Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Hmmm, I'm not sure just how I'm supposed to take this.
Your love bounced back in some other form, which sounds
scarey on one hand, but but hot and passionate on the other hand. Not sure which.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 08-May-2013

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reply by the author on 08-May-2013

Well, its the story of a girl, who reveals her love for a man and he shoots her down like a dog. So she feels knocked on her ass. that's all. No hot and passionate here. Thanks for giving me your valued opinions. Must go over it for a re-write.

Comment from Ekim777

Good

Love or eros is long regarded as life's vital force matched by the seduction of that negative force to oblivion and death. As for the rest of time, life is simply a detour towards the end. To encounter love, the acme of all relationship is court fired. And it sears back all sound and fury, signifying nothing. I'm afraid I cannot fathom the last word.-Ekim777

 Comment Written 08-May-2013

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reply by the author on 08-May-2013

Well, actually, It's just the story of a girl, who reveals her love for a man and he shoots her down like a dog. (cruelly rejects her). So she feels knocked on her ass. Rejection is powerful stuff. was just trying to convey that here. This poem is more about rejection that about love. Thanks for your input:)