An Easel and A Quay
innocence must pass78 total reviews
Comment from TheNakedPoet
i stumbled across your comments in review and your port begged a read
this is a beautiful poem victortouche
you acknowledge the erosion of time on the body, but NOT on the mind perhaps
how is it as we get older and less able to love physically, we finally get in tune with what love speaks of from the mind and the soul?
you weaved a wisful tale of lost chances and opportunities and i'm glad i stopped by to take a look
the paint sure had it's way with this one
a masterpiece i declare
well done
Ariana
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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i stumbled across your comments in review and your port begged a read
this is a beautiful poem victortouche
you acknowledge the erosion of time on the body, but NOT on the mind perhaps
how is it as we get older and less able to love physically, we finally get in tune with what love speaks of from the mind and the soul?
you weaved a wisful tale of lost chances and opportunities and i'm glad i stopped by to take a look
the paint sure had it's way with this one
a masterpiece i declare
well done
Ariana
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Ariana, a review that a writer simply craves for. i thank you most sincerely. I did love this poem as well. I don't know how I write these sometimes. (not that I'm the most wonderful thin since sliced bread), I look down on what has appeared on the paper...and often ask-"Who wrote this? I wish i could write like him." amazing, no?
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes my friend I must say this is well written so much feeling you have incorporated into this poem and it reads so well it is beautiful well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Yes my friend I must say this is well written so much feeling you have incorporated into this poem and it reads so well it is beautiful well done regards Jill
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thank you Jill. I thought this to be one of my better efforts. It is nice to see you agree. Eyes better?
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
A very interesting and complex poem that I think you managed to pull of excellently. The free verse style and lack of a rhyme scheme helps to focus the reader's attention onto the focus point of what the artist sees. Well done on a well thought out poem illustrating that innocence is too easily lost both in appearance and the soul.
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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A very interesting and complex poem that I think you managed to pull of excellently. The free verse style and lack of a rhyme scheme helps to focus the reader's attention onto the focus point of what the artist sees. Well done on a well thought out poem illustrating that innocence is too easily lost both in appearance and the soul.
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thank you Mr. Jacobs. Wonderful review to come upon this morning.
Comment from 9999pool
A painted picture of a lady paid for the job. The finishing touch applied and she wanted to see the picture but only later. The had en ending like all the other endings. Good or bad, it is up to us to predict but the outcome no one will know as we walked that familiar path we have travelled so often. What will be, will be.
Cheerio, Ritchie. Good write.
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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A painted picture of a lady paid for the job. The finishing touch applied and she wanted to see the picture but only later. The had en ending like all the other endings. Good or bad, it is up to us to predict but the outcome no one will know as we walked that familiar path we have travelled so often. What will be, will be.
Cheerio, Ritchie. Good write.
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thank you Mr. Ritchie. Hey...99? Yes, Max. 99, did you know there are two 99's? Yes, Max.
Comment from God's Writer
A beautiful poem and an equally beautiful photo yo accent this awesome poem. Your flow and your cadence are spot on. Thank you for sharing with me.
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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A beautiful poem and an equally beautiful photo yo accent this awesome poem. Your flow and your cadence are spot on. Thank you for sharing with me.
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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And thank you for reading it.
Comment from Darkhorse555
you paint such a beautiful picture with words in colours the joy in your life lovely portrait painted with pictures I like the vision
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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you paint such a beautiful picture with words in colours the joy in your life lovely portrait painted with pictures I like the vision
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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Very nice of you to say. I thank you sincerely.
Comment from Selina Stambi
A beautiful, poem - very unique in its style.
You created wistful, almost sad sensations and pictures in my head.
Very, very nicely done. Love the stark simplicity of your lines.
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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A beautiful, poem - very unique in its style.
You created wistful, almost sad sensations and pictures in my head.
Very, very nicely done. Love the stark simplicity of your lines.
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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I did enjoy your supportive comments, naturally. But, I always seem to cling to any mention of unigue. Thank you.
Comment from vickib
Ok Doug, I have to admit I read the reviews and read your thoughts when writing this, but I have my own as someone who has always been involved in art and the creative process. Also as a collector of art, this poem intrigues me.
