What is Going On !
Forever Tears7 total reviews
Comment from chasennov
'What Is Going On.' A very good supposition on your part, PJ. This stuff you're talking about was all man-made. Whether man can undo what they did, is another question. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
'What Is Going On.' A very good supposition on your part, PJ. This stuff you're talking about was all man-made. Whether man can undo what they did, is another question. Well done.
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you chasennov
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My pleasure
Comment from Frank Atwood
When one finds pure truth of who they are and where we all are at this time in the overall picture, such problems disappear slowly dissipate. But, to many love the chaos and they enrich themselves in it, thus only those of us who stay simple and true to ourselves find real peace within. God bless and quite nicely done for many who feel the same as you depict in your poem. God bless and keep up the great writing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
When one finds pure truth of who they are and where we all are at this time in the overall picture, such problems disappear slowly dissipate. But, to many love the chaos and they enrich themselves in it, thus only those of us who stay simple and true to ourselves find real peace within. God bless and quite nicely done for many who feel the same as you depict in your poem. God bless and keep up the great writing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you Frank
Comment from Akanksha Mahajan
This is a very good poem. Really the world is going with wars and harshness which should be actually changed with love, peace and harmony.
Well you may edit your few lines 'The rich are getter richer
And the poor are staying poor '
as 'The rich are getting richer
And the poor are becoming poorer ' , 'Let go of the dark and let unity take rein' as 'Let go off the dark and let unity take rein'
Inspire-able Work!!!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
This is a very good poem. Really the world is going with wars and harshness which should be actually changed with love, peace and harmony.
Well you may edit your few lines 'The rich are getter richer
And the poor are staying poor '
as 'The rich are getting richer
And the poor are becoming poorer ' , 'Let go of the dark and let unity take rein' as 'Let go off the dark and let unity take rein'
Inspire-able Work!!!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your review Akanksha,
I am happy with my poem so I won't be changing it : )
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no problem but there is a spelling mistake 'getter'
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was a very well crafted piece of poetic prose with a solid message I wish many would take heed of...
Love others more than you love yourself
War does accomplish something...it KILLS people
See that homeless person starving? Buy them McDonalds.
There is so much we can do in this world on a small scale to help others out. reach out once in awhile people. You'll sure feel good about it!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
This was a very well crafted piece of poetic prose with a solid message I wish many would take heed of...
Love others more than you love yourself
War does accomplish something...it KILLS people
See that homeless person starving? Buy them McDonalds.
There is so much we can do in this world on a small scale to help others out. reach out once in awhile people. You'll sure feel good about it!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Your words are true and you are blessed : )
Comment from Rmocruz
Your well selected words present a valid unsettling message.
You have accurately described the human condition of the
me-first society in poetic fashion.
You may wish to make Religion plural in quatrain four.
An interesting read.
Rich.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
Your well selected words present a valid unsettling message.
You have accurately described the human condition of the
me-first society in poetic fashion.
You may wish to make Religion plural in quatrain four.
An interesting read.
Rich.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you Rich
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You're welcome.
Comment from purnima1812
It's a nice picture to show what you mean :)
the poetry is great can be more by a bit polishing.
it starts with a scene of the present world and a question
posed ,on the other hand within itself has a solution to those.
loved it :)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
It's a nice picture to show what you mean :)
the poetry is great can be more by a bit polishing.
it starts with a scene of the present world and a question
posed ,on the other hand within itself has a solution to those.
loved it :)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you
Comment from bettymiss
amazing description of our world , it bought tears to my eyes as well questions and fear , and praying at the end it has a lot of feeling .
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
amazing description of our world , it bought tears to my eyes as well questions and fear , and praying at the end it has a lot of feeling .
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2013
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Thank you bettymiss