Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "As Aurora Danced On High"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
9 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
'Neath the midnight sky
As Aurora danced on high
Hands clasped, whispered, "I love you."
ooohhh! sweet romance. lovely beneath the midnight sky. another well written poem.
Great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
'Neath the midnight sky
As Aurora danced on high
Hands clasped, whispered, "I love you."
ooohhh! sweet romance. lovely beneath the midnight sky. another well written poem.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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You were on a roll tonight, Tia. I sure appreciate you reading and reviewing all of my poems for the April challenge thus far. I need to catch up on my reading and reviewing, too. Hopefully I will get a break in my week to do so. I'm replying to all at once. Thank you for the wonderful reviews. :)
Comment from BeasPeas
Danced on high, high on love. Short poem brings with it the energy of the dance and elation combined with the subtleness of the whispered words, "I love you." A nice contrast.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
Danced on high, high on love. Short poem brings with it the energy of the dance and elation combined with the subtleness of the whispered words, "I love you." A nice contrast.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a fun review, BeasPeas. :)
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the aurora lights. They are perfect for declaring your love. The love seems like a miracle just like the beauty of the light. Great work.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
I love the picture. I love the aurora lights. They are perfect for declaring your love. The love seems like a miracle just like the beauty of the light. Great work.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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I appreciate the kind comments and review, elliejean. :)
Comment from Bayberry
What a romantic setting for a declaration of love. I've seen film clips of the Northern Lights and they're so beautiful...just like acknowledged love. Best wishes, Josie
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
What a romantic setting for a declaration of love. I've seen film clips of the Northern Lights and they're so beautiful...just like acknowledged love. Best wishes, Josie
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you, Josie. Not much rivals the Northern Lights when it comes to beautiful scenery. :)
Comment from adewpearl
Your 15 line poem
employs rhyme effectively.
good consonance of N sounds in neath/midnight/danced/hands
you create a vivid scene which in turn creates mood well
Brooke
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
Your 15 line poem
employs rhyme effectively.
good consonance of N sounds in neath/midnight/danced/hands
you create a vivid scene which in turn creates mood well
Brooke
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely and detailed review, Brooke. :)
Comment from Chittz
A wonder in just fifteen words. The word neath is suitable for the line instead of underneath. The artwork looks splendid. The first two are rhyming too.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
A wonder in just fifteen words. The word neath is suitable for the line instead of underneath. The artwork looks splendid. The first two are rhyming too.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a grand review, Chittz. :)
Comment from Michael Wayne
I think it was a you made two very good decisions here. First, the abbreviation of 'beneath', and second, the use of a vibrant proper noun in 'Aurora'. Both choices added wonderful texture to this short form. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
I think it was a you made two very good decisions here. First, the abbreviation of 'beneath', and second, the use of a vibrant proper noun in 'Aurora'. Both choices added wonderful texture to this short form. Nicely done.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your detailed and encouraging review, Michael. :)
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I just glanced at what I wrote in that review and I am appalled at that first sentence.
"I think it was a you made..."?!?!?
I think it was a I may have had a stroke while writing that. Thank you for not laughing in my face. :)
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no worries, I appreciate the nice review :)
Comment from shaakiraj
There is nothing not to love about short poetry. I just love the read about love in a era of such hate. This poem made me feel like I was in the 1800s and love was the way of the day. You should have this painted and hung somewhere. Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
There is nothing not to love about short poetry. I just love the read about love in a era of such hate. This poem made me feel like I was in the 1800s and love was the way of the day. You should have this painted and hung somewhere. Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from PhilThePoet
A lot of imagery in just three lines. Wonderful little poem with a great sense of romance. I like how the beauty of the aurora corresponds with the beauty of love.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
A lot of imagery in just three lines. Wonderful little poem with a great sense of romance. I like how the beauty of the aurora corresponds with the beauty of love.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely review.