Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

I can see writing with these restrictions wouldn't be easy, yet you pulled it off. a very positive poem, and the rhyming works brilliantly. Like the appearance of it. Well written. Thanks for sharing. Les

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013

Thank you Les, glad you enjoyed it.

Comment from chasennov

Excellent

'Upward Bound.' A poem written is a heart given. I thought your poem was formulated with a bit of foresight and it's structure was also neat.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013

Thank you chasenov.

reply by chasennov on 20-Jun-2013

You're very welcome.

Comment from SteveY

Excellent

Well, you've certainly captured this style of poetry! I especially like the theme of your poem. Upward! Always moving upward! Excellent!

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013

Thank you SteveY. I'm glad you like it.

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
Congratulations on the invention of an excellent new form.
It has great flow and meter, It has great rhyme and an usual visually interesting structure. I enjoyed reading it.
Preston

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

Thank you so much Preston. I think it might have potential.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Tom,
This is a lovely piece to read. Uplifting much like the Great White Egret soaring high, this gives inspiration as I read it. Great photo too my friend.
I enjoyed reading this one.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

Thank you Maureen. It was meant for you, but I thought I'd include others too.

reply by Maureen's Pen on 17-Jun-2013

What a wonderful gift my friend - you have a kind heart and this made me smile. Recovery still slow and steady which is a gift and miracle on its own.
Enjoy your evening.
Hugs
Maureen

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Good poem. It offers hope by trusting in nature. Spiritual. Well thought out and nicely written. I appreciated reading the authors notes too. Excellent.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

Thank you sunnilicious.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

spirits unpinned .... should there be an apostrophe here?

Past tense of spin is spun ... guess the writer could claim poetic licence here ...

Such a light, hopeful, upbeat feeling these lines inspire - this one is definitely for Maureen. :)

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

Thank you Sonali. I did claim poetic license in my notes.

reply by Selina Stambi on 17-Jun-2013

oops, missed the author notes - how did I do that? :)

reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

I did remove the comma. I original wrote it as a separate thought, but I liked your suggestion.

Comment from donette1914

Excellent

simply beautiful should be on a card it was so stunning in everyway and I truly enjoyed this piece and the photo also. it was a pleasure

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

Thank you so much dinette.

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

such an excellent exhortation. I hate to do this 'cause I really like the progression of your lines and of the poem itself, but I think grammatically it should be " when the wheels of fortune are spun". spinned - poetic license, but pretty glaring. I love the poem though. believe me, it hurts me to point this out. this is truly a wonderful, uplifting piece.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013

Thanks Ravenblack. I know, but go with the flow. After all, this is poetry.