Beautiful faith poem with a good message within. Yes,dare to believe in Him and a whole new life will replace the old life.He loved you so much that He gave His live to set us free.When our burdens are to heavy ,He will carry them for us.When our journey is over He will have a place prepared for us.All this for following Him!! I liked the monorhyme used in this write.The wording , imagery and picture are are perfect.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2013
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I thank you so much for your sincere and insightful review. Your comments are always a joy to read. :-) Carolyn
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You are welcome,Carolyn. Faith poems are my favorites all the time.You wrote a beautiful one.Thank you for your uplifting words. Blessings,Margie
Comment from adewpearl
solid mono-rhyming in each quatrain, including good proximate rhyming in your first stanza
souls' in need of rest - drop the apostrophe
He'll soothes - He'll soothe
good alliteration in free from fear
you deliver a strong message of faith in good poetic form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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solid mono-rhyming in each quatrain, including good proximate rhyming in your first stanza
souls' in need of rest - drop the apostrophe
He'll soothes - He'll soothe
good alliteration in free from fear
you deliver a strong message of faith in good poetic form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the wonderful review and the heads up on the typo. I hope you have had a great day. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
The monorhyme works so well with this poem. Kind of a persuasive poem with instructions to those who are suffering. Love the reference to mansions in the last stanzas. Lovely in tone, content, and rhythm.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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The monorhyme works so well with this poem. Kind of a persuasive poem with instructions to those who are suffering. Love the reference to mansions in the last stanzas. Lovely in tone, content, and rhythm.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thanks Shari, I appreciate your comments. Hope you are having a wonderful day. :-) Carolyn
Comment from GE Parson
Carolyn - How I wished I had six stars to give out. This poem is sooo good.It would make an excellent old fashioned hymn.
Keep them coming -Friend Jerry
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Carolyn - How I wished I had six stars to give out. This poem is sooo good.It would make an excellent old fashioned hymn.
Keep them coming -Friend Jerry
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thanks Jerry, I am glad you liked it. Carolyn