Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Un-urned"Assorted poetry
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Comment from dmt1967
This has a good rhythm I like the picture and the way it flows very well thought out I like the structure as well thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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This has a good rhythm I like the picture and the way it flows very well thought out I like the structure as well thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-May-2013
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this.
Comment from Sararb
You did a good job with the format and rhyming of this poem. I enjoyed how well it flowed. I think I understood this right. This is an urn that is waiting for a poor man that is very ill and at the point of death. Good job! Sararb
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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You did a good job with the format and rhyming of this poem. I enjoyed how well it flowed. I think I understood this right. This is an urn that is waiting for a poor man that is very ill and at the point of death. Good job! Sararb
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. Bill
Comment from nancyjam
How sad. The speaker has lost two loved
ones and wishes to join them in death as life
has become "an endless sea of sorrow."
Beautifully written with strong rhyme and rhythm
and emotional impact.
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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How sad. The speaker has lost two loved
ones and wishes to join them in death as life
has become "an endless sea of sorrow."
Beautifully written with strong rhyme and rhythm
and emotional impact.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Thank you for your kind and discerning review. Bill
Comment from NicciFaye
Ummmmmm very deep and filled with sorrow. Rhyming is well developed. A poetic story of accepting what is to come, yet dreading to face it. Creative poem though filled with sorrow.
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Ummmmmm very deep and filled with sorrow. Rhyming is well developed. A poetic story of accepting what is to come, yet dreading to face it. Creative poem though filled with sorrow.
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review. Bill
Comment from country ranch writer
PERSON IS DYING AND CANT DECIDE WHICH TO GO WITH SO HE IS STRUGGLING WITH HIS DECISION AND HE HAS DECIDED TO NOT HAVE ALL THE FUSS AND MUSS AND DO IT UP RIGHT BY HAVING HIS ASHES SCATTERED TO THE WIND
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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PERSON IS DYING AND CANT DECIDE WHICH TO GO WITH SO HE IS STRUGGLING WITH HIS DECISION AND HE HAS DECIDED TO NOT HAVE ALL THE FUSS AND MUSS AND DO IT UP RIGHT BY HAVING HIS ASHES SCATTERED TO THE WIND
Comment Written 06-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you for reviewing.
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welcome
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a nice poem on formation to transformation, one shape to another, and it is well expressed, I liked the flow of thoughts and stunning imagery with visual portrayal in an orderly stand, I enjoyed the process. 27/505
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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This is a nice poem on formation to transformation, one shape to another, and it is well expressed, I liked the flow of thoughts and stunning imagery with visual portrayal in an orderly stand, I enjoyed the process. 27/505
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 06-May-2013
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Thank you for taking some time to review this. Your analysis reveals your search for meaning beyond the words and I appreciate the effort.
Comment from donaldww
I'm not sure what this lyric poem is about. Someone is struggling, perhaps it is the poet, and can't tell up from down.
The summer has come, but there is no joy. He lives in an endless sea of sorrow.
If he dies this evening, his ashes will end up in an urn.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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I'm not sure what this lyric poem is about. Someone is struggling, perhaps it is the poet, and can't tell up from down.
The summer has come, but there is no joy. He lives in an endless sea of sorrow.
If he dies this evening, his ashes will end up in an urn.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Gee, I wondered what that poem was about. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Indie Skreet
well this write's on fire Bill and was an enjoyable read and a bit different, thank the heavens, of a lot I have been reading lately best wishes Indie
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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well this write's on fire Bill and was an enjoyable read and a bit different, thank the heavens, of a lot I have been reading lately best wishes Indie
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you for reviewing. I'm glad I 'urned' some stars.
Comment from Sam Mendonca
A very emotional poem put into very meaningful words by the
author.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
The photo you chose gives the reader an ideal of what the content of the poem will be about.
Nicley done. :D
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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A very emotional poem put into very meaningful words by the
author.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
The photo you chose gives the reader an ideal of what the content of the poem will be about.
Nicley done. :D
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you for your kind review. Bill
Comment from RodG
One's heart goes out to the man described in this poem who has apparently lost two loved ones and wishes he were dead. His grief torments him so much he finds only "an endless sea of sorrow."
I like your use of iambic trimeter and rhyme in this poem.
RodG
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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One's heart goes out to the man described in this poem who has apparently lost two loved ones and wishes he were dead. His grief torments him so much he finds only "an endless sea of sorrow."
I like your use of iambic trimeter and rhyme in this poem.
RodG
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thank you for your kind review. Bill