Rabbit
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Ch. 10, Part 2. Fishing"A Boy's Story of the rural South
31 total reviews
Comment from Shirley B
Oh Bill you have written another great chapter. I had to laugh out loud when you were describing seeing Erin naked. :) I love reading your book. Many is the time I have gone fishing with my mom and dad. Thanks for the memories, Shirley
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Oh Bill you have written another great chapter. I had to laugh out loud when you were describing seeing Erin naked. :) I love reading your book. Many is the time I have gone fishing with my mom and dad. Thanks for the memories, Shirley
Comment Written 02-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Thank you Shirley for your support of this book! It's coming to and end three more chapters. Always warm regards, Bill
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Thank you Shirley for your support of this book! It's coming to and end three more chapters. Always warm regards, Bill
Comment from bookishfabler
This is very cute.
My grandparents' lake was beautiful. It was on the small side by design. When it was built twenty years ago, the lake guy said there was no limit on size. It was located at the bottom of a natural basin and was spring fed. Lake guy said, "We can make it as big as you want. It's a natural site." They had it made five acres. It was perfect.
(seven 'was, and one 'had'. I am finding this a very passive. It coniues, but I'm not going to point it out throughout.
except here you don't need it. Our fishing trip (-was) ended when he told
once you get out of the monaloge and the characters take shape the story is very interesting and intriguing.
Hope you have a lovely weekend, and a Happy easter
hugs
Heidi
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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This is very cute.
My grandparents' lake was beautiful. It was on the small side by design. When it was built twenty years ago, the lake guy said there was no limit on size. It was located at the bottom of a natural basin and was spring fed. Lake guy said, "We can make it as big as you want. It's a natural site." They had it made five acres. It was perfect.
(seven 'was, and one 'had'. I am finding this a very passive. It coniues, but I'm not going to point it out throughout.
except here you don't need it. Our fishing trip (-was) ended when he told
once you get out of the monaloge and the characters take shape the story is very interesting and intriguing.
Hope you have a lovely weekend, and a Happy easter
hugs
Heidi
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Thanks Heidi - I'm actually sensitive to just what you point out, so will definitely circle back and take a look. Regards, Bill
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, Bill, as usual, you packed a lot of homespun
country wisdom into this chapter. Virge has a lot of
Uncle Remus in him. And every boy has to see his first naked girl some time. What a thrill.
Good stuff, Bill.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Well, Bill, as usual, you packed a lot of homespun
country wisdom into this chapter. Virge has a lot of
Uncle Remus in him. And every boy has to see his first naked girl some time. What a thrill.
Good stuff, Bill.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thanks Lee - I appreciate your support. Bill
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This is almost a love story, Bill. Or maybe a fish story. Or a fishy love story? In any case, it's sweet and made me smile. Very well done. :) nancy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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This is almost a love story, Bill. Or maybe a fish story. Or a fishy love story? In any case, it's sweet and made me smile. Very well done. :) nancy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thanks Nancy - heading down the home stretch on this one. Maybe four more chapters. Bill
Comment from emjaihammond
I am caught up in your story. It's very well done and it held my interest from beginning to the end. It has a nice flow to it and it makes me want to read some more. Good job.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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I am caught up in your story. It's very well done and it held my interest from beginning to the end. It has a nice flow to it and it makes me want to read some more. Good job.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading and your kind feedback. Bill
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Thanks for reading and your kind feedback. Bill
Comment from Dawn Munro
First the edit: "We all went over (and) took off our shoes."
This sentence is missing a word (that's all).
What a lovely, touching chapter - so sweet. Very nicely done. I enjoyed it tremendously.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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First the edit: "We all went over (and) took off our shoes."
This sentence is missing a word (that's all).
What a lovely, touching chapter - so sweet. Very nicely done. I enjoyed it tremendously.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading and your very kind feedback. Bill
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Thanks for reading and your very kind feedback. Bill
Comment from barkingdog
Rabbit learned a lot this summer. I love the innocent lines with a touch of humor about him seeing Erin naked.
The door just sprung open(sure it did), he knows she's a real red head, she could never be his teacher and the ending when she wished he was fifteen years older.
I like the first part about using just what you need and no more. And the tomato being the product of horse poop was priceless.
Lots of gems in this one, Bill.
A few compound sentences need commas but I didn't want to stop reading to note them. LOL
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Rabbit learned a lot this summer. I love the innocent lines with a touch of humor about him seeing Erin naked.
The door just sprung open(sure it did), he knows she's a real red head, she could never be his teacher and the ending when she wished he was fifteen years older.
I like the first part about using just what you need and no more. And the tomato being the product of horse poop was priceless.
Lots of gems in this one, Bill.
A few compound sentences need commas but I didn't want to stop reading to note them. LOL
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading and your generous review! Regards. Bill
Comment from GWHARGIS
Loved Rabbit's cheeky answer to Erin. The whole way he looks at life is refreshing and I hate to see this story end. I am enjoying this more and more. Great job.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Loved Rabbit's cheeky answer to Erin. The whole way he looks at life is refreshing and I hate to see this story end. I am enjoying this more and more. Great job.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you for reading and the compliment of the six. I appreciate both! Bill
Comment from Sasha
This is another precious and fun story about dear Rabbit. I just love this book and find every chapter full of charm and delight. I anxiously look forward to reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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This is another precious and fun story about dear Rabbit. I just love this book and find every chapter full of charm and delight. I anxiously look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you very much for reading and for following the story. I appreciate both!
Comment from JW
This is a good chapter Bill. It was written very realistically and easily holds a reader's attention.
There is one sentence though that you may want to review.
We all went over took off our shoes..
There seems to be something missing here. JW
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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This is a good chapter Bill. It was written very realistically and easily holds a reader's attention.
There is one sentence though that you may want to review.
We all went over took off our shoes..
There seems to be something missing here. JW
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thanks for reading and the spot. I'll circle back and check that out. Bill
