Just remember
Is about a lonely follower who misses his lover.6 total reviews
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Good job on the words with a sad tone. I would suggest that you not write out the syllable count and let the reader simply read and absorb your words. In fact, I recommend starting by writing words which simply floe easily to you. Then refine it a bit after walking away from it for a while and choose a picture if you want one. I mention this because free verse will allow you to grow confident with your words before doing structured poetry. Remember any words that come from you naturally are the poetry of your essence and worthy of being heard. People want to hear them too. The learning curve on structured attempts often rob a poet of the confidence to continue. Great job here.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Good job on the words with a sad tone. I would suggest that you not write out the syllable count and let the reader simply read and absorb your words. In fact, I recommend starting by writing words which simply floe easily to you. Then refine it a bit after walking away from it for a while and choose a picture if you want one. I mention this because free verse will allow you to grow confident with your words before doing structured poetry. Remember any words that come from you naturally are the poetry of your essence and worthy of being heard. People want to hear them too. The learning curve on structured attempts often rob a poet of the confidence to continue. Great job here.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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thanks i'm grateful for the correction and they well noted
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Only friendly advice, my friend. I hope you write hundreds of poems! You have so much to inspire you. Have fun. I look forward to reading them. Take care.
Comment from hubba marwa
Great! Great! Great! Very nice poem. you have created maximum of effect with the minimum of words ! It's simply EXCEPTIONAL !
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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Great! Great! Great! Very nice poem. you have created maximum of effect with the minimum of words ! It's simply EXCEPTIONAL !
Comment Written 25-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2013
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thanks alot i'm greatful
Comment from olivia22
This is sadden. Tears rolling down from the eyes.Walking along by the road side is a sign of loneliness. My eyes long to see, i think it is a sign of hope. Eyes is tire with tears rolling down and is looking forward to smile.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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This is sadden. Tears rolling down from the eyes.Walking along by the road side is a sign of loneliness. My eyes long to see, i think it is a sign of hope. Eyes is tire with tears rolling down and is looking forward to smile.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2013
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thanks olivia22 for your review.
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you are most welcome
Comment from Spitfire
I'll be gentle new member. You need to check out the rules for writing 5-7-5 poems. You could take phrases from this paragraph and write it as such. Ex:
Walking down the road (5 syllables)
I yearn to see you once more (7 syllables)
Eyes and mouth waiting (5 syllables)
Not the best example, but just to get you on the right path.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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I'll be gentle new member. You need to check out the rules for writing 5-7-5 poems. You could take phrases from this paragraph and write it as such. Ex:
Walking down the road (5 syllables)
I yearn to see you once more (7 syllables)
Eyes and mouth waiting (5 syllables)
Not the best example, but just to get you on the right path.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2013
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thanks for the correction i'm grateful
Comment from Avia Birdwatcher
This is a good poem. However, I think the poem is not complying exactly to the 5-7-5 standard that it is supposed to be in, unless the poem could repeat the 5-7-5 pattern as long as it could. (If I am wrong, I apologize.) I also feel that having more lines on top of each other would have made the poem more readable. Otherwise, the poem is rather good. There is also some good imagery within the poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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This is a good poem. However, I think the poem is not complying exactly to the 5-7-5 standard that it is supposed to be in, unless the poem could repeat the 5-7-5 pattern as long as it could. (If I am wrong, I apologize.) I also feel that having more lines on top of each other would have made the poem more readable. Otherwise, the poem is rather good. There is also some good imagery within the poem.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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thanks alot
Comment from lorijean
What a lovely poem of love and missing that person so much, beautifully written and a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing......
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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What a lovely poem of love and missing that person so much, beautifully written and a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing......
Comment Written 15-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2013
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thanks alot
