Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "I Wonder..."NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
9 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
"There is another sky"
Governs both hemispheres
I wonder, perchance,
If we wish upon the same star?
This is a wonderful short piece. I like this, when i first read it, i pictured our sky and space itself as a sky, but i know you were referencing other planets in the universe sky.
great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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"There is another sky"
Governs both hemispheres
I wonder, perchance,
If we wish upon the same star?
This is a wonderful short piece. I like this, when i first read it, i pictured our sky and space itself as a sky, but i know you were referencing other planets in the universe sky.
great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 06-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2013
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Thanks, Tia. :)
Comment from donkeyoatey
What a nice tribute to Ms. Dickenson! I often wonder about WHO is looking at the moon at the same time as me..and I often dream of those who have looked upon the moon and stars down through the ages too! I think your poem is perfect to speak aloud while looking at the glory of our heavens. Donkeyoatey
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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What a nice tribute to Ms. Dickenson! I often wonder about WHO is looking at the moon at the same time as me..and I often dream of those who have looked upon the moon and stars down through the ages too! I think your poem is perfect to speak aloud while looking at the glory of our heavens. Donkeyoatey
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a wonderful review, donkeyoatey. I love your artwork, as you know. :) It was the perfect illustration.
Comment from Kiki12
I think you have done Emily (my favorite as well) justice with your extended conversation. It is a universal sentiment to wonder about the world beyond where we are in our little corners, and you bring together not only distant locations, but distant ideas, perhaps as well, by choosing the naani format. Very nicely done, and great alliteration, as well-
wonder/we/wish...same star
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Kiki
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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I think you have done Emily (my favorite as well) justice with your extended conversation. It is a universal sentiment to wonder about the world beyond where we are in our little corners, and you bring together not only distant locations, but distant ideas, perhaps as well, by choosing the naani format. Very nicely done, and great alliteration, as well-
wonder/we/wish...same star
:0)
Kiki
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely review, Kiki. :)
Comment from Indie Skreet
a clever little write here which no doubt will do well. best of luck in this competition ......... i am assuming you are no foe as I'm not blocked lol. best Indie
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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a clever little write here which no doubt will do well. best of luck in this competition ......... i am assuming you are no foe as I'm not blocked lol. best Indie
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Blocked? lol Always a pleasure to hear from you, Indie. :) Thanks for the lovely review.
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lol - I cannot think why anyone would either - er, might have something to do with my subject matter though lol xx
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem of 25 syllables in 4 lines is in good naani form
You do a lovely job of incorporating Dickinson's line into your own poem
I like how you close with a question to engage the reader and to intensify the speaker's emotion, and I like the thought-provoking nature of the question
nice use of alliteration, too :-)
Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Your poem of 25 syllables in 4 lines is in good naani form
You do a lovely job of incorporating Dickinson's line into your own poem
I like how you close with a question to engage the reader and to intensify the speaker's emotion, and I like the thought-provoking nature of the question
nice use of alliteration, too :-)
Brooke
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a stellar review, Brooke. :) Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Excellent naani, Kim.
Very thought-provoking to 'wonder' as you say. It's sweet and strange to think maybe thousands, if not millions of us wish upon the same star at the same time, without realising we're sharing the same vision and feelings.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Excellent naani, Kim.
Very thought-provoking to 'wonder' as you say. It's sweet and strange to think maybe thousands, if not millions of us wish upon the same star at the same time, without realising we're sharing the same vision and feelings.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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I thought that was a profound thought, Ray. :) Keep wishing and gazing at the stars. *hugs* Kim
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Just my luck, Kim. I just looked up at the stars, and a pigeon with diahrea (?spell) flew overhead. Splat! Yuck. :-) xx
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lol I know those days!
Comment from CR Delport
I think your poem will do Emily proud. It is well written. It is amazing how stars in the northern and southern hemispheres differ. There is some stars we see in the south that they will never see in the north and vice versa. What exquisite art work!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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I think your poem will do Emily proud. It is well written. It is amazing how stars in the northern and southern hemispheres differ. There is some stars we see in the south that they will never see in the north and vice versa. What exquisite art work!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Donkeyoatey is one of my personal favorites on FanArtReview. Thank you for a beautiful review, CR.
Comment from Jacq77
In answer to your question - I am sure we do! Although mine will not be the North Star and your's will not be the Crux - Southern Cross. :-) Maybe Orion??? An excellent poem which got me thinking. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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In answer to your question - I am sure we do! Although mine will not be the North Star and your's will not be the Crux - Southern Cross. :-) Maybe Orion??? An excellent poem which got me thinking. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Yes, Orion is a beautiful constellation. Our favored constellation here in Alaska is The Big Dipper, it is featured on the Alaska State Flag. Are you in Australia, Jacq? Methinks, from the reference to the Southern Cross. Thanks for the wonderful review.
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You are welcome. Yep...I live in the land Downunder. :-)
Comment from honeytree
Very clever art work and words.
I wonder if their is life on other planets.
I loved the creative words written here.
I wonder if all humans can hold someone to love
The love and peace will reign over us all.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Very clever art work and words.
I wonder if their is life on other planets.
I loved the creative words written here.
I wonder if all humans can hold someone to love
The love and peace will reign over us all.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely review, honeytree. I have a very good friend who I converse with online almost daily that lives in Australia, which of course, couldn't possibly be further away from me, here in Alaska. I thought it was a fun idea thinking about all of mankind living under the same stars as our planet shoots through the universe. I appreciate your kind comments and review.
