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Shall we

its about dancing

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Comment from GarthL
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Traditionally 5-7-5 is a three line format. I suggest you turn it into 3 lines with no punctuation. It's syllable perfect and a good little poem about that lover's question, will we dance or just sit and enjoy each other's company? Welcome to fs, you'll have a ball and learn heaps in the process. LiveLove, Garth

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    I'll try to remember that thanks bunches

reply by GarthL on 11-Apr-2013
    Cheers!!!
Comment from Sam Mendonca
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Very well done 5-7-5 poem

The only suggestion, maybe a photo to go along with the poem to get the reader's interest in the poem. :)

Nice work. :)

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    THANK YOU SO MUCH...IM HAVING AN ISSUE WITH UPLOADING PHOTOS FROM MY PHONE
Comment from angelmagnet
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I had to look twice at this. There something about the three line format that implies poem. I keep wanting to say that this is just a line of prose. I force myself to break it down and make it look the way I want to. Now it's great poem.

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    Thank you
Comment from muezza56
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i really enjoyed reading this really well written 5-7-5 poem. as the writer contemplates whether to dance or not to dance, as the reader can feel the hesitation

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2013

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2013
    Thank you. So much