Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "tanka (old man gazes upon)"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
4 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
The art work is really great.
I also liked the way how the words were written.
I liked what the writer wrote.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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The art work is really great.
I also liked the way how the words were written.
I liked what the writer wrote.
Honey tree
Comment Written 24-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a great review, honeytree. :)
Comment from 9999pool
Silent remnants of a memory - hurtful and sad of his son's unfinished life.
The weather had seasoned down the fallow field of things in transience and gradually fading into the future like the death of his son.
On a weathered chair, a symbol of decay and that nothing is permanent in this world, he reflected upon the wabi-sabi of things around him, his son being one of them.
As we gazed upon life we can all feel 'wabi-sabi' unfolding her truth to us: birth, old age, sickness and death became real as well as the impermanence of things.
The simple form of this wabi-sabi highlighted the simplicity of life in nature and the passage of time where all become nothingness and emptiness - a void.
Self-nature or ego thus becomes meaningless when our ashes are blown away by the wind.
Excellent write and accentuated the meaning of the wabi-sabi concept.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Silent remnants of a memory - hurtful and sad of his son's unfinished life.
The weather had seasoned down the fallow field of things in transience and gradually fading into the future like the death of his son.
On a weathered chair, a symbol of decay and that nothing is permanent in this world, he reflected upon the wabi-sabi of things around him, his son being one of them.
As we gazed upon life we can all feel 'wabi-sabi' unfolding her truth to us: birth, old age, sickness and death became real as well as the impermanence of things.
The simple form of this wabi-sabi highlighted the simplicity of life in nature and the passage of time where all become nothingness and emptiness - a void.
Self-nature or ego thus becomes meaningless when our ashes are blown away by the wind.
Excellent write and accentuated the meaning of the wabi-sabi concept.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Hi Ritchie! I enjoyed the challenge you put forth with your contest and was inspired to take up that gauntlet and include this in my Naprowrimo challenge. Thank you for the fantastic, in depth review and for the inspiration. I love learning and applying new concepts.
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I ran out of six stars and have been chasing around for them every week. So I will give a virtual six for this write on wabi-sabi. Golly gosh, it came out so well, much better than I had expected. Yes, you have jump high up in the bandwagon of wabi-sabi. Remember to apply this concept and it can give a soul and life to your poems. Thanks for sharing.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a sad write about an elderly father thinking of his son's 'unfinished life' and I'm presuming relating this to the world around us.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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This is a sad write about an elderly father thinking of his son's 'unfinished life' and I'm presuming relating this to the world around us.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your most observant review, Pearl.
Comment from marijmd
What a lovely and sad poem - very well done. Good luck in the contest. Nothing is more sad than a parent mourning the loss of a child - against the natural order of things.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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What a lovely and sad poem - very well done. Good luck in the contest. Nothing is more sad than a parent mourning the loss of a child - against the natural order of things.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the kind sentiments, marijmd. :)
