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Poems from a Pensive Poet

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Comment from Samuel Dickens
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Truly something from yesteryear, I think, for few today would understand a father exercising such authority over his daughters. I know this sort of thing happened, though, and have personal knowledgeable of the fact. Excellent writing and a great photo.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2013


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2013
    Thank you so much for reading this poem. You're probably right because few young people of today would stand for a father who tried to control them. Still there are those who are controlled by guilt being heeped on them to the point they ignore their own feeling, especially if the parent is sick and unable to care for themselves. A long time ago, children were conditioned to obey their parents.

    Thanks again for the review.
    Beth
Comment from Darkhorse555
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from the black and white figurines the sense of a regret the pathway steered to never be bitter love don't leave a sour taste beautiful piece

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much for the review and comments. I appreciate you taking the time to read.

    Beth
Comment from lorijean
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My goodness what a surly bunch...love your poem it was really well written and also fun, poor souls never to have loved, thank you for sharing....

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on this. I really appreciate this rating because 26 gets to to Best of Best status. I'm so glad you like the poem.

    Beth
Comment from EMB
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I'd say Papa actually raised his daughter to be mean nuns who will one day smack quite a few knuckles of little children who don't write with the right hand the way God intended. LOL

This has a great message for parents.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    LOL I love your funny comment. I'm glad I didn't attend those Catholic schools. Thanks for the review and for making me laugh.

    Beth
Comment from Belinda
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Hi, Beth, I enjoy reading this story poem and how you slowly and persuasively go to your last verse, the moral of the story! The illustration is so suitable too... Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much Belinda. I really appreciate the review and nice comment. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

    Beth
Comment from nancyjam
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Great poem Beth. I can see how the picture inspired this. What a bunch of prune faces.(lol)
You created a good story though, with a wonderful message in your last
stanza.
Strong rhyme and meter give strength to the poem.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. That picture is a laugh but if you think they are bad, you should see my husbands great-grandmother. I'd be embarrassed to show it. She looks like a serial killer. LOL
    Beth
Comment from joeakeefe
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Reading your piece "resurrected" my late father. That is exactly how he used to describe several maiden lady school teachers who lived in his town in Rhode Island back in the 1920s. None of them were good enough for the country swains. So, as you wrote they remained unplucked and slowly withered away. There was one exception that I recall who at an advanced age found a wdower with whom she "made company" unti he passed. At least the last few years of her life found some form of love.

Great job.

Joe keefe

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much for the review. I really enjoyed reading you comments. It is sad to go though life realizing that you're alone and might be too late for you to find happiness. The old picture reminded me of some in my own family line.

    Beth
Comment from vapros
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Hey, good on you! Five stars this afternoon for this tale - told artistically with excellent rhyme and meter, and with a moral at the end. Fine picture at the top. Lots of good talent being wasted. Well done. Good stuff.

v

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    Thanks so much for the great review and comments. I don't know about talent being wasted but I do enjoy reading comments like your.

    Beth
Comment from Connie C
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I like this little story, and I like that it has a moral to it as well, namely that it isn't good to be a pushy parent. Your rhyme and meter are so good that this poem just floats right along. I truly enjoyed reading it.
Connie

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    Thank you so much for the six stars, Connie. I'm so glad you liked the poem. I enjoyed reading your comments.

    Beth
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Wow! Right on target! Great lesson for over-controlling parents. Let your children lead their OWN lives. You have YOURS to worry about and theirs belongs to them! Bravo!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2013


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
    Thank you Phyllis, I appreciate the review and the resounding agreement with my philosophy.

    Beth