Tales From Detective Kit
A Journal Entry Reading, Using Cliches.22 total reviews
Comment from krprice
Cute flash fiction. I think you managed to come up with most every cliché in the book. Writers should use this as an example of how not to write.
Karlene
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Cute flash fiction. I think you managed to come up with most every cliché in the book. Writers should use this as an example of how not to write.
Karlene
Comment Written 12-Nov-2016
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A great example of a story written entirely with cliches. You left out, A rolling stone gathers no moss. and A bird in the hand is worth two in the bush.
I wrote a story called Confused Cliches that use a bunch. My wife is the queen of confused cliches.
Like, Don't cry over milk under the bridge.
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A great example of a story written entirely with cliches. You left out, A rolling stone gathers no moss. and A bird in the hand is worth two in the bush.
I wrote a story called Confused Cliches that use a bunch. My wife is the queen of confused cliches.
Like, Don't cry over milk under the bridge.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
Comment from sandragee
They say a clichés lacks an original thought, but put enough of them together you get this, something that is clever and very entertaining. So I will say it straight out and not beat around the bush. I enjoyed this piece very much. Well done.
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They say a clichés lacks an original thought, but put enough of them together you get this, something that is clever and very entertaining. So I will say it straight out and not beat around the bush. I enjoyed this piece very much. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
Comment from Sasha
I enjoyed this immensely. I especially like that it goes no where...which is much like my own writing. Love the cliches and got a big laugh out of this one. Great work. Sorry I took so long to get to this, I've been feeling a bit down lately. My ribs are still bothering me.
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I enjoyed this immensely. I especially like that it goes no where...which is much like my own writing. Love the cliches and got a big laugh out of this one. Great work. Sorry I took so long to get to this, I've been feeling a bit down lately. My ribs are still bothering me.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2016
Comment from Ricky1024
I liked this and yes...
It wadms Raining cats anf dogs or men?
(Depending on your preference).
Hallahluaha?
Hoop Te Do...
Rock and Roll around the Clock!
Ricky1024.
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I liked this and yes...
It wadms Raining cats anf dogs or men?
(Depending on your preference).
Hallahluaha?
Hoop Te Do...
Rock and Roll around the Clock!
Ricky1024.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I applaud the creativity of using all these clichés but it doesn't actually go anywhere. It's just a string of sentences with no clear direction. Fun, but needs something more.
What eye opener today - I think you should insert 'an' after What.
And I wasnt born yesterday- wasn't.
finder's keeper's loser's - none of these apostrophes are necessary.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Hi there,
I applaud the creativity of using all these clichés but it doesn't actually go anywhere. It's just a string of sentences with no clear direction. Fun, but needs something more.
What eye opener today - I think you should insert 'an' after What.
And I wasnt born yesterday- wasn't.
finder's keeper's loser's - none of these apostrophes are necessary.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much, I will work on it.
Comment from robyn corum
Joann,
I get that this is stringing together a bunch of cliches, but other than that, what have you got? What would be really cool is if you spread these out a little and actually created a bit of a story between them. I would love to see a rewrite that actually had some substance to it! *smile* That would be awesome. We are writers, right??!! hahahaha!
Some things you might want to check on:
1.) What (an) eye opener today,
2.) of the bed and to (a sky) raining cats and dogs.
3.) the cat's meow, with (nine) lives and
--> always spell out numbers under one hundred, please
4.) by the rules, an eye for an eye, (a) tooth for a tooth.
5.) And I wasn(')t born yesterday.
6.) as (finders keepers losers weepers)
Good luck to you - and remember, these are merely suggestions. You are welcome to use them or toss them in the nearest trash bin! Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Joann,
I get that this is stringing together a bunch of cliches, but other than that, what have you got? What would be really cool is if you spread these out a little and actually created a bit of a story between them. I would love to see a rewrite that actually had some substance to it! *smile* That would be awesome. We are writers, right??!! hahahaha!
Some things you might want to check on:
1.) What (an) eye opener today,
2.) of the bed and to (a sky) raining cats and dogs.
3.) the cat's meow, with (nine) lives and
--> always spell out numbers under one hundred, please
4.) by the rules, an eye for an eye, (a) tooth for a tooth.
5.) And I wasn(')t born yesterday.
6.) as (finders keepers losers weepers)
Good luck to you - and remember, these are merely suggestions. You are welcome to use them or toss them in the nearest trash bin! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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I do appreciate every bit of advice. Thanks
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written journal entry building from cliches that takes form into a sensible entry that most of us can relate to as a typical start of a new day.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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A very well-written journal entry building from cliches that takes form into a sensible entry that most of us can relate to as a typical start of a new day.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Thank you
Comment from sanejane
This is the first time I've seen cliches twisted into an art form!
I love this:
But something fishy is going on here. I smell a rat, looking like something the cat dragged in. This ain't the blind leading the blind, but more like the early bird catches the worm.
If you stuck them in a room together they'd all be at each others throats.
I like a bit of satire, and this is beautifully done.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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This is the first time I've seen cliches twisted into an art form!
I love this:
But something fishy is going on here. I smell a rat, looking like something the cat dragged in. This ain't the blind leading the blind, but more like the early bird catches the worm.
If you stuck them in a room together they'd all be at each others throats.
I like a bit of satire, and this is beautifully done.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2016
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Thank you so much
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It's a pleasure.
OK, let's stop playing cat and mouse; the cat's out of the bag. You're grinning like a cheshire cat. You think you're the cat's whiskers, playing cat and mouse, looking like the cat that ate the canary. Don't rub me up the wrong way. Curiosity killed the cat. Cat got your tongue?
All the best,
Jane
Comment from Louise Michelle
LOL - this is a fun read. You did a terrific job gathering all those clichés and manipulating them into your story. Thank you for sharing. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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LOL - this is a fun read. You did a terrific job gathering all those clichés and manipulating them into your story. Thank you for sharing. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much I will post another with cliches titled Ex wifes Story.
