Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Alarmed"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
9 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Awoke 2
As alarm shrieked, 4
Temptation wins the weak. 6
Sleepyhead, snuggles back in bed, 8
Defeat? 2
LOL I feel like that now, nor sure if Ir's the weather, just feel so tired and shouldn't be.
Great job
regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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Awoke 2
As alarm shrieked, 4
Temptation wins the weak. 6
Sleepyhead, snuggles back in bed, 8
Defeat? 2
LOL I feel like that now, nor sure if Ir's the weather, just feel so tired and shouldn't be.
Great job
regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2013
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lol thanks, Tia. :)
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lol thanks, Tia. :)
Comment from 4hisglory
Very good. So many are tempted to go back to bed or just stay there. That doesn't happen to me too often. I rise early even on my days off. But I do feel for those who struggle with it.
Nice Cinquain poem with the right syllable count. Blessings in the contest. LaVonne
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Very good. So many are tempted to go back to bed or just stay there. That doesn't happen to me too often. I rise early even on my days off. But I do feel for those who struggle with it.
Nice Cinquain poem with the right syllable count. Blessings in the contest. LaVonne
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thanks for a great review, LaVonne.
Comment from Cindy Warren
That kind of sounds like me. I don't know how many times I've hit the snooze control when the alarm clock rings. Do I show that clock who's boss or is it the other way around?
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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That kind of sounds like me. I don't know how many times I've hit the snooze control when the alarm clock rings. Do I show that clock who's boss or is it the other way around?
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thanks for a great review, Cindy.
Comment from Supe
This is a cute little wake up call. Nicely done. The count is perfect. I like the whimsical picture you chose to complement your words. Alarmed is a fantastic title. Temptation....yes! Stay in bed. lol
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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This is a cute little wake up call. Nicely done. The count is perfect. I like the whimsical picture you chose to complement your words. Alarmed is a fantastic title. Temptation....yes! Stay in bed. lol
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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I wish I could have stayed in bed lol Thanks for a great review. :)
Comment from jandeck
Very clever chinquapin about the stresses of the morning which, of course starts with the alarm clock. Something we can all relate to! I like the cliff-hanger last word.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Very clever chinquapin about the stresses of the morning which, of course starts with the alarm clock. Something we can all relate to! I like the cliff-hanger last word.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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I appreciate the great review, jandeck. :)
Comment from PhilThePoet
Brilliant! I did this, this morning! Something most people can relate to, described in a fun and entertaining manner. The picture accompanying this piece is very appropriate, too.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Brilliant! I did this, this morning! Something most people can relate to, described in a fun and entertaining manner. The picture accompanying this piece is very appropriate, too.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Phil. :)
Comment from Frank Atwood
When one is young and must work, using an alarm to wake and sleep is a weakness, but when one gets old and retired and don't need to work, an alarm is not needed for sleeping is a comfort earned over a lifetime of working. Like this and thought it quite different. God bless and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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When one is young and must work, using an alarm to wake and sleep is a weakness, but when one gets old and retired and don't need to work, an alarm is not needed for sleeping is a comfort earned over a lifetime of working. Like this and thought it quite different. God bless and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thank you very much, Frank.
Comment from GeraldS
I suspect that a lot of people can identify with turning off the alarm and sleeping in. This is a temptation many face almost daily, particularly if they were late to bed. This piece is short and concise, and its message is clear. This should be a strong entry. Good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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I suspect that a lot of people can identify with turning off the alarm and sleeping in. This is a temptation many face almost daily, particularly if they were late to bed. This piece is short and concise, and its message is clear. This should be a strong entry. Good luck!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Gerald. :)
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. I enjoyed your poem. I can definitely identify with it. So much for pressing the snooze button again. Good luck in the contest. Cheers.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Hello. I enjoyed your poem. I can definitely identify with it. So much for pressing the snooze button again. Good luck in the contest. Cheers.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Benjamin. :)
