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Comment from nancyjam
You capture the tragedy and destruction
Of the fires in California fires so well in your Sonnet.
Strong rhyme, meter and images.
Nice closing couplet to sum it up.
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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You capture the tragedy and destruction
Of the fires in California fires so well in your Sonnet.
Strong rhyme, meter and images.
Nice closing couplet to sum it up.
Comment Written 07-May-2013
reply by the author on 07-May-2013
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Thank you Nancyjam. I appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Well done Tom. I truly can not believe there is any of California
left that hasn't burned. Every year they face the same fate.
And yes, the animals that no one seems to laments. Such a shame. Enjoyable write.
Robin :)
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Well done Tom. I truly can not believe there is any of California
left that hasn't burned. Every year they face the same fate.
And yes, the animals that no one seems to laments. Such a shame. Enjoyable write.
Robin :)
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thanks Robin. Between fires, mudslides, and earthquakes, I'm not so sure that California is Paradise. I'll take my snow.
Comment from 9999pool
A good write about the forest burning. usually and act of art or very dry weather. Season after season the same thing goes on giving rise to billions in lot properties and other belongings.
A good write and well expressed.
best
Ritchie.
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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A good write about the forest burning. usually and act of art or very dry weather. Season after season the same thing goes on giving rise to billions in lot properties and other belongings.
A good write and well expressed.
best
Ritchie.
Comment Written 05-May-2013
reply by the author on 05-May-2013
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Thanks Ritchie. Between fires, mudslides, and earthquakes, California is not always Paradise.
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So true Tom. Thanks for sharing.
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best
Ritchie.
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of alternate-line rhyme in your quatrains followed by a solid rhyming couplet
good alliteration in stretches of the state
and in ponder property's
good consonance of F sounds in families left bereft
your meter isn't always consistently iambic, but the poem flows well when read aloud
You capture well the devastation of these fires
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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excellent use of alternate-line rhyme in your quatrains followed by a solid rhyming couplet
good alliteration in stretches of the state
and in ponder property's
good consonance of F sounds in families left bereft
your meter isn't always consistently iambic, but the poem flows well when read aloud
You capture well the devastation of these fires
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you Brooke.
Comment from lexairu
Hi Treischel. Same here in Australia, bush fires especially in regional areas. This poem shows the effects of this kind of tragedy to people, community, and the wildlife.
I haven't written a Sonnet. Is rhyming required? This is very well-written and I think it can also be extended into Quatrain? Cheers, Lex
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Hi Treischel. Same here in Australia, bush fires especially in regional areas. This poem shows the effects of this kind of tragedy to people, community, and the wildlife.
I haven't written a Sonnet. Is rhyming required? This is very well-written and I think it can also be extended into Quatrain? Cheers, Lex
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks Lex. Yes Sonnets require rhyming. Have you found Poetry Dances. It's right here under the "Home" tab. Once there, choose "All Poetry" there's a list of many, but not all, styles there. it explains them and gives examples. See if that helps. Then give the all a try and on time or another. Have fun!
Tom
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Hi Tom, yes I've just found Poetry Dances. thanks. I'll be exploring them one by one. Cheers
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Wonderful. Have fun. enjoy. You will come across others too as you do reviewing.
Comment from robina1978
I did not know that California has fires every year. But it is very hot there. Good that you ask attention for all the heartache it gives. This must have been what Words was writing about.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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I did not know that California has fires every year. But it is very hot there. Good that you ask attention for all the heartache it gives. This must have been what Words was writing about.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks Ine.
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most welcome as always, Ine
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this sonnet about the families displaced and the wildlife killed in the fires in california. i enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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this is very well written, treischel, you did an excellent job writing this sonnet about the families displaced and the wildlife killed in the fires in california. i enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you sweetwoodjax. To is such a shame each year.
Comment from Curly Girly
Those fires are terrible. We see some of them on the news here too. I do feel sorry for the people who suffer. The animals have it bad too. A good poem about it.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Those fires are terrible. We see some of them on the news here too. I do feel sorry for the people who suffer. The animals have it bad too. A good poem about it.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you Curly Girly.
Comment from amahra
Thanks for teaching me how to say, scenery. I thought is was three syllables. I loved the art work of the fire and so sorry so many lost their homes. I loved the poem. Sonnets and Sestina are my favorite. The poem was perfect in its da da da da da da da da da da da. Good job.
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thanks for teaching me how to say, scenery. I thought is was three syllables. I loved the art work of the fire and so sorry so many lost their homes. I loved the poem. Sonnets and Sestina are my favorite. The poem was perfect in its da da da da da da da da da da da. Good job.
Comment Written 04-May-2013
reply by the author on 04-May-2013
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Thank you amanda.
Comment from sunnilicious
California Wildfires sure have become a yearly talk of the nation. That photograph is scary. And you wrote this poem in Sonnet form. That's rare for a current event. Modern. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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California Wildfires sure have become a yearly talk of the nation. That photograph is scary. And you wrote this poem in Sonnet form. That's rare for a current event. Modern. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 03-May-2013
reply by the author on 03-May-2013
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Thank you so much sunnilicious. You brighten this snowy cloudy day.
