My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "Lost"All of my poems of release.
11 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Yes we can all feel lost but its up to us to find our new destination. No one can do it for us and I saw you pick yourself up and set off with your new assertive self and it sounds very much like you are heading in the right direction.
At least it sounds good in theory...haha
Good luck with the practical and I loved the closer. Clever rhymes and I loved the short punchy format.
Cheers P
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Yes we can all feel lost but its up to us to find our new destination. No one can do it for us and I saw you pick yourself up and set off with your new assertive self and it sounds very much like you are heading in the right direction.
At least it sounds good in theory...haha
Good luck with the practical and I loved the closer. Clever rhymes and I loved the short punchy format.
Cheers P
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I am going in the right direction now thanks Pip ;-) xxx
Comment from reconciled
Jaq?....is that you Jaq?... wow so good to see ...you....I thought I was here all alone.....-bigsmile- Wonderful poem....love you and your style Michael
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Jaq?....is that you Jaq?... wow so good to see ...you....I thought I was here all alone.....-bigsmile- Wonderful poem....love you and your style Michael
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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lmao -smiling widely- thanks once again Michael, you're a wee gem. Much love Jaq xx
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to contribute to the smooth flow of your poem
good use of rhyme
evocative expression of genuine emotion
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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excellent use of enjambment to contribute to the smooth flow of your poem
good use of rhyme
evocative expression of genuine emotion
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Cheers Brooke, as always you give a spot on review. :) Jaq xx
Comment from jppoet
BRAVO, ANOTHER POETICAL TRIUMPH, STRAIGHT FROM THE HEART
AS WAS THE OTHER ONE I JUST REVIEWED. CONGRATS ALSO ON YOUR HIGH #81 RANKING. BLESSINGS, JOHN
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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BRAVO, ANOTHER POETICAL TRIUMPH, STRAIGHT FROM THE HEART
AS WAS THE OTHER ONE I JUST REVIEWED. CONGRATS ALSO ON YOUR HIGH #81 RANKING. BLESSINGS, JOHN
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Once again thank you so much. I'm off to sleep now but will look in on you tomorrow xx
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi there,
I loved this little poem. It's little but filled with big thoughts. I especially enjoyed your use of big words like - inclination, destination, transition, juxtaposition, intention, intervention, inspiration, and creation. The picture helps us feel the mood.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Hi there,
I loved this little poem. It's little but filled with big thoughts. I especially enjoyed your use of big words like - inclination, destination, transition, juxtaposition, intention, intervention, inspiration, and creation. The picture helps us feel the mood.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much Joy. Sometimes you just have to write down how you feel at that exact minute. :) Jaq xxx
Comment from Galactia
lovely poem, to get on that paralleled road which leads to the right path-of fulfilling your dreams instead off the other mis-fortunate path.
great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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lovely poem, to get on that paralleled road which leads to the right path-of fulfilling your dreams instead off the other mis-fortunate path.
great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thanks again Tia I always appreciate your reviews :) Jaq xx
Comment from GracieAnn
A fast paced jaunt with excellent word choices and blends that make the read a truly unique journey. Rhyme is not forced and makes good sense.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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A fast paced jaunt with excellent word choices and blends that make the read a truly unique journey. Rhyme is not forced and makes good sense.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much GracieAnn xx
Comment from rama devi
Very expressive and well penned free verse with tight phrasing, polished style ad fine random, well-timed rhymes.
A sad state to be in, but perhaps a chrysalis state awaiting transformation...I hope so. Longing for the Divine... brings it...
Interesting closing-
need Divine
intervention
where to find
the inspiration
has to be my
own creation
As the divine lives within, it can be both divine intervention and your won creation, methinks...
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Very expressive and well penned free verse with tight phrasing, polished style ad fine random, well-timed rhymes.
A sad state to be in, but perhaps a chrysalis state awaiting transformation...I hope so. Longing for the Divine... brings it...
Interesting closing-
need Divine
intervention
where to find
the inspiration
has to be my
own creation
As the divine lives within, it can be both divine intervention and your won creation, methinks...
Love,
rd
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Awww rd thank you so very much for your wonderful review my friend. It means the world xx
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Huge hugs and healing thoughts to you,d ear Jaq. Blessings, rd
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That is so kind of you rd. You're a special person and friend xxx
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Aw, that's sweet of you to say. Big hugs and healing thoughts...rd
Comment from Indie Skreet
I must admit to hiccupping on 'juxtaposition' which is a superb word, but interrupted the flow just a little. Don't change though - it is great! best Indie xx
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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I must admit to hiccupping on 'juxtaposition' which is a superb word, but interrupted the flow just a little. Don't change though - it is great! best Indie xx
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Lol Indie, it was there for a reason so but I can see where it might be a stumbling block. :). Cheers for always being there, love n hugs, Jaq xx
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a good reason Jaq, that's why i said 'not' to change it! This one is a stunner too - you just get better :) xx
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Thanks Indie, I always appreciate your input. :) Jaq xx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend with good strong words used and rhyming throughout well done it does have the feel of a person lost and on a journey regards Jill
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend with good strong words used and rhyming throughout well done it does have the feel of a person lost and on a journey regards Jill
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Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thanks Jill, sometimes I really feel this way about my life and poetry. :) Jaq xx