My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "See You!"All of my poems of release.
10 total reviews
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Jaq, a powerful work you've penned here. Great rhythm and rhyme with the journey of all the challenges we go through.
I thought you penned it with great impact - no whining just get back up and dust yourself off and get back on the horse.
For that type of courage wins every time.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Hi Jaq, a powerful work you've penned here. Great rhythm and rhyme with the journey of all the challenges we go through.
I thought you penned it with great impact - no whining just get back up and dust yourself off and get back on the horse.
For that type of courage wins every time.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks Maureen there is no point in whining. Life goes on. Much love and respect, Jaq xx
Comment from October21
Good poem about how we face many bumps in the road sometimes... But we are strong. And then looking back its good to see how we stayed fighting and didn't give into the temptation to end it all:) xx
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Good poem about how we face many bumps in the road sometimes... But we are strong. And then looking back its good to see how we stayed fighting and didn't give into the temptation to end it all:) xx
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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We must always strive to make the best of the life God gave us and not end it ourselves. We are stronger than we think xxxx
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We must always strive to make the best of the life God gave us and not end it ourselves. We are stronger than we think xxxx
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We must always strive to make the best of the life God gave us and not end it ourselves. We are stronger than we think xxxx
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:) xx
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No wonder you're smiling that reply posted 3 times lmao xx
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LOL! It always happens to me don't worry, my phone messes up and it sends like 50 times:) xx
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
good use of enjambment
strong verbs like seduce and beguile add power and meaning to your message
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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solid use of abcb rhyming
good use of enjambment
strong verbs like seduce and beguile add power and meaning to your message
Brooke
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Brooke xx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend this reads very well the strength of the poem builds right up until the closing well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend this reads very well the strength of the poem builds right up until the closing well done regards Jill
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Once again I am indebted to you my friend xx
Comment from lorijean
A great poem, a love lost and broken promises, sometimes I really hate humans they can be so cruel, give me a cat or dog any time.... love it, thank you for sharing.....
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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A great poem, a love lost and broken promises, sometimes I really hate humans they can be so cruel, give me a cat or dog any time.... love it, thank you for sharing.....
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks for another lovely review lorijean xxx
Comment from closetpoetjester
Heavy lament in this one JC and I think I felt the inside of your soul here. Short format works well for the punches and jabs throughout that you gave and that you obviously took.
Men can be thoughtless bastards, smooth talkers and complete pigs. Sometimes even a combination of all three. I got a triple rolled into one here. Hang in there mate. NO man is worth this drama. I admire this write as it felt like an open outpouring of feelings and the only suggestion to improve is in the last stanza:
you have
"life is worth more"
I thought maybe personify it a bit more and say:
"my life worth more"
Just my thoughts and I'll always give you the most honest assessment I can from what I'm reading. The visual side of the poem suited the dark and brooding lament shared here. I DID like your positivity at the end. Look after yourself.
Cheers P
xx
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Heavy lament in this one JC and I think I felt the inside of your soul here. Short format works well for the punches and jabs throughout that you gave and that you obviously took.
Men can be thoughtless bastards, smooth talkers and complete pigs. Sometimes even a combination of all three. I got a triple rolled into one here. Hang in there mate. NO man is worth this drama. I admire this write as it felt like an open outpouring of feelings and the only suggestion to improve is in the last stanza:
you have
"life is worth more"
I thought maybe personify it a bit more and say:
"my life worth more"
Just my thoughts and I'll always give you the most honest assessment I can from what I'm reading. The visual side of the poem suited the dark and brooding lament shared here. I DID like your positivity at the end. Look after yourself.
Cheers P
xx
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks Pippa I will go back to that line. Cheers for your much appreciated help and review. Emotions were a bit raw at time of writing hon. I'll always be ok. I'm a surviver :) xx
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Cheers Pip I did take your suggestion on board mate. Many thanks Jaq xx
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The best time to write is when its raw and real. Don't be afraid to share your emotion...it not only helps you but others too my friend.
I'm sure you'll survive, this poem had MUCH self assertiveness inspite of the turmoil and angst throughout...
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Once again you're so right Pippa. Love n hugs, Jaq xx
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You've got strong shoulders girl.
I can tell.
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It's amasing how strong you can be when that is the only choice left. ;-). Life's a rollercoaster but it does have more ups than down hon. By the way, you're not a week person yourself. Stay strong, Jaq xxx
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Your emotions seem so sadly genuine here, Jaq, so I hope some bugger hasn't really let you down. You infer he's a poet, and you can never trust US. LOL
Just kidding of course and I hope this is fictional.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Your emotions seem so sadly genuine here, Jaq, so I hope some bugger hasn't really let you down. You infer he's a poet, and you can never trust US. LOL
Just kidding of course and I hope this is fictional.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thanks Ray as always your review means a lot my friend xxx
Comment from Indie Skreet
Hi My Sweet, I have no real certainty what this one is about, but I can guess. Sounds as if someone you sort of already knew was a bad'n has let you down big time ......... and if a 'man' and I use that word lightly, then DEFINITELY NOT WORTH IT! You are special and deserve someone equally special. I am always here for you and I think you know that. As soon as I can get myself sorted, I am on the next plane over. Lots of love and a big hug, Indie xx
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Hi My Sweet, I have no real certainty what this one is about, but I can guess. Sounds as if someone you sort of already knew was a bad'n has let you down big time ......... and if a 'man' and I use that word lightly, then DEFINITELY NOT WORTH IT! You are special and deserve someone equally special. I am always here for you and I think you know that. As soon as I can get myself sorted, I am on the next plane over. Lots of love and a big hug, Indie xx
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Aww thanks for that Indie. As always I'll be fine. Would love to have you visit xxxx
Comment from Dean Kuch
I really enjoyed the meter, the rhyming scheme and the positive message you have portrayed here. It's been said by millions, probably a trillion times throughout history..."What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger"
I like your version a lot better!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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I really enjoyed the meter, the rhyming scheme and the positive message you have portrayed here. It's been said by millions, probably a trillion times throughout history..."What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger"
I like your version a lot better!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you very much Dean it does indeed. Great review my friend x
Comment from reconciled
Hi.....-smile- eeew wee...ouchy. Exceptional write of a beautiful woman who would not yield to death, nor completely trust words that rust.... alright ...but remember some words stand the test of time...never turning to dust...its all dependent upon the lips of who voices the utterance. love you good lady Michael
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Hi.....-smile- eeew wee...ouchy. Exceptional write of a beautiful woman who would not yield to death, nor completely trust words that rust.... alright ...but remember some words stand the test of time...never turning to dust...its all dependent upon the lips of who voices the utterance. love you good lady Michael
Comment Written 25-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Awww thanks again Michael. Your reviews mean so much. Love right back at ya...Jaq xx