To be gay
The dilemma of the tormented gay community19 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
If only the world could come to believe this truth. 'And given a choice, it could be no other way.' Your words ring true and the poem came out just right. You chose the perfect artwork to compliment the piece.
The rhyme and rhythm maintain throughout the poem, and the words stay true. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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If only the world could come to believe this truth. 'And given a choice, it could be no other way.' Your words ring true and the poem came out just right. You chose the perfect artwork to compliment the piece.
The rhyme and rhythm maintain throughout the poem, and the words stay true. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thank you Patty so much for your excellent review, I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, To Be Gay, is important for everyone to read as it humanizes this issue and opens it to empathy and acceptance. People can't ignore who they are and others should not judge what is different to them.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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This poem, To Be Gay, is important for everyone to read as it humanizes this issue and opens it to empathy and acceptance. People can't ignore who they are and others should not judge what is different to them.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thank you Bill so much for your excellent review, I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Mabaker
Every well put together. A delicate topic and you handled it with feeling and respect. I have known gay people both men and women they are foremost human beings and should be treated as the person in your poem. Well done. Sincerely Mabaker
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Every well put together. A delicate topic and you handled it with feeling and respect. I have known gay people both men and women they are foremost human beings and should be treated as the person in your poem. Well done. Sincerely Mabaker
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your excellent review, I appreciate it. Mary
Comment from Rmocruz
We know that homosexuality has existed since at least
the beginning of recorded history. Each organized society
has dealt with it in one way or another. I don't believe
at this time being blatant is to their overall benefit.
Apathy at least is in their favor. Many people on the
fence would have to get off their ass and actually make
a decision.
Your well rhymed couplets present a valid message.
Excellent writing overall.
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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We know that homosexuality has existed since at least
the beginning of recorded history. Each organized society
has dealt with it in one way or another. I don't believe
at this time being blatant is to their overall benefit.
Apathy at least is in their favor. Many people on the
fence would have to get off their ass and actually make
a decision.
Your well rhymed couplets present a valid message.
Excellent writing overall.
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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I am glad you enjoyed it. I do believe it should not be even a subject for discussion, people are born with different patterned brains not of their choosing. If more people understood this, we may have much more understanding, and less hostility
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My attitude is based on the recent violence
against gays.
Comment from lorijean
Well done for putting this verse out there, we are all different and you said it loud and proud, good for you, thank you for sharing....
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Well done for putting this verse out there, we are all different and you said it loud and proud, good for you, thank you for sharing....
Comment Written 26-May-2013
reply by the author on 26-May-2013
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Glad you got can see that we are all individuals we do not choose what we were born with, but it is what we do with our lives to remain faithful to ourselves is most important.
Comment from persevere
Your sensible acceptance of a person, irrespective of their sexuality, comes across so clearly in this poem. Who gives us the right to judge anyone for being different from us? I have gay friends but that adjective does not come into my usual description of them.
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Your sensible acceptance of a person, irrespective of their sexuality, comes across so clearly in this poem. Who gives us the right to judge anyone for being different from us? I have gay friends but that adjective does not come into my usual description of them.
Comment Written 25-May-2013
reply by the author on 25-May-2013
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Very true who gives us the right to judge anyone. Thanks for your comments and stars
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Welcome to FanStory Jackarrie!
This is a thought provoking piece with some good imagery and rhyme. It seems to ask questions as well as guide the reader.
I would suggest splitting your two large blocks into two again (thus four stanzas) so that the reader doesn't have the visual of big block of words.
It can deter reviewers the way you have it at present.
Overall well penned post.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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Welcome to FanStory Jackarrie!
This is a thought provoking piece with some good imagery and rhyme. It seems to ask questions as well as guide the reader.
I would suggest splitting your two large blocks into two again (thus four stanzas) so that the reader doesn't have the visual of big block of words.
It can deter reviewers the way you have it at present.
Overall well penned post.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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Thanks Maureen, I do not think I can change it now. but thanks for your comments
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Yes you can edit a work after posting by choosing the edit work button from you portfolio. But again that is your own call.
Hugs
Maureen
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer sticks the aabb rhyme scheme for the most part. The writer does a good job of getting the point across. I'm just looking to see a little more consistency in the rhyming in verse two. Other than that, this piece is good to go.
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reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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The writer sticks the aabb rhyme scheme for the most part. The writer does a good job of getting the point across. I'm just looking to see a little more consistency in the rhyming in verse two. Other than that, this piece is good to go.
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Comment Written 24-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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Yes
I agree with you. Thanks for the comments
Comment from ronnie k
I read then skipped because I didn't love the God addition but who am I to deny your writing, very well writte. I feel a little taller after reviewing this, afther all no critic on site RIGHT!
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reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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I read then skipped because I didn't love the God addition but who am I to deny your writing, very well writte. I feel a little taller after reviewing this, afther all no critic on site RIGHT!
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Comment Written 24-May-2013
reply by the author on 24-May-2013
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I believe the site allows constructive criticism. You are entitled to your beliefs , thanks your comments.
