Soul mates
Just some floating thoughts20 total reviews
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Individually different but souls have good connection and rhythms between lovers, one thinks other a perfect soul mate very orderly exalted, I liked the sentiment exposed. 28/619
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Individually different but souls have good connection and rhythms between lovers, one thinks other a perfect soul mate very orderly exalted, I liked the sentiment exposed. 28/619
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thank you for the kind review
Comment from Gianinas
This is such a wonderful line in the poem: "I love him more with each passing morning".
I also loved the metaphor: "I know insistently ". It conveys intensity. I would add that I know that "oposites attract, so, congratulations for the love you found, and for writing a beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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This is such a wonderful line in the poem: "I love him more with each passing morning".
I also loved the metaphor: "I know insistently ". It conveys intensity. I would add that I know that "oposites attract, so, congratulations for the love you found, and for writing a beautiful poem.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thank you I was trying to add depth when I used that word in the poem
Comment from EMB
Ah yes. This reads like young love, but it may be "experienced love" as well. Loved the element of "opposites attract." It really does hold true for a lot of successful relationships. :)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Ah yes. This reads like young love, but it may be "experienced love" as well. Loved the element of "opposites attract." It really does hold true for a lot of successful relationships. :)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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thank you I do try
Comment from ravenblack
This captures young love well. In perfect light at the perfect time is a good line. Just try not to use generic words like scarily.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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This captures young love well. In perfect light at the perfect time is a good line. Just try not to use generic words like scarily.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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okay I will keep that in mind
Comment from Selina Stambi
I'm assuming that the writer is using his daughter's voice to describe the love of her life?
The three concluding lines are my favourite.
What an amazing Dad to be able to see through his daughter's heart.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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I'm assuming that the writer is using his daughter's voice to describe the love of her life?
The three concluding lines are my favourite.
What an amazing Dad to be able to see through his daughter's heart.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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actually his daughter wrought it your the first to figure this out great job
Comment from emjaihammond
This love poem really works on more than one level. I like that it seems to be a young love to me. It talks about a kind of love that seems idealistic and yet possible. A great writing style and it really moves smoothly as it progresses. I liked it.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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This love poem really works on more than one level. I like that it seems to be a young love to me. It talks about a kind of love that seems idealistic and yet possible. A great writing style and it really moves smoothly as it progresses. I liked it.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind words I do try to write as smoothly as possible
Comment from lorijean
A lovely poem and written really well of finding one's soul mate, comes across with love knowing all the pleasure and faults, perfect......
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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A lovely poem and written really well of finding one's soul mate, comes across with love knowing all the pleasure and faults, perfect......
Comment Written 18-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2013
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thank you very much for the kind review
Comment from Pullmanspb
Very romantic and, up to the closing line, I thought it was going to go in a direction I find cloying: He's perfect, we are bound at the hips, we are like two peas in a pod, we fit like a glove, etc.
You didn't go there and, for that, i liked it.
Steven
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Very romantic and, up to the closing line, I thought it was going to go in a direction I find cloying: He's perfect, we are bound at the hips, we are like two peas in a pod, we fit like a glove, etc.
You didn't go there and, for that, i liked it.
Steven
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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Well Im glad it wasn't to romantic for you or sickening I was trying to explain how closeness doesn't have to be always with perfect people
Comment from GregoryCody
So beautiful. I love this poem. Your writing style is amazing and your flow is superb. I love your choices of words. This poem has such a Powerful message. Your love...
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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So beautiful. I love this poem. Your writing style is amazing and your flow is superb. I love your choices of words. This poem has such a Powerful message. Your love...
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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thank you for your review
Comment from Darkhorse555
with each passing day from the fibre of your being love shines a bright light in this wonderful piece I enjoyed your writting
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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with each passing day from the fibre of your being love shines a bright light in this wonderful piece I enjoyed your writting
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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thank you for the review
