Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "No Happiness To Share"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
11 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
You did a really good job with this prompt, I think you adhered to it well. Great job and wish you the best in this contest.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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You did a really good job with this prompt, I think you adhered to it well. Great job and wish you the best in this contest.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Tia.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is an emotional read, your feelings really come through in these verses. Very apt the artwork chosen the tears of your nation once again are shed.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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This is an emotional read, your feelings really come through in these verses. Very apt the artwork chosen the tears of your nation once again are shed.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a heartfelt review, Pearl. I appreciate the kind comments.
Comment from 9999pool
A good write with a message about insanity acts of terror. We will never understand. The newpapers need not make a hurrah hurray of things. Let the families heal. Give them peace. Let the people in power find the cause and the culprits . No need to sensationalize the evil doers. Their time for punishment will come soon.
Excellent write in this pantun.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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A good write with a message about insanity acts of terror. We will never understand. The newpapers need not make a hurrah hurray of things. Let the families heal. Give them peace. Let the people in power find the cause and the culprits . No need to sensationalize the evil doers. Their time for punishment will come soon.
Excellent write in this pantun.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you for another well spoken review, Ritchie. :)
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Welcome lovey dovey. :))) Ritchie.
Comment from McMurry903
This is a very powerful poem. It's hard to write about sunshine and butterflies when our hearts our broken over a senseless tragedy. I like your thoughts on the media coverage as well. This is a new form to me, I might have to try it sometime. Well done! Brian
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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This is a very powerful poem. It's hard to write about sunshine and butterflies when our hearts our broken over a senseless tragedy. I like your thoughts on the media coverage as well. This is a new form to me, I might have to try it sometime. Well done! Brian
Comment Written 17-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your kind comments and heartfelt review, Brian.
Kim
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Thank you for your kind comments and heartfelt review, Brian.
Kim
Comment from Frank Atwood
Till mankind learns this world is Hell, a place many wish not to be, then will mankind begin to think differently about it and overcome it. Till then, this world is for our soul to seek and learn a truth found in Words. Words who's meaning free ones soul, not bind it to this world we are to overcome, instead of becoming one with it. Very nice and keep writing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Till mankind learns this world is Hell, a place many wish not to be, then will mankind begin to think differently about it and overcome it. Till then, this world is for our soul to seek and learn a truth found in Words. Words who's meaning free ones soul, not bind it to this world we are to overcome, instead of becoming one with it. Very nice and keep writing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your comments and review, Frank. They are appreciated.
Comment from Laurent Andre Menot
A great poem very well written.
I had never hear about the pantum and abab rhymes.
You don't have happiness to share but you transform your feelings and thoughts in a great piece of art.
A beautiful homage to a tragedy.
Very nice artwork.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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A great poem very well written.
I had never hear about the pantum and abab rhymes.
You don't have happiness to share but you transform your feelings and thoughts in a great piece of art.
A beautiful homage to a tragedy.
Very nice artwork.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank you, Laurent, I appreciate the wonderful review.
Comment from Alexander E Poet
There juat to much hate in the world,imagery flowing verse, great description good feelings conclusion this is really expressed well, . I think that you did a wonderful job with this piece. brilliantNo typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see.Alexander Q*Q
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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There juat to much hate in the world,imagery flowing verse, great description good feelings conclusion this is really expressed well, . I think that you did a wonderful job with this piece. brilliantNo typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see.Alexander Q*Q
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank you, Alexander. I appreciate your candid review. :)
Comment from adewpearl
pantun, a new form for me
strong use of rhyme
good alliteration in bloodstained banner
and in bruised and battered
you make such a significant point - poetry can't be forced - no matter what a prompt says, if it's a tragic day and you're not feeling happy, happy is not what your heart will write
Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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pantun, a new form for me
strong use of rhyme
good alliteration in bloodstained banner
and in bruised and battered
you make such a significant point - poetry can't be forced - no matter what a prompt says, if it's a tragic day and you're not feeling happy, happy is not what your heart will write
Brooke
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank you, Brooke. I appreciate all of your well thought out reviews and kind comments.
Kim
Comment from honeytree
The art work is very interesting.
The words are very interesting.
We need to be aware of violence
The following words are very interesting.
"Shelter our children's precious eyes,
Clouds of smoke shroud their innocence.
Dust settles amidst mother's cries,
Let justice demand recompense"
Honeytree
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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The art work is very interesting.
The words are very interesting.
We need to be aware of violence
The following words are very interesting.
"Shelter our children's precious eyes,
Clouds of smoke shroud their innocence.
Dust settles amidst mother's cries,
Let justice demand recompense"
Honeytree
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Thank you for this excellent review, Honeytree. :)
Comment from lorijean
This worked out really well, and love the words, I wouldn't know where to start on something like this, and the artworks is just perfect......
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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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This worked out really well, and love the words, I wouldn't know where to start on something like this, and the artworks is just perfect......
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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I struggled with the blank page all day, lorijean. Thank you for a wonderful review.
