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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You are good at these sad ones, Bill. I suspect this poor man is so filled with pain, he's taken his gun with his into the mist. Skipper will stay with Mama. So sad. I think as I age I'm understanding things like this more. I will not be a burden on anyone. I don't have a gun, but I do have a good supply of pills. No, not yet. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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You are good at these sad ones, Bill. I suspect this poor man is so filled with pain, he's taken his gun with his into the mist. Skipper will stay with Mama. So sad. I think as I age I'm understanding things like this more. I will not be a burden on anyone. I don't have a gun, but I do have a good supply of pills. No, not yet. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
I wife probably has pills saved up for me. We have a running gag where someone, sometimes my children, throws a laundry basket down the steps to the basement and yells, "Oops! Dad fell down the steps!"
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Your children obviously take after you, Bill! LOL!! You'd best not fall down the stairs now, they will think it's the joke being played and leave you down there!!!
Comment from beccabootie123
beautifully cute write and enjoyed all the elements, surprise love and laughter. the picture is wonderful and plays well to the theme. good luck
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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beautifully cute write and enjoyed all the elements, surprise love and laughter. the picture is wonderful and plays well to the theme. good luck
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Laughter? Ok, thanks for reviewing.
Comment from lorijean
Hits the heart immediately with such a sad picture, I wanted to come too but don't worry I will wait for you, a man with problems on his mind.....
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Hits the heart immediately with such a sad picture, I wanted to come too but don't worry I will wait for you, a man with problems on his mind.....
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for reviewing this and commenting.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad story the pain got too much so I take it he was going to end it all that is sad I hope you do well in the contest and thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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This is a sad story the pain got too much so I take it he was going to end it all that is sad I hope you do well in the contest and thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I enjoyed your short piece because of the subtle message. And everyone will say he died doing what he loved - and be comforted. I love the scene you set up and I thought the ending was grand. Good luck with your entry. Giddy
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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I enjoyed your short piece because of the subtle message. And everyone will say he died doing what he loved - and be comforted. I love the scene you set up and I thought the ending was grand. Good luck with your entry. Giddy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thank you for you kind, perceptive, and encouraging review.
Comment from janalma
What a sad one. Your story is complete--giving the reader enough in few words to surmise the outcome. Poignant. And, as always, with suicide, one wonders what they are doing emotionally to the ones they love. Good work.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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What a sad one. Your story is complete--giving the reader enough in few words to surmise the outcome. Poignant. And, as always, with suicide, one wonders what they are doing emotionally to the ones they love. Good work.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from steevie
This is a moving, compassionate piece about a dog and his master. It took me three goes at the first bit of dialogue, but then I got what was being said. I'll have to brush up on my Scottish accent a wee bit, lass.
well done
smiles
steve
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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This is a moving, compassionate piece about a dog and his master. It took me three goes at the first bit of dialogue, but then I got what was being said. I'll have to brush up on my Scottish accent a wee bit, lass.
well done
smiles
steve
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I included a translation in the notes. Happy days.
Comment from Craigitar
This is very good--well written. I had to read through it a couple times to be sure it said what I thought it did. Very poignant and touching. Good job and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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This is very good--well written. I had to read through it a couple times to be sure it said what I thought it did. Very poignant and touching. Good job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Thank you for taking the time to read through this a couple times.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
i'm not a poet so sometimes i miss the meaning of a poem...does this mean the old man is going off to kill himself,,,or he's leaving the animal because he's getting into things he shouldn't. I'll learn given enough time, God loves you and so do i.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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i'm not a poet so sometimes i miss the meaning of a poem...does this mean the old man is going off to kill himself,,,or he's leaving the animal because he's getting into things he shouldn't. I'll learn given enough time, God loves you and so do i.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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This is actually a short short story. It's known as flash fiction. This one can only have one hundred words in it, so I had to include a lot of story by way of hints to the untold part. The plot is basically a older man with a terminal, painful illness who decides to take the boat out with his shotgun and end it all. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from adewpearl
What a sad sad scene as this man in pain prepares to sail off to kill himself. How poignant that he makes the dog stay on the dock as he knows his soon-to-be-widow will be needing the dog after she learns of his death. A most compelling story in only 100 words Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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What a sad sad scene as this man in pain prepares to sail off to kill himself. How poignant that he makes the dog stay on the dock as he knows his soon-to-be-widow will be needing the dog after she learns of his death. A most compelling story in only 100 words Brooke
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
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Thank you Brooke for reading this and for your perceptive review of the story line.