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Comment from Sararb
Another very interesting format. Take my advice don't get sunburn at all if it can be avoided. I have had to deal with skin cancer from trying for that beautiful tan everyone desired in my youth. I should have heeded my mother's warnings of staying protected from the sun. Sararb :)
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Another very interesting format. Take my advice don't get sunburn at all if it can be avoided. I have had to deal with skin cancer from trying for that beautiful tan everyone desired in my youth. I should have heeded my mother's warnings of staying protected from the sun. Sararb :)
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thanks Sara. Very sound advice.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Ouch, alright!
I had a furrowed face and grew dimly dizzy as I focused frantically on your feverish flight of words .... :)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Ouch, alright!
I had a furrowed face and grew dimly dizzy as I focused frantically on your feverish flight of words .... :)
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Thanks Sonali. Appropriate choice of words.
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Comment from ravenblack
Like your use of form. Really hope that is not a picture of your shoulder. Before I would admit to myself that I was balding, hiked all day in the garlands w/out a hat. Let's just say no combing or shower for a while.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Like your use of form. Really hope that is not a picture of your shoulder. Before I would admit to myself that I was balding, hiked all day in the garlands w/out a hat. Let's just say no combing or shower for a while.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Hah! That provides a vvid vision for me. Nope not my shoulder. Thanks Ravenblack.
Comment from robina1978
I have an inkling this form does exist already. Anyway it is very nice and you gave your poem a lovely structure. We here also have to watch out for sun burn at the moment.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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I have an inkling this form does exist already. Anyway it is very nice and you gave your poem a lovely structure. We here also have to watch out for sun burn at the moment.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Thanks Ine. Sunshine at last. My brother just got back from Budapest and told me about the rains and floods.
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What a disaster for your brother as they got it really bad there
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What a disaster for your brother as they got it really bad there
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What a disaster for your brother as they got it really bad there
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What a disaster for your brother as they got it really bad there
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What a disaster for your brother as they got it really bad there
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
This is ingenious. I acturally understood the meaning. Good structure,plenty of white space.
For me the flow hangs at dermatology. I enjoyed this experiment;
Preston
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Hi, Treischel,
This is ingenious. I acturally understood the meaning. Good structure,plenty of white space.
For me the flow hangs at dermatology. I enjoyed this experiment;
Preston
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thank you Preston. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
Your creativity never ceases to amaze me. I love reading your work because it is always a joy to read and a source of creative inspiration. They might not often make it onto the site... but your work has inspired many hours of writing practice, several overflowing waste baskets, and a couple of pieces that I am pretty proud of... Thank you. :)
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Your creativity never ceases to amaze me. I love reading your work because it is always a joy to read and a source of creative inspiration. They might not often make it onto the site... but your work has inspired many hours of writing practice, several overflowing waste baskets, and a couple of pieces that I am pretty proud of... Thank you. :)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thank you Gypsy Starchild. That is amazing. I had no idea.
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Yeah... you and Garth are always sparking my creativity by introducing me to new forms of poetry. You are a good teacher. :)
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Yeah... you and Garth are always sparking my creativity by introducing me to new forms of poetry. You are a good teacher. :)
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Wow, I thought that was your sunburn. Nasty. I enjoyed the weave and followed it closely to the end. The relief came with your AN.
Challenging but fun. Well done. Robin :)
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Wow, I thought that was your sunburn. Nasty. I enjoyed the weave and followed it closely to the end. The relief came with your AN.
Challenging but fun. Well done. Robin :)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks Robin. Sure glad that's not me.
Comment from Dean Kuch
That looks bubblicious, to say the least. I wonder what the rest of this poor soul looked like? Lobster flamb© anyone?...
The unique formatting style, coupled with that delightful blistered photo, made this a fun read.
Uniquely done, T. Way to think outside the box!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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That looks bubblicious, to say the least. I wonder what the rest of this poor soul looked like? Lobster flamb© anyone?...
The unique formatting style, coupled with that delightful blistered photo, made this a fun read.
Uniquely done, T. Way to think outside the box!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thank you Dean. Glad that's not me.
Comment from sunnilicious
That's disgusting... You gotta wear like SPF50 not to get that burn. Hope your skin feels better soon. Yuck. How scary?!! Good work.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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That's disgusting... You gotta wear like SPF50 not to get that burn. Hope your skin feels better soon. Yuck. How scary?!! Good work.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thank Sunnilicious. That's not me, just writing.
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Well, thank goodness!
Comment from NicciFaye
Ouch is RIGHT!!! That looks painful, I love the poem. The accompanying warning to come and to prevent. I loved the structure and flow of it as well.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Ouch is RIGHT!!! That looks painful, I love the poem. The accompanying warning to come and to prevent. I loved the structure and flow of it as well.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks Nicci. Just looked out the window, saw some sunshine, out came the first two words, then the letters took me on the journey that resulted. Sounds simple, huh!
