Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

A very interesting theme of the old building and its deterioration upon
its foundation. Great shot from your collection adds to the sad and stark
visual of the once strong and useful building. Good use of alliteration.
An enjoyable read. Robin :)

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2013

Thanks Robin.

Comment from NicciFaye

Excellent

You really good at taking a picture and describing it in a short, but well descriptive poem. I find that quite amazing that you can do that so well. You inspire me. Very nice poem.

I like how you can visualize the picture and the words that go along with it.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you Nicci, I am very flattered. Did you intend a 4 rating?

reply by NicciFaye on 19-Apr-2013

OMG...I actually hit the 5 rating..or I thought so...my apologies. Lets see if I can update that quickly my friend.

reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you, I've done that accidentally myself.

Comment from Sararb

Excellent

Very nice poem depicting crumbling foundations of an old building. As an added bonus you used one of your own photos for your poem . Very nice. Sararb :)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thanks Sara.

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

Like what you did with this 575 prose very vivid and easy to understand even in short form. You know how to weave a story my friend in short or long form thats for sure
Tk

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you Sir T.I am pleased by your comments.

Comment from trimple

Excellent

OO ekk
This sounds like me LOL
I look downward and wonder what ever happened to my once pert foundations!
Most things have a life span my friend, and this poem certainly depicts this truism.
Very thoughtful and well executed
Kind regards
Tracey :)

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you Tracy. I'm smiling, my foundations seem to be getting broader. LOL!

reply by trimple on 19-Apr-2013

LOLOL Broader but more content I trust my dear friend:)
Tracey x

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I loved all the alliteration in these two 5-7-5's. A metaphor for the present time: disaster after disaster. Very well done and I can surely relate.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you Ine. I'm glad you liked the alliteration. Wouldn't qualify as Senryu with the "ing" words, capitalization, and too much alliteration. That's why I qualified it as only 5-7-5.

reply by robina1978 on 19-Apr-2013

welcome and now I see why.

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

and isn't this one the truth Tom - very well put, I could say a monumental write perhaps. ...................well done for this clever 5-7-5 in two, Indie

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you Indie. At least architectural.

reply by Indie Skreet on 19-Apr-2013

at least :)

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes you have done very well using this very short form you bring the art work to life a very descriptive piece full of feeling well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you so much Jill I appreciate your comments.

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Whether it is a building, a project, or a relationship, you got to have a strong foundation. Building anything on a weak foundation will not last. Lovely poem.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013

Thank you CR.