I Choose Rainbows
Viewing comments for Chapter 94 "Lost"Thoughts from the dark side
6 total reviews
Comment from Darkhorse555
from dust you are floating around you need to get the hoover out it needs a spring clean you might find lost in a beautiful piece
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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from dust you are floating around you need to get the hoover out it needs a spring clean you might find lost in a beautiful piece
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review.
Norm
Comment from donette1914
very well written on lost love, i like were you put Sweeps the rivers Of love and rhyme, a well penned job it was a pleasure to read
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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very well written on lost love, i like were you put Sweeps the rivers Of love and rhyme, a well penned job it was a pleasure to read
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the critique. What would I have done to get a six?
Norm
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The feeling now pours heart with dark and isolation stand in course of living, just love is lost and like fish out of water all appears so dim colourless, well written, I liked the real feeling exposed. 35/619
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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The feeling now pours heart with dark and isolation stand in course of living, just love is lost and like fish out of water all appears so dim colourless, well written, I liked the real feeling exposed. 35/619
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review. As I am new to Fanstory I wonder what it takes to get 6 stars. I see every poem gets a 5 star rating.
Norm
Comment from SteveY
What a wonderful tribute to this girl. Excellent rhyme good rhythm, well expressed thoughts and very good expression of feelings and sentiment!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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What a wonderful tribute to this girl. Excellent rhyme good rhythm, well expressed thoughts and very good expression of feelings and sentiment!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review. As I am new to Fanstory I wonder what it takes to get 6 stars. I see every poem gets a 5 star rating.
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
Lost to tears and sorrow... very poignantly told, this tale of a lost love. And the sunsets remain muted, how sad. I think the entire tone of this poem captures a lingering hurt.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Lost to tears and sorrow... very poignantly told, this tale of a lost love. And the sunsets remain muted, how sad. I think the entire tone of this poem captures a lingering hurt.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review. What would it take to improve the poem?
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Again, on this one, I would play with the phrasing. I also would consider adding an illustration to set the mood.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
' Just yesterday I was in love'
'Oh how the warmth of time'
Makes forgetfulness'
Your poem has a melancholy flow that perfectly compliments the title, 'Lost Love'. Good job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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' Just yesterday I was in love'
'Oh how the warmth of time'
Makes forgetfulness'
Your poem has a melancholy flow that perfectly compliments the title, 'Lost Love'. Good job, Carolyn
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2013
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Thanks for the review. What improvement must be done to make this a 6 star poem? I am new o the site and was wondering. Are all poems rated with 5 stars?
