Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Awoke 2
As alarm shrieked, 4
Temptation wins the weak. 6
Sleepyhead, snuggles back in bed, 8
Defeat? 2

LOL I feel like that now, nor sure if Ir's the weather, just feel so tired and shouldn't be.

Great job

regards
Tia

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013

lol thanks, Tia. :)

reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013

lol thanks, Tia. :)

Comment from 4hisglory

Excellent

Very good. So many are tempted to go back to bed or just stay there. That doesn't happen to me too often. I rise early even on my days off. But I do feel for those who struggle with it.

Nice Cinquain poem with the right syllable count. Blessings in the contest. LaVonne

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

Thanks for a great review, LaVonne.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

That kind of sounds like me. I don't know how many times I've hit the snooze control when the alarm clock rings. Do I show that clock who's boss or is it the other way around?

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

Thanks for a great review, Cindy.

Comment from Supe

Excellent

This is a cute little wake up call. Nicely done. The count is perfect. I like the whimsical picture you chose to complement your words. Alarmed is a fantastic title. Temptation....yes! Stay in bed. lol

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

I wish I could have stayed in bed lol Thanks for a great review. :)

Comment from jandeck

Excellent

Very clever chinquapin about the stresses of the morning which, of course starts with the alarm clock. Something we can all relate to! I like the cliff-hanger last word.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

I appreciate the great review, jandeck. :)

Comment from PhilThePoet

Excellent

Brilliant! I did this, this morning! Something most people can relate to, described in a fun and entertaining manner. The picture accompanying this piece is very appropriate, too.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

Thanks, Phil. :)

Comment from Frank Atwood

Excellent

When one is young and must work, using an alarm to wake and sleep is a weakness, but when one gets old and retired and don't need to work, an alarm is not needed for sleeping is a comfort earned over a lifetime of working. Like this and thought it quite different. God bless and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

Thank you very much, Frank.

Comment from GeraldS

Excellent

I suspect that a lot of people can identify with turning off the alarm and sleeping in. This is a temptation many face almost daily, particularly if they were late to bed. This piece is short and concise, and its message is clear. This should be a strong entry. Good luck!

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

Thanks, Gerald. :)

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hello. I enjoyed your poem. I can definitely identify with it. So much for pressing the snooze button again. Good luck in the contest. Cheers.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013

Thanks, Benjamin. :)