Comment from L. Sherman

Excellent

Another good one, this time with a very powerful and somber message. It's sad that the world is such a place that these things are 'typical'. Atrocities and horror are around each corner. A wonderful write.

 Comment Written 23-May-2013

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reply by the author on 23-May-2013

Thank you Lisa. So true. See how powerful and versatile your format is? I try to make sure you get proper credit.

reply by L. Sherman on 23-May-2013

Well, I'm just glad you like it. It was created entirely by accident, and if not for Ritch, I don't think it would have seen the light of day! Just keep doing what you do. You know I love your work!

Comment from mikenbel

Exceptional

I really must bow to your poetic expertise. This is another great poem that you have written so expertly. I really enjoy reading your writing. I am just awed by your ability!

 Comment Written 20-May-2013

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reply by the author on 20-May-2013

Thank you mikenbel. This one came from the heart.

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Good

What an interesting poem and interesting form; I think the illustration made my eyes open pretty wide. I have never read a poem that effectively used the rhyme "maybes" with "babies" before. There is a lot of strong feeling in the poem, like a lament.

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 Comment Written 20-May-2013

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reply by the author on 20-May-2013

Thanks Crystie.

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Treischel,

Yikes the rules of this poetry form sound complicated to me. However, you have mastered it in fine style. Your rhyme pattern is strong, word selection is stunning and express the theme of the poem expertly. Well done, chey

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2013

Thanks so much Chey. I'm flattered by your review.

Comment from 9999pool

Excellent

Well done on this Lisalet.
Great write and told of the untold miseries that we suffered from homeland insecurity and dangers lurking in classrooms for the tiny children in schools besides the bombings.
Good write and well expressed in thi sLisalet.
Cheerio, Ritchie.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2013

Thanks Ritchie. I changed the spelling to Lisalet.

Comment from Eigle Rull

Excellent

This was a heartfelt piece about the loss of our children to murderers. The way you stated your case was excellent. The flow seemed perfect to me. I enjoyed the message so others will know our feelings. I found no mistakes at all. I found this to be excellent in every way. Wonderful job my friend.

Always with respect,

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thank you very much, Eigle, I appreciate you reviewing and commenting very much.

Comment from MM lives on :)

Excellent

wow, yes indeed this statement echoes sentiments of many..Oh Weep! For the Innocent Blood of our babies! ...an excellent rhyming scheme throughout the entire poem...a sad but true reality my friend that you penned well

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thank you Christopher for the review and the comments.

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

I feel a tad mean, because I so wanted to six you on this, but for abbeys and maybe's - even though that extra line rhymed. I don't care, hate me - I reckon a few on here do anyway lol xx

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks Indie, I dont hate you. I appreciate the five.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is well written there is so much hatred in this world we live in today and the children do become the innocent victims well done on this write it reads well regards Jill

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thank you Jill. I appreciate your comments.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Well worded and well said, Treischel, so much is wrong with our world today. I think there will be lots of question when these cowardly people TRY to enter heaven, and lets hope they are turned away. A wonderful poem! :)xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thank you Sandra. Yes, I hope so.