Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "senryu (Poet's lament)"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
9 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Poet's lament
Gift of a shiny new pen
Was out of ink
lol that's how i feel right now. great job
perfect 5'7'5 structured poem.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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Poet's lament
Gift of a shiny new pen
Was out of ink
lol that's how i feel right now. great job
perfect 5'7'5 structured poem.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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I thought this would at least get some votes in the senryu contest lol live and learn. Although, I still don't see what could be more ironic in a writer's life than a gift of a pen without ink.
Comment from AnonymousWisdom
Fit contest syllable count.
Clever topic.
I enjoyed reading.
Good job and good luck in the contest!
...Pray for Boston... :(
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013
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Fit contest syllable count.
Clever topic.
I enjoyed reading.
Good job and good luck in the contest!
...Pray for Boston... :(
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the nice review. :)
Comment from warbler
A pen but no ink! How tragic!. I enjoyed reading your poem and the subject is unique. It meets all of the contest rules. Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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A pen but no ink! How tragic!. I enjoyed reading your poem and the subject is unique. It meets all of the contest rules. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a great review, warbler. :)
Comment from country ranch writer
Thant would be just my luck, grabbing my journal and coffee and going to settle in to write and wham! discover no ink in my brand new pen.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Thant would be just my luck, grabbing my journal and coffee and going to settle in to write and wham! discover no ink in my brand new pen.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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yep, me too! thanks for a great review.
Comment from 9999pool
What is the use of a new pen without ink. How can we write when the writing muse choose to hide int he dark. We are ready and all set to go on a writing spree and then nothing came out. Better luck next time.
Oh yes, next time don't forget to use good ink or the nip gets blocked like our muse. Feed the mind with positive and happy inputs and it will ignite our muse.
Good write from an empty ink pen, smiles!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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What is the use of a new pen without ink. How can we write when the writing muse choose to hide int he dark. We are ready and all set to go on a writing spree and then nothing came out. Better luck next time.
Oh yes, next time don't forget to use good ink or the nip gets blocked like our muse. Feed the mind with positive and happy inputs and it will ignite our muse.
Good write from an empty ink pen, smiles!
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thanks for a great review, Ritchie. Since irony is the cornerstone of Senryu, I could think of nothing more ironic than receiving a new pen that had no ink. Great to hear from you.
Kim
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I wonder if gift of pens should come with ink or maybe an ink bottle, :)))). Good senryu and thanks for sharing. Good luck to the contest.
Ritchie :-)
Comment from angelface2
Oh bummer. Not good for a pen to be out of ink. LOL but I do understand the feeling. The picture is perfect. Nicely done. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Oh bummer. Not good for a pen to be out of ink. LOL but I do understand the feeling. The picture is perfect. Nicely done. Miss Sally
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a great review, Miss Sally.
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Thank you for a great review, Miss Sally.
Comment from Melissa Renae
Very clever...I loved the photo it made me laugh! But...you can say a lot with 17 syllables, is that really what you want to talk about. In my humblest opinion I think you can say a lot more. However, it was still pretty good.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Very clever...I loved the photo it made me laugh! But...you can say a lot with 17 syllables, is that really what you want to talk about. In my humblest opinion I think you can say a lot more. However, it was still pretty good.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Really? If you read the prompt, it was to be less than 17 syllables, and the choice of subject matter is open to interpretation. I'm sorry I didn't choose something that met your standards. Thanks anyways. By the way, if you look at the guidelines for ratings, your rating suggests that you would be offering specifics to make improvements in the writing of this piece.
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You know, I always send a reply for reviews, but here I will choose to bite my tongue. I might suggest that you read some guidelines for reviewing, however. Thank you.
Comment from wade coaltrain
this is great. little to say but nice job. its so funny that as i was reading my son walked in and asked for a pen because the one he was using was out of ink.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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this is great. little to say but nice job. its so funny that as i was reading my son walked in and asked for a pen because the one he was using was out of ink.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Now that is funny, wade! Love it. Thanks for the smile.
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Now that is funny, wade! Love it. Thanks for the smile.
Comment from Sam Mendonca
Oh I can only wonder what it would be like not to be able to write.
Excellent work of senryu.
The photo is perfect for the poem.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Oh I can only wonder what it would be like not to be able to write.
Excellent work of senryu.
The photo is perfect for the poem.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a great review, Sam. :)
