Conversations in Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Fire & Rain"NaPoWriMo 2013 - 30 poems in 30 days
11 total reviews
Comment from philogy
You have set up this poem very well. The relationship of fire and rain to each other contrasting the same relationship of love and loss. I think a Nonet was a perfect way to portray this particular poem. Good use of rhyme and alliteration also.
Best wishes, phill
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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You have set up this poem very well. The relationship of fire and rain to each other contrasting the same relationship of love and loss. I think a Nonet was a perfect way to portray this particular poem. Good use of rhyme and alliteration also.
Best wishes, phill
Comment Written 09-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a fantastic review, Phill.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very nicely done, beautiful visually and expressed well. The double nonet has a charm of its own. I like how you contrasted "fire" with "rain."
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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This is very nicely done, beautiful visually and expressed well. The double nonet has a charm of its own. I like how you contrasted "fire" with "rain."
Comment Written 05-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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I'm happy you are enjoying my poetry tonight. :) Thank you for the lovely reviews.
Comment from words
I like your double nonet.
You show the flow of a love relationship from beginning to sad end.
I especially like your ending:
Cherished once, yet bittersweet.
Window shut tight and locked away,
Savored secrets safe where they must stay.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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I like your double nonet.
You show the flow of a love relationship from beginning to sad end.
I especially like your ending:
Cherished once, yet bittersweet.
Window shut tight and locked away,
Savored secrets safe where they must stay.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Thank you for your comments and review, words.
Comment from adewpearl
Your stanzas are in good syllable count and structure for the double nonet
excellent use of personification
good use of optional rhyme
good assonance of long A sounds in hazy brain
good alliteration in savored secrets safe
soulful expression of emotion in good nonet form :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Your stanzas are in good syllable count and structure for the double nonet
excellent use of personification
good use of optional rhyme
good assonance of long A sounds in hazy brain
good alliteration in savored secrets safe
soulful expression of emotion in good nonet form :-) Brooke
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thank you for this very detailed review, Brooke. Always nice to hear from you. :)
Kim
Comment from rogerpolly
Beautifully written. The transition from fire to rain is subtle. One can feel the melancholy building until the end. The illustration you chose adds another dimension.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Beautifully written. The transition from fire to rain is subtle. One can feel the melancholy building until the end. The illustration you chose adds another dimension.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely review, rogerpolly. :)
Comment from Kiki12
This is very nicely done. The first nonet evokes the emotion of the memory itself - a declaration of love celebrated with passion. Nice alliteration/consonance-
ebb and elation
succumbed to passion's fire
The second nonet describes the emotion of having to remember that special night from afar. Window shut tight and locked away- really expresses that there is no going back, only bittersweet memories that stay safely locked away.
savored secrets safe stay-great alliteration here, as well.
Kiki
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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This is very nicely done. The first nonet evokes the emotion of the memory itself - a declaration of love celebrated with passion. Nice alliteration/consonance-
ebb and elation
succumbed to passion's fire
The second nonet describes the emotion of having to remember that special night from afar. Window shut tight and locked away- really expresses that there is no going back, only bittersweet memories that stay safely locked away.
savored secrets safe stay-great alliteration here, as well.
Kiki
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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I appreciate your kind comments and in depth review, Kiki.
Comment from SFattempt
This is truly a great poem, its deep, meaningful and i'm sure I won't be the only one that can relate to it. The part i love the most would be ' windows shut tight and locked away, Savored secrets safe where they must stay'.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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This is truly a great poem, its deep, meaningful and i'm sure I won't be the only one that can relate to it. The part i love the most would be ' windows shut tight and locked away, Savored secrets safe where they must stay'.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thank you for noting your favorite lines and expressing a candid review. I appreciate your kind compliments.
Comment from Indie Skreet
a beautifully written Nonet about forbidden love I think and the regret of having it no more. this is a very accomplished write and I wish whoever wrote it the very best of luck in competition, Indie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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a beautifully written Nonet about forbidden love I think and the regret of having it no more. this is a very accomplished write and I wish whoever wrote it the very best of luck in competition, Indie
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a lovely review, Indie.
Comment from Tina McKala
this was truly an excellent poem! If only all of them were like this, it would be a bigger pleasure to do the reviews!
Really great job, I loved the connection, contradiction between the nonets.
btw. the very first line - that was BEAUTIFUL!
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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this was truly an excellent poem! If only all of them were like this, it would be a bigger pleasure to do the reviews!
Really great job, I loved the connection, contradiction between the nonets.
btw. the very first line - that was BEAUTIFUL!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thank you for a wonderful review, Tina.
Comment from Galactia
What an awesome double nonnet poem, very elegantly written. Perfect syllables acros all lines, your poetic word of art is phenominal especially for a nonet.
great job
GL
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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What an awesome double nonnet poem, very elegantly written. Perfect syllables acros all lines, your poetic word of art is phenominal especially for a nonet.
great job
GL
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2013
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Thank you for this glowing, exceptional review, Tia.
