Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Imagine That"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
8 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
another inspiring piece in another flawless write. it read so smoothly to presentation superb. certainly a very strong writer.
great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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another inspiring piece in another flawless write. it read so smoothly to presentation superb. certainly a very strong writer.
great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read all of these today and comment on them all, that is fantastic and something I haven't had the opportunity to do yet, Tia.
Comment from Eigle Rull
This was a cute little piece. It shared your thoughts and ideas. I found no mistakes. This piece took a subject and stayed with it. A very nice piece in my opinion.
Where in Alaska do you live? My musician/song writing brother lives in Juneau. Good job my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013
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This was a cute little piece. It shared your thoughts and ideas. I found no mistakes. This piece took a subject and stayed with it. A very nice piece in my opinion.
Where in Alaska do you live? My musician/song writing brother lives in Juneau. Good job my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013
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I live in Fairbanks. Thank you for a fine review, Eigle. :)
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Lovely, just lovely with a heart of conscience, compassion and affection. Whether there has been misunderstadning resulting in estrangement or a mere absence, this poem exprssses a reconciliation. Recalling all the pleasant moments, the benefits of the one love, or joyful moods together, this is a blessed relationship;.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013
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Lovely, just lovely with a heart of conscience, compassion and affection. Whether there has been misunderstadning resulting in estrangement or a mere absence, this poem exprssses a reconciliation. Recalling all the pleasant moments, the benefits of the one love, or joyful moods together, this is a blessed relationship;.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013
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It is my measure of true friendship. Thank you for a grand review, stumbly. :)
Comment from lorijean
I like this poem of friends and being able to forgive, in times of falling out, only true friends will turn the other cheek... a great read
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like this poem of friends and being able to forgive, in times of falling out, only true friends will turn the other cheek... a great read
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a very kind review, lorijean.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
A glowing and lovely tribute to this very special love, whether true or fictitious, Kim.
Some top lines and a particularly excellent summing up in the last verse (the best metered too).
Excellent!
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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A glowing and lovely tribute to this very special love, whether true or fictitious, Kim.
Some top lines and a particularly excellent summing up in the last verse (the best metered too).
Excellent!
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I went with an 8-6-8-6 as it just seemed right for this piece, Ray. I'm happy you noticed the change up. I usually go for uniformity (like 8-8-8-8) but I liked this flow. It is a truth I wanted to put into words, to embody my concept of friendship and for one or two in particular. Loved the glowing review, thanks!
*hugs*
Kim
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I think 8686 often works just as well as 8888, Kim, but of course meter is about syllable EMPHASIS in regular patterns, as well as syllables per line, and your last verse in particular flows perfectly because of this. Ray xx
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lol You know I am "emphasis challenged" Ray. I think I'll have to liken it to something like being tone deaf ;) Thank you for imparting your wisdom, as always! :)
Kim
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The only 'wisdom' I ever had were my 'wisdom teeth', Kim. :-) xx
Comment from adewpearl
good use of alternate-line rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
nice imagery of the guiding star in your thoughtful closing
a strong tribute and words of appreciation for a good friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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good use of alternate-line rhyming
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your poem
nice imagery of the guiding star in your thoughtful closing
a strong tribute and words of appreciation for a good friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a wonderful review, Brooke. :)
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Glorious artwork and a beautiful poem about friendship, a special friend that you can unburden to and have fun with. Great rhyme and rhythm, this flows along beautifully.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Glorious artwork and a beautiful poem about friendship, a special friend that you can unburden to and have fun with. Great rhyme and rhythm, this flows along beautifully.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely review, Pearl. :)
Comment from philby
A heartfelt poem written in a classic rhythmic structure. I find the fact that you are able to express such personal and deeply felt thoughts within such a demanding structural regime impressive. And the structure is well-established and maintained without detracting markedly from the content as might sometimes be the case.
Never-the-less there were moments when the 'sing-song' quality was at risk of doing precisely that. I had to read the poem several times and make a conscious effort to underplay the underlying rhythm in order to make more sense of the content. But perhaps that's both the joy and the challenge of reading poetry. And it was an enjoyable and satisfying experience.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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A heartfelt poem written in a classic rhythmic structure. I find the fact that you are able to express such personal and deeply felt thoughts within such a demanding structural regime impressive. And the structure is well-established and maintained without detracting markedly from the content as might sometimes be the case.
Never-the-less there were moments when the 'sing-song' quality was at risk of doing precisely that. I had to read the poem several times and make a conscious effort to underplay the underlying rhythm in order to make more sense of the content. But perhaps that's both the joy and the challenge of reading poetry. And it was an enjoyable and satisfying experience.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the candid review, philby. Would you have downplayed the rhyme? I am happy you found the reading experience enjoyable.
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Hi Dovey. I'm not sure about that, It's horses for courses I guess, and something so personal might be better in free verse. But that's a personal opinion and, as I said, I think you did handled the two challenges really well. I love poetry that follows those traditional structures so keep at it. It scans very well and that's what many people find difficult to accomplish. Cheers Philby
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Thank you for the second reply, Philby. I appreciated your detailed answers. :)