The first two verses made me think of how often I have painted the same thing but over the years the innocence of the brush stroke has become repetitive so my heart sometimes isn't in it like it was when I was passionate about it. Yet im comfortable and confident with the brush. As is many things in life when you get older.
Also, now it takes a lot of rituals to get me to the point of starting a new piece of art. I know what's evolved and sometimes it takes a lot out of me.
The rest of the poem is extremely layered like the paint. You are seeing and revealing what you want-that innocence, but sad when you realize its long past. (God I hate that about being 55) once I'm done, I like to be alone with what I created until I decide if I captured what I was attempting or what I saw. So that's my take on paying her quickly and asking her to come back later. Once its done sometimes I want to return and sometimes I let it go, and sometimes I just miss the mark.
See, its different for me than you, or is it? I think you should take up painting myself.
Super poem for its many many layers of paint.
XO
Vicki
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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Ok Doug, I have to admit I read the reviews and read your thoughts when writing this, but I have my own as someone who has always been involved in art and the creative process. Also as a collector of art, this poem intrigues me.
The first two verses made me think of how often I have painted the same thing but over the years the innocence of the brush stroke has become repetitive so my heart sometimes isn't in it like it was when I was passionate about it. Yet im comfortable and confident with the brush. As is many things in life when you get older.
Also, now it takes a lot of rituals to get me to the point of starting a new piece of art. I know what's evolved and sometimes it takes a lot out of me.
The rest of the poem is extremely layered like the paint. You are seeing and revealing what you want-that innocence, but sad when you realize its long past. (God I hate that about being 55) once I'm done, I like to be alone with what I created until I decide if I captured what I was attempting or what I saw. So that's my take on paying her quickly and asking her to come back later. Once its done sometimes I want to return and sometimes I let it go, and sometimes I just miss the mark.
See, its different for me than you, or is it? I think you should take up painting myself.
Super poem for its many many layers of paint.
XO
Vicki
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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And see, I just envy painters and musicians such as yourself. your true artistic talent. but, I'm afraid I would become lost in either. Starting Sunday afternoon perhaps, and waking from said haze Thursday, completely unaware of time passing. I thank you most sincerely for your inner thought processes, as I momentarily melted into that world. The six is beautiful, but incidental in comparison. Thank you so much Vicki.
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The rituals involved, sometimes it takes a lot out of me. (as it should) I'm just chuckling, because you have inadvertantly not recognized that you have just revealed how much passion resides still within you brush. You fool, you utter fool. Love, victor.
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McArthur's Park is melting in the dark...someone left the cake out in the rain
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You goof! Lol!
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I did? I am!
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Thank you Doug! Great reply made it worth writing a review. It's in you the art and music it shows in your poetry.
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Actually that's pretty interesting now I'm thinking about it.
You make me smile.
Comment from Mrs Jones
I have told you how much I love your unique poetry. This one I had read a few times. The reason he wanted to destroy her innocence is intriguing to me. Great verse.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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I have told you how much I love your unique poetry. This one I had read a few times. The reason he wanted to destroy her innocence is intriguing to me. Great verse.
Well done
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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Have I told you that your appreciation of my uniqueness...sustains me.
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And may I add, I have never seen a picture such as yours, presented in your profile, that captures the "Muse Trance" so effectively. LOL
Comment from Shaun Hess
When you talk about "her" in the painting are you talking about yourself and how it saddens you to paint yourself from your own perception? If I'm totally off then excuse me, for the image may have thrown me off in my analysis... Nice poem though!
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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When you talk about "her" in the painting are you talking about yourself and how it saddens you to paint yourself from your own perception? If I'm totally off then excuse me, for the image may have thrown me off in my analysis... Nice poem though!
Comment Written 27-May-2013
reply by the author on 27-May-2013
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No, I am a male, but that in and of itself does not mean I couldn't have used the image metaphorically. First of all, thank you. Secondly, I do explain my thoughts in GWHARGIS's review. Be so kind as to refer to this?
